Posts by Kian1378

Kian1378

Sep 22, 2014

Writing Feedback / Learning from facts and implementing ideas and concepts appropriately are necessary [2]

Do you agree or disagree with this sentence:
It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than to learn
Ideas, concepts and facts help people to adapt and understand developed technologies better. Facts are the results of observations which cannot change, but ideas and concepts are the creation of mind and result of our experiences, which cannot see directly. In my view facts and ideas or concept work as compliment to each other and they have same importance.

First, we know ideas and concepts make out based on facts because people get ideas through learning from facts. Only through learning facts we could easily understand ideas and concepts .For example, Newton knew this fact that apple fall on the floor and based on this fact he made the law of universal gravitation. If he did not notice this fact, how could he make this law? When a chemist makes a new combination, at first he knows the feature and differences of different materials and through these facts get an idea about making new combination.

Additionally, knowledge gains from facts without knowledge gained from ideas and concepts which are provided by experience of other people and creation of our minds will not give us a deep understanding of the world we live in, and so it would not be usable in real life situations. Indeed, ideas and concepts are important for implications of rule in our environment. For example, I learned the Ohm law in university but when my brother asked me to teach him how to measure the current of circuit by ohmmeter I could not answer him at first because I did not use this tool before. After a while, I understood by measuring the résistance of circuit by ohmmeter and using ohm law I can calculate the current of circuit. In fact, I got the concept and importance of ohm law in practical.

All in all, learning from facts and implementing ideas and concepts appropriately are necessary for the all-round learning of mankind.

Kian1378

Sep 22, 2014

Writing Feedback / Almost every new invention is somehow connected with the previous achievements in that field; GRE [4]

you can use some statement in beginning of every paragraph like: First, Second,Moreover, Additionally and In nut shell for last paragraph.

Kian1378

Sep 19, 2014

Writing Feedback / Life is easier? Positive view about everything always help us for having a good life in every times. [3]

Life always is difficult, and hardships appear in people's life in different aspects and backgrounds. In every time humans compete with limitations and make an effort to overcome obstacles. In one period of times having peace and security and in other period having enough foods or best facilities is a dream for people. Thus it is hard to make a fair judgment about life's condition of different generations and figure out which of them have easier life. In the following I will state my reasons for this choice.

In past time most of the people encountered with troubles for providing first requirements of their families because foods, water and other raw material in one side, and the technology for producing essential requirement in other side was restricted. Also, people had thin salary that caused they had not enough purchasing power. Additionally, medicine achievement was not enough to protect people from epidemic diseases. For example, my grandmother said me when she was a child; her family ate a meat just once a week and she lost two brothers due to epidemic disease. However, living in that time had its own advantages. For instance, population was not huge and finding job is highly competitive. People with little skills could get job. In addition they had much interaction with each other and social relations of people were strong. Also, People easily had access to natural environment and enjoyed from clean and fresh airs.

Today people have not difficulty for providing first requirements and overcome many diseases by developing knowledge of medicine. Now most of humans have high salary in comparison to the past times and enjoying from varied entertainment. For example, they can travel many places with best facilities. Children have their own cell phone, tablet and personal computers.

However other obstacles raised by passing times and people have new demands and requirements and try to compete with new limitations. for instances, living expense is increasing and people for using the educational and welfare facilities of society should spend more money. Furthermore, finding job transform to a drawback because with fast developing of technology in one side, and high population growth in other side, people should be up to date with new technologies and knowledge, and also try to do their best with jobs because if they cannot do, the other persons replace with them right away. Thus they always face to stress and anxious about catching jobs. Nowadays, by developing cities and technology people have virtual relation instead of real interaction and they live in pollution and busy environment. Thus many people have mental diseases more than physical disease due to depressions and stress of life which was rare in past.

All in all, every period of times has its advantages and disadvantages. But having a good feeling and positive view about everything always help us for having a good life in every times.

Kian1378

Sep 19, 2014

Writing Feedback / Keeping dogs and cats as companion. How it influences ownership and the community? [4]

you repeated some words and you should use different words.

Kian1378

Sep 19, 2014

Letters / 'self-study programming when i was 17' - letter of motivation for tubitak-2215 scholarship [2]

It is a good letter,I think you should mention your G.P.A and more explanation about your project. I think it is better to show your interested about new university and say why you choose that university.

Kian1378

Sep 17, 2014

Writing Feedback / 'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL [5]

Thank you for your great and helpful idea. I try to do my best

Kian1378

Sep 17, 2014

Writing Feedback / 'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL [5]

I rewrite my essay based on your idea about TOEFL format.

People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

The 21century lifestyle of over-work and almost no time for leisure is taking its toll on people. That is why people have many errands, those things they need to do, leave undone. Why is that? Well, I believe people would rather relax and de-stress via personal enjoyment rather than do thing they need to do in order to rest their bodies and minds. But the roles and effects of enjoyment in people's life are different because people have a different interpretation from personal-enjoyment. In the following I will state my reasons.

In first category, Enjoyment for people is a good way for resting their bodies and minds. If you consider a person who work in a company and he has to spend much time in front of computer in order to do his job. For this person going to gym or rest breaks between working times can be a personal-enjoyment. This kind of enjoyment is very helpful to human health and promotes the efficiency of person because sitting in front of computer for a longtime without any activity has negative effects on human's health. Recent researches show using computer all day can shorten life-expectancy. Thus company and person benefit from healthy personal-enjoyment and enjoyment has a correct concept.

Second category shows a group of people that interpretation of them about enjoyment going on a wrong way. Consider a person who has same conditions in his work but social network and surfing the web are the enjoyment for person. He always chats with his friends between working times and cannot concentrate on his job correctly. In this situation personal-enjoyment reduces the efficiency of person in his work and cause problems for his health. Because he should do his job correctly and has a sense of responsibility to his work and company in one side and he must has exercise and activity for his health. In fact the concept of enjoyment and spending too much time on personal-enjoyment is harmful.

Additionally, assume another group of people who just want to do every works for enjoyment without any goals in their life and always waste their times just for having fun. In this case, human has not important role in society and an important goal in his life. For example, I have one friend that never concentrates on her lesson and she just makes a plan to go shopping and has party with her friends. She always wastes her life and time for meaningless goal and finally university expel her.

All in all as you see above, the people have different interpretations of enjoyment and the roles of enjoyment are different in their life. In my view people should have a good balance among different aspects of their life because human is a social creature and it is important that everyone has an effective role in society and at the same time has enjoyment for having good mental and body conditions.

Kian1378

Sep 16, 2014

Writing Feedback / 'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL [5]

Do you agree or disagree with this sentence: People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

In modern world, people deal with many issues which intense anxiety and stress in their life in caparison to the past and it is natural reaction that increase the tendency of people toward personal enjoyment. Therefore I agree with this subject that today people spend too much time on personal enjoyment. But enjoyment has a different meaning for different persons and it depends on the condition of them. In the following I explain my reasons with examples.

First, consider a person who work in a company and he has to spend much time in front of computer in order to do his job. For this person going to gym or rest breaks between working times can be a personal-enjoyment. This kind of enjoyment is very helpful to human health and promotes the efficiency of person because sitting in front of computer for a longtime without any activity has negative effects on human's health.

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