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Name: Mandeep Singh
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samramandy   
Jan 9, 2015
Graduate / Responsibility as a lifelong member of the Mendoza community - To ask more of business! [3]

Please complete the following essay question. Create a file for your essay and include your name on each page. Your essay should be typed, double-spaced, and no longer than 2 pages.

Your responsibility as a lifelong member of the Mendoza community is to Ask More of Business - to exemplify individual integrity, organizational excellence, and a concern for the greater good. How do you plan to do this in your professional career?

Please let me know how can I improve the below essay. Inputs/suggestions are more than appreciated.

My work experience with Infosys, the second largest Indian IT services organization, gave me enough opportunities to test my organizational skills. I remember an instance when we had an AS9100 audit for our project. The audit was particularly significant because our client was a big three aircraft manufacturer and safety is of prime concern when it comes to aerospace clients. We already had an important deliverable lined-up and the audit was coinciding with a major software release of our project. Being the Configuration Controller of the project, I was in charge of the audit and thus, I wanted to leave no stone unturned in making the audit a success and hence made sure that all the project artefacts, documents and codes were proper and in place. Although I was under constant pressure because of the lined-up project release, I worked closely with other team-members and helped them in wrapping-up the audit work on time. On the day of the audit, the auditor was extremely satisfied with particularly our project and said that he could not find a single flaw in the way the whole project was managed. My manager not only became happy but appreciated the entire team in front of the delivery manager for the grand success of the audit. The clients have always been satisfied with our organizational excellence and thus, forthright in giving us more business.

Being the captain of our team in an organization level sports tournament in which more than sixty-four teams participated, I faced a number of situations in which my morals and values were challenged. But I am proud to say that I did not compromise my values even once. I remember the time when our entire team was at the top of its voice, shouting and celebrating. But somewhere down my heart, I felt it was not what we deserved. It was a Friday evening and we had just won our volley ball pre-quarter final match. Yes, you heard it right, we had won it!! But why was my mind in turmoil? Should not I also be celebrating? Our one of the strongest volleyball teams of the tournament had won over a crippled team whose two players could not make it to the match because of ill health. Who would call that a fair victory? So, being a captain, I decided that we will not go ahead with this victory and that we will ask the organizers for a rematch. Thus, I called the organizers and told them about the restlessness my conscience was going through and that we should give our opponents a fair chance. Even though the organizers were running on a tight schedule, they respected our decision and agreed to give us a rematch. Eventually, we played the rematch against the full strength team of our opponents and this time we won with serenity and a peaceful mind. After we won our rematch, we were appreciated for our gesture not only by the organizers but also by our opponents. The other team members in our team, who had asked me to still go ahead with the previous victory, felt really great after the appreciation they received and learnt a very important lesson in life along with me. I was the captain of our team for two consecutive years and fortunately led a team of more than thirty teammates to podium finishes on both the occasions. The victories became worthwhile when my teammates told me that, "It was an honour to have me as a captain once again."

It becomes every individual and organization's moral responsibility to work towards the improvement of the society as a whole. That is why I chose to be a part of the Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR) group of my organization and took part in a number of initiatives taken by the group. I was a part of the 'Note book drive' for three consecutive years in which we provided underprivileged kids with school bag kits consisting of notebooks and various stationery materials. In the first year, I was the funds collection anchor for food courts. In the second and third years, I was a part of the procurement team and logistics and distribution team respectively. Working with the CSR group of my organization helped me in developing a more balanced view of various strata of the society and its evolving needs. At the same time, being a part of philanthropic activities has helped me in staying humble and grounded, and keeping things in perspective.

The businesses are there not just for profits but they are there to help the greater mankind. Therefore, it behoves us to constantly stand firmly by our values and offer our services for the betterment of the society. Keeping the above things in mind, I have stood by my values until now and would always go out of my way to practise the above value traits in my personal life and professional career.
samramandy   
Jan 9, 2015
Research Papers / Solar Power Generator - the price is important [6]

The grammatically correct sentence is:

Solar power systems for houses are becoming more and more popular, and that their cost will be a big concern for everybody.
samramandy   
Nov 14, 2014
Graduate / Lessons learned as a team member from a failed project! [2]

Can you please help me with the following essay? What can be added/deleted from it to make it look better?

Explain what you have learned from your experience as a member of a team whose project was not completed successfully. Word limit - 500 words

I failed, I failed miserably! But, that is not what I am when I look back, a failure. I am much more than what that word describes. I spent the better of the last one year to set up a web-based startup in the domain of e-commerce, which is at the cusp of transformation in India, but unfortunately I failed. I felt the need to address a particular customer segment, which does not mind waiting for a specific product, if it is available at an attractive price tag or substantial discount. Based on some primary research, I quickly validated the idea - a tool which can allow customers to create their own shopping cart, place an order and defer their purchases until the product is available at a desired price. With the projected growth of the e-commerce/ e-retail business in India to reach $20 billion by the year 2020 from $2 billion currently, I saw a huge potential in the idea and decided to implement it.

Equipped with the idea of my startup, I embarked on a rollercoaster ride. Assembling the right team plays a significant role in a startup and can be detrimental to its success. Changing the team formation thrice proves that I have still not learned the art of selecting the right team. The third developer we hired stopped replying to our mails or answering our phone calls, we as a team had never expected it to happen especially when we were so close to the launch of our service. To our dismay, he even moved to a different place. It was even more painful to see a couple of other websites come up with a similar idea. Being the owner and Director of operations, I was responsible for this fiasco just like a captain is responsible for his sinking ship. After devoting significant amount of time, effort and money, I felt that more than anything else I squandered a great opportunity.

Not just I learned to manage a multicultural team but also learned some of the important following lessons through the above experience:
- Well laid plans can often go haywire. It is very useful to have back-up plans.
- Team formation plays a key role in a project's success.
- Time to market is very significant; otherwise a product/service can be rendered useless.
- Be prepared to improvise and think creatively or out of the box.
- Conviction plays a key role for a leader as everyone in the team looks up to the leader during uncertain times.

The one thing I am glad about myself is that the failure that the startup tagged me with was not a thing that stopped me from following my passion. Next time I go ahead and start my own company, I want to be equipped with better managerial knowledge and capability. Though I failed, I have a lot of lessons I learnt from this failure.

BR
Sam
samramandy   
Nov 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / Some international student choose American roommates. Others choose students from their own country. [4]

Firstly, you can significantly improve your essay by simple sentence formation.

Secondly, your essay is marred with grammatical mistakes.

if you want to possess a high English communication skills and understand more about American culture then American roommate would be the best option for you.

Grammatically correct version - if you want to possess great English communication skills and understand more about American culture then an American roommate would be the best option for you.

In actuality, when it comes to English and no one can do it better than the real native speaker

Grammatically correct version - In actuality, when it comes to English, no one can speak it better than a native speaker.

In terms of living with roommate in your country, it actually has some benefits as well.

A better version - On the contrary, there are innumerous benefits in staying with a roommate from one's own country.

There are a few more which you can easily spot if you look closely. Kindly go through the essay once again and try to correct them all :)

Would be there for any help you need :)
samramandy   
Nov 11, 2014
Graduate / What are your specific post-MBA short-term and long-term goals? Why Smith? Why an MBA? Why now? [20]

There you go! I am down to roughly 850 words now. The SOP looks better now it seems :)

From being hectored by kids bigger than me at school to being a victim of domestic violence at my home where the verbal abuses never used to take long to turn into flurries of fists between my parents, I learned to take a stand not just for myself but also for my mother by often protecting her from the vicious blows of my father after he used to get drunk. Fortunately, I never let my checkered past come in the way of my career or ambitions.

After completing Production Engineering from one of the top engineering colleges in India, I decided to work with Infosys Limited, the second largest Indian IT Company. However, I quit my lucrative job to start a web based start-up in the e-commerce domain. Although I failed in my startup venture, the lessons learned are indispensable.

During my recent failed startup experience, I often faced issues regarding strategy, marketing, operations, finance etc. and strongly felt the need for a mentor and formal education in business management. Pursuing an MBA now would give me an opportunity to fulfil the above mentioned two objectives. A business school will give me a chance to learn not only from the school curriculum and professors but also from the participants of the program who had similar experiences. Moreover, since I am broke now, investing in an MBA would have a significant impact on my professional upbringing.

With the world becoming a more interconnected place, calling it one big supply chain would not be incorrect and efficiently managing the constituent supply chains is even more challenging than it looks. Given the key role supply chains play in today's world, I would like to pursue a role as a Supply Chain or an Operations Analyst for a major manufacturing organization within the next five years. From there, I will give myself another two-three years to take on a Product Management role within the company. My work for over five years as an IT SAP PLM (Product Lifecycle Management) consultant, which has instilled in me a structured approach to problem solving, coupled with my entrepreneurial experience, which has taught me to work closely with a team in an ambiguous environment in a startup mode and a shoestring budget, has inculcated in me skills that would translate to my future profession.

In the long term, I would like to see myself in a key role wherein I could lead a substantial part of the business for the organization. Therefore, I see myself in a CxO role by being a principal contributor to the organization's success, not just in the country but worldwide. I would also like to contribute back to the society by staying involved in philanthropic initiatives through personal and professional means.

I chose Olin primarily for its dual degree program of MBA/MS in Supply Chain management and its small class size. The dual degree program would provide me with the right platform to make a career switch. Next, being an introvert, I tend to thrive and succeed more in a small classroom set up such as the one that Olin offers. The small class size would give me an opportunity to closely know each other and the professors, fostering lifelong relationships, which, I strongly believe, would transcend the boundaries of the school.

An MBA would help me to achieve three major objectives, which would make the career transition seamless for me. First, acquiring the theoretical knowledge of formal business education will significantly improve my understanding of the underlying business concepts. Second, the experiential learning process will allow me to implement the theories to the real world setups through consultation projects with sponsor companies. Finally, I will be able to gain an international perspective while growing my network of friends and contemporaries whose careers will flourish alongside mine, thus, providing us with a symbiotic working relationship in the future.

Coming from India and being a part of the Sikh community that represents only 0.4% population of the world, I would be able to increase the diversity of the class. Outside classroom, being a sports enthusiast, a regular long distance runner and a volunteer who succeeded in bringing a running culture in his workplace, I would like to be a part of the sports club, which organizes sports events at Olin. Also, since my belief of giving back to the society in one or the other way encouraged me to work with the CSR (Corporate Social Responsibility) group of my previous organization for three years, I would like to get associated with the Net Impact club of the school in my pursuit of uplifting the society as a whole. Given my experience as a trained folk dance (bhangra) artist and a member of the teams which organized employee engagement programs in my previous organization, I would like to be a part of the organizing team for cultural events at Olin.

Keeping in mind my short and long term goals, as well as the factors for choosing Olin, I am more than convinced that the program will be able to provide me with the necessary technical training, competency development and interdisciplinary business education to gain an advantage over my competitors in the future.
samramandy   
Nov 4, 2014
Graduate / What are your specific post-MBA short-term and long-term goals? Why Smith? Why an MBA? Why now? [20]

Hi Louisa,

Sorry for the late reply. I forgot to check for the email notification :(

The complete essay prompt is:

Explain why you are interested in pursuing your MBA at this point in your life. Specifically, explain how your chosen career specialization aligns with your short-term and long-term career goals.

But since you had already helped me in formulating my essay for short and long term goals, I did not provide the complete prompt essay prompt. The word limit of the complete essay is 500 words again.

I have the second part ready. But somehow I felt that my "Why now MBA" portion was not convincing enough. So I talked to a few friends and they guided me with it. Then I wrote it down and posted here for the expert comments, as you guys are always there for helping to improve further.

For the background -
1. I have 6 years of full time work experience as an SAP PLM consultant.
2. One year of failed startup experience.
3. And currently working with a US based startup as an online math teacher.
4. My interest is Supply chain or Operations management.

I know why I want an MBA(for a career switch), but I am not able to weave a convincing story for "Why now" part.

So need help for it :)

Awaiting your response again :)

BR
Mandeep
samramandy   
Nov 3, 2014
Scholarship / My motivation and commitment to return to Africa after graduation [4]

The content of your essay looks great. But you need to correct a few things here and there like in the very first line you said that we were thought, it should be taught!

Then it should be "A child that neglects" and not neglect!
samramandy   
Oct 25, 2014
Graduate / What are your specific post-MBA short-term and long-term goals? Why Smith? Why an MBA? Why now? [20]

In the short term, given my background as an undergraduate in Production Engineering, I would like to pursue a role as a Supply Chain or an Operations analyst for a manufacturing organization. Gradually I would like to move into a Product management role where I could use the skills acquired while working as a supply chain or an operations analyst. In product management, I would like to either increase the profitability of the existing products or develop new products based on my industry experience and contact with customers and prospects. My work for over five years as an IT SAP PLM (Product Lifecycle Management) consultant, which has instilled in me a structured approach to problem solving, coupled with my entrepreneurial experience, which has taught me to work closely with a team in an ambiguous environment in a startup mode and a shoestring budget, has inculcated in me skills that would translate to my future profession.

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