Prompt: My motivation and commitment to return to Africa after graduation and outline a brief proposal of my plans when I return.
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As a Nigerian, I carry the symbol of Africa and my country like a person craving for significant change, right from elementary education we were thought ''Arise O compatriots, Nigeria's call obey. To serve our fatherland, with love and strength and faith, the labour of our heroes past shall never be in vain. To serve with heart and might, one nation bound in freedom, peace and unity''- The Nigeria national anthem. This anthem has been a source of motivation to me right from elementary school, to value how to serve my fatherland.
Being a yoruba, one of yoruba proverbs said ''Omo to ba so Ile nu, o so apo I ya ko'' meaning ''A child that neglect his/her home or country, suspends a bag of suffering''. My commitment to returning to my Africa after my graduation from X university as a T scholar, is not only to serve my fatherland as an engineer but also to improve the standards of living by putting the theory I had gained in X university into practice through the development of equipment and collaborating with indigenous engineers toward working to support our country technologically.
''Education, a tool Africa needs to alter tangible change, economical and technological''- Myself.
As a person craving for significant changes, upon returning to Africa, the area of education empowerment I will pay more attention to, because many youths are out of school due to their low financial status, some which are forced into bad acts as they lack financial and academic supports. Supporting them financially and academically will make them focus on their studies rather than their financial burdens, which will give them the keys to unlock their desired goals.
In conclusion, It will be important to know that, my team of indigenous engineers and I will create poverty alleviation program that will give more job opportunities. This program will teach the youth and the old simple ways of manufacturing equipment, to make a living from, as our goal will be to offer selfless services to the people. The venturing of the youth into the poverty Alleviation program will reduce the activities of burglars and unemployed rates, as the venturing will also fend them a living and pave ways of providing for their family.
