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dejavu   
Apr 12, 2010
Student Talk / Looking for short writing exercise for beginner or elementary English learner [6]

i think the best topic should be: let them choose a picture that they like the most and then describe it. or the topic can be a story or their opinion about the books they have read in their languages, or a person that they are admired, or political issues. That's all i want to say. hope it can help
dejavu   
Apr 12, 2010
Writing Feedback / Should friends be honest to each other? [6]

What a good topic! for me, we first have to understand the true notion of friendship, which can be easily found in Aristotle's On Friendship, in which he characterizes friendship into three categoris, and the highest one is "frienship is for the sake of the others."
dejavu   
Apr 12, 2010
Writing Feedback / Mercy & Grace - eternal life, eternal punishment [7]

You have some great ideas on mercy. I just would like to add that, mercy should base on justice. If you have time, go ahead and read Plato's republic or Aristotle's N. ethics to know more about justice. Last thing to say is mercy is the highest form of justice. goodluck
dejavu   
Apr 21, 2008
Writing Feedback / An Unexamined life is not worth living - essay [2]

Really need help on the revise: grammar, idea...
Thanks in advance.


Through out generations, mankind has been asking themselves what is the purpose of life. And obviously, it would not easy for one alone to answer or explain what the meaning of life is. Nevertheless, one's life is monotonous if it is meaningless, and it is not monotonous if it has a purpose, a target to go. Thus, the question here is how one knows that his life is worth living or not? Socrates, the father of ancient philosophy, once stated, "An unexamined life is not worth living." In order to make one life becomes worth to live, this famous statement strongly addresses that one must exanimate himself first and then others in the society to find the meaning and happiness of life.

One has to exanimate himself every day to find the meaning of life and to live a worthy life. As we know, we are living in a world of "progress." It is important for one to know who he is, what he is doing. If not, one would not be able to live a good life. And one would not be able to find his purpose of life if he does not know what is his being truly for. Without examination, one would blind and lie to himself. One blinds himself means he does not know what he is doing is right or wrong. He just blindly does it. He sometime does things right. However, no body is perfect; very one has mistakes. If one does not examine himself, he would not be able to realize and fix his mistakes. He becomes frustrated and gradually steps deep into the whole of sin and darkness that he digs it up for himself.

On the other hand, when one does things right, he usually thinks that he is good and perfect; he would that his life is perfect and there is no need to correct or change the way it is. And this thought would make one easily becomes self- satisfaction. Therefore, we all have to keep in mind that time is passing and life changes day by day. One, who is not moving or making any changing to adapt to the new situations those suddenly come to life, is allowing bad thing to come up his life. Moreover, without changing, one will be left behind and he would not be able to find the way out by himself. His life now ends up with full of frustrations, hopeless, and unhappiness. There is no goal, purpose in his life anymore. Thus, it is important to know that one can only find the meaning for life when he continual seeks it; he has to move and let the changes be the tradition in his lifetime in order to live a worthy life.

However, one does examinations in his lifetime does not fully mean that he is living a worthy life. To some, examination is a thought of doing things with bad purpose or harm to others. On the other hand, for a virtuous person, examination, self-reflection is to gain knowledge, to seek for the common good, and especially to enrich the immoral soul. Soul means, as Aristotle's definition, the "spirit" or "the life principle of the body." In addition, "soul" which is translated from Latin means "anima." There is three parts of the soul, which are sense, courage, and intellect. In this division, the intellect is the primacy one. For example, we eat meat means we have to kill a live animal in order to get its flesh. This is sense part, The control part is when some body says that it is crude and wrong to kill animal and we are courage enough - sacrifice our need, hunger to eat vegetable instead. Nevertheless, this courage does not give us a truly happiness because we are being forced to do it. However, in the intellect part, we eat meat because we need food to survive. That means in intellect sees life has the purpose, the telo that is the end for a person. Thus, in order to be happy, a virtuous person has to examine and set his life according to the intellect because the intellect rules the whole body and enrich the soul.

Thus, an unexamined life and examined life with bad purpose would never find happiness in life. And an examined life, in order to find happiness and meaning of life, has to be based on the virtue of man. As Socrates, one said "the greatest good to discuss virtue everyday" (Plato, Apologia), for him, virtue is to live as an excellent human not a "being good." That means one only has a worthy life when he examines his life and never satisfy with what he has. Besides, one lives a worthy life when he never stopped seeking the happiness, improving his goodness, and approaching close to the perfection of the soul as much as he can. Ultimately, an "examined life" is not worth living when it does not enrich the soul in some ways. One would not be able to live a good life or find happiness if his examinations are not based on his virtue, which "animates" one life become a worthy being.

Furthermore, to live and to find a meaning of a worthy life, one cannot only do examination on his life, but he also has to examine others who is around him, especially in his society. As we know, every single living thing in the world needs to live in and with its society. Without the society, one would not be able to define himself in a properly way. One, who separates himself from other, lives like a wild island in the vastness of the ocean. Besides, when one lives a separated life, he would end up himself in the feelings of grandeur. He hardly accepts other's advice or suggestion, which obstructs him from receiving the knowledge from other. As mention above, examination not only helps us find the happiness, but it also helps us gain knowledge. For instance, Socrates went out in public places not only to ask, but also challenged other. What did he do that for? The answer is, when we asking other question, we can have the answer or opinions. The answers help us easy to examine other and make comparisons between others and us. Either their opinion is right or wrong, we still learn from it; learning from others mistakes. Through them, we are capable of knowing what is good and what can be applied to our life to make us to become a better and virtuous person in society.

Moreover, if one just examines his individual life and separates from others, he is lack of sensitiveness to the real and the truth of life. His life has no intentional destiny, bivouac, and ideal. It is full of mediocrity and tedium. It then becomes completely exteriorized with consequent loss of much power and peace. To illustrate this, in the "allegory of the cave" of Plato, a man who lives separated from the out side world and ends up in darkness. The only thing that he can see is the shadow on the wall. Looking at the shadow, he thinks it is the real thing without knowing that it is just a reflection of things by the candle. He just blindly accepts his faith without asking and exmainating what lies beyond the cave; he is announcing his happiness - meaning of life with being shackled.

However, at the end of the story, there is a man who shows him the way out of the cave to see the real world with true living thing. Therefore, when one examines himself only, it is easy for him to end up with illusion and imagination. He is not able to distinguish what is truth or fake and he commits himself to believe in the shadows. In other word, in order to get out of the cave, to discover the truly live, and to live a worthy live, one has to examine, discover, and philosophize those shadows for the real meanings of the out side world, the people in his society. Besides, one has to humble enough to listen to other because the things that we know are just like a drop in the ocean as Socrates, one said, "The only thing I know is I know nothing." Besides, when we examine our lives, we learn from our mistakes. Thus, when one examines the society that he lives in, it is not just helps him gain the knowledge, but it also changes his way of thought about thing in order to make him become more rational and worth living.

In conclusion, this statement of the "worth living life" reminds us, who are seeking for the meaning of life, that without life examination there was no point in living. Life examination helps us either our personal and spiritual growth. We are unable to grow toward greater understanding of our true nature unless we take time to examine and reflect upon our life. And those who reflect on their purpose in life would live a good life than those who exist without contemplating the alternative. We also have to keep in mind that, our lives are worth living when we know how to examine other and ourselves in our life to have complete answer for the meaning of life. Moreover, it is equally important to know that one's life happiness does not come from or depends on other. Other can only contribute the triggers our feeling, but we are the one that finds and produces our own happiness. Thus, one's life is worth living when he virtuously examines himself and others in order to find the meaning and happiness of life.
dejavu   
Jul 11, 2007
Grammar, Usage / Comparison Essay: Children to have siblings [4]

Thank for the reply Sarah.
Base on your suggestions, here is the essay that i'm working on it. Please check the grammar for me. ( I am really in need of it in 5 hours) Thank so much.

Sibling relationship is the most enduring one that any of us experiences, longer and less demanding than that of our parents, children or spouse; it is potentially longest relationship we will ever have.

Children who have brothers and sisters usually have more perspective of life than the only children. The sibling relationship can bring to children the differences between the views of live not just only from parents but it is also from their brothers and sisters. The first thing that children who have brothers and sisters can learn is how to share with others. Although sometimes children just want to keep something for theirs own, they have to think about their siblings before doing that every time. It is just like a conception of sharing. However, the only child in a family has all the things that given. They don't have to worry about their sibling who they have to share with or think about.

In early childhood, children who have brothers and sisters means they have companions and playmates, they can play the game together, have conversations, learn to interact with the community, and share problem with each other. Especially, they can take care of each other; the older can help the younger siblings with homework when parents go to work or have to do something else. In contrast, only children can receive more of their parents' attention, which may give them an advantage with help with homework, more playtime with dad or mom, and perhaps more or better toys, educational items, clothes, etc. because there is more money available. But, only children may not have the opportunity to socialize as much with other children. Days can be long with them, which can cause of depression.

In adulthood, when people get older, they usually find some one that they think they can share their memory about childhood. The only people who they can think of are their siblings who grew up with under a roof of family. It makes elderly feel comfortable and peaceful in the old age when they have some one that reminds them about their childhood. On the other hand, a possible disadvantage for only children when they get older is that they may not have a person to share with when their children have got married and raised their own families. Sometimes, only child has to struggle alone with his life.

In conclusion, only children is unique and special in family and may have higher self-esteem than others, however it is good for children to have brother and sisters because children with siblings learn to share, wait their turn, and perhaps take care of younger siblings, all of which are useful skills for their life in the future. And the relationships among brothers and sisters are infinitely varied, but whatever their characteristics, these bonds last throughout life.
dejavu   
Jul 10, 2007
Grammar, Usage / Comparison Essay: Children to have siblings [4]

Here is the topic
Comparison Essay: Do you think it is important for children to have brothers and sisters? if so, how many, Do you think that only children may be at a disadvantage when they get older? Why or Why not?

I really need some ideas or the outline that relate to this topic. Thanks in advantage.
dejavu   
Jul 2, 2007
Writing Feedback / "Life has been tough for me because I have to face many disappointments in it" - Narrative essay [NEW]

Any one here please help me with the grammar in this essay. Thanks in advance.

Topic:
Write a narrative essay about an interesting story from your life ( the scariest, most interesting, exciting, memorable)

Someone might have said "Life has been tough for me because I have to face many disappointments in it." So do I, sometimes I thought that my life is indeed an ocean of endless problems and disappointments; however, there is one of the disappointments that I have encountered is also my most interesting story in my life.

It was in the morning of May, I anxiously went to the DMV to take the driving test. After sitting more than thirty minutes, waiting and praying to the Lord for an easy driving test, an old short woman suddenly appeared and knocked at my car's window. I really did not pay much attention to her outfit when she stepped in or even say hi to her because I was so anxious. The first thing I heard from her is "Turn on the engine please".

The examiner instructed me how to get out the DMV's parking lot. When I reached nearly to the side walk, there was some thing that I had never expected; the pedestrian was walking by front of my car, but I had not had ware of that until I was just five feet away from them. Instinctively, I stepped on the break that caused of bending us toward the windshield. When everything seemed fine, I asked her softly and indistinctly, "are you ok?' She responded, "I am fine but do not do that again." It was just something made me realized that what just had happened was not a good impression to her.

Everything seemed going good and it was just a big relief for me to get out of that crowded place. I gradually pulled myself together on the road. When I was passing by the third block, I heard a siren. Looking back via the rear mirror, there was an ambulance was approaching from the behind. I did not know what to do next because there was no room along the street to park the car. In the blink of an eye, I decided to speed up; hopefully I could leave that ambulance behind. And I did. But it was not because of speeding up but because of that ambulance made a right turn.

After the ambulance vanished, I thought that was a really smart decision that I have made in my life, I confidently praise to myself. And it was full of my head that prevented me from hearing the instruction; the examiner wanted me to make a left turn into the middle lane. But I did not hear her clearly. So, I asked her to make sure which lane I should go. You know because it was close and I did not have much time to prepare or to have an imagination in my mind before getting that lane. My voice was kind of loud and by the way, English is not my first language. I said, "What?" instead of saying "Pardon me." She thought I was so mean, so she changed her mind and asked me to make a U-turn instead. I just drove for about five blocks away the DMV, making a U-turn that means the test was suppose to be over and I would fail the test. I pretended as I did not hear her. One more time, as a driver has to make his own decision while driving a car, I did not make any turn but I went straight toward. The examiner opened her eyes real big as if to show me how disappointed and scared she was and she slapped my arm rapidly and yelled at me "Make a U-turn, make a U-turn, please make a U-turn, you did not understand what I am saying young man?"

I failed the test because of lack of concentration, over speed, and mean to the examiner. Every time I recall these things, they really make me disappointed my self because of my bad decision. However I did passed the later test. And I am a good driver now; my parents don't have to worry much when sitting in my car anymore. Although I was really disappointed about the test result, it was something that reminds me to stand up every time I fell.
dejavu   
Jun 29, 2007
Essays / Essay about a humorous language problem [5]

Hi Sarah, Thanks for your help. Here is my essay that's based on your help. Hope you have some free time to check the grammar for me. I think i have lots of mistakes, so please brear with me ( the essay will be due on Mon, July 1st, 07) Thanks in advance.

Have you ever been laughed at because you said something silly in public? Can you imagine what it might be like to be the president of a country and have every word you say scrutinized by reporters and made fun of by late night comedians? Now imagine that you are in a foreign country trying to learn of second language. To be successful language learner student in a foreign country must to laugh at them because most certainly they will make many cultural and linguistic errors. ( Give 2 or 3 examples that well explain your points)

Native language is mother language, the one that we grew up with and use it every day. How's about a second language that we want to learn and capture? It takes time to master in a language. And "master" means we can speak, write, and be understood in that language.

I have taken two and a half years of English. I would not say that I definitely know English. Actually I grew up in a country that is non- English spoken. When I came to the US, I gradually understand that people at my age usually have problem with speaking, pronunciation. Sometime the syllables' stresses can make up some misunderstood, and yet homonyms can cause quite a lot of confusion too! From my own experience, last semester when I was doing the internship in a model shop. There was a stain on the model. I just wanted to use sandpaper to get rid of it. My colleague was passing by and said "Don't scratch ya nut." I looked up and thought "I didn't do it." In the lunch time, I recalled and realized that what he said was "Don't scratch, you are nut," not "Don't scratch your nut." Whether it's "ya" being mistaken for "you are" or some other pair of sound-alike, the potential for humor is there. From that experience, I learned the rhythm of English when people speaking.

English is a second language to me, I have probably encountered difficulties with the grammar many times. I always try to be creative in writing. Sometimes I bring some words in my language and try to put it in the English sentences. I thought their meanings are fit into those sentences. On the contrast, those words were not match up and broke down the meaning; however those mistakes have helped me a lot because once I am corrected means once I am taught how to use English in a proper way. Although I know that might bring to misunderstanding, I tried and would thank to whom corrected me.

Misunderstanding is kind of "not understand." It is sometimes not only frustrated to the person who is speaking, but it is also frustrated to the listener. Somehow the listeners want to ask again what they just heard. And they think they would be rude if they keep asking again and again. For instance, last semester, when the instructor asked "Wasn't Jonathan here yesterday?" I quickly responded "Yes." my instructor and classmates was quite confused because they and even I noticed that Jonathan didn't show up yesterday. They asked me one more time to make sure what I just said. In a blink of eyes, I knew that there was something wrong with my answer; I added "yes, he wasn't here yesterday." The instructor knows that English is my second language, so he said "that's the way of English, Vu."

I think most people get embarrassed when they make mistake in their second language, especially when they lead to misunderstandings about culture or language usage. In my opinion, Native speakers who keep asking when they don't understand are not rude because those are who helping and correcting second language learners. Besides, second language learner should not be frustrated and taking yourself too serious when you are making mistakes. Mistakes can really help you learn a foreign language better. If you are afraid of making mistakes, you'll be constantly editing yourself and never learn because "practice makes perfect."
dejavu   
Jun 26, 2007
Essays / Essay about a humorous language problem [5]

Thank so much for you help EF_team2. It is very helpful.
I have another question that i really want to ask that can anyone here give me some idea about my instructor's prompt?

Complete this writing with 2 or 3 well explained examples that support the point (Italic letters).
Have you ever been laughed at because you said something silly in pupblic? Can you imagine what is might be like to be the president of a country and have every word you say scrutimized by reporters and made fun of by late night comedians? now imagine that you are in a foreign country trying to learn a second language. To be successful language learner acquire a thick skin and be able to laugh at themselves because most certainly they will make many cultural and linguistic errors

Thanks,
dejavu   
Jun 25, 2007
Essays / Essay about a humorous language problem [5]

My instructor wants us to write an essay about a humorous language problem. It will be due on June 28
Here are some of his suggestions about this essay:
+ What are some words that cause problems for you in English? Why are they difficult?
+ Describe a situation in which you could not express yourself effectively in English. What did you do?
Be specific he told us a funny story about the "homonym" like f-l-o-w-e-r and f-l-o-u-r

Please give me some ideas on this one, Thanks in advance.
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