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Posts by Zoriana
Joined: Dec 6, 2014
Last Post: Dec 9, 2014
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Zoriana   
Dec 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / 'Organic food products and walking on foot' - many factors contribute to the length of human life [2]

TOEFL: People do many things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health?

Nowadays, many factors such as environmental pollution and intensive rhythm of life contribute to the length of human life. In order to resist aforementioned factors, people try to exercise regularly, eat healthy food or do other things that help to boost healthy condition. As for me, I prefer organic food products and walking on foot.

First of all, our health depends on the food we eat and air we breathe rather than on the quality of medicine. In order to stay healthy, I try to buy clean food products which are grown without using pesticides and other chemical substances. Usually, such food is marked with specific labels, thus it is easier to find it in the stores. Sometimes, I enjoy growing agricultural products myself as it makes me confident about the origin of the products. One more way to distinguish healthy food is to analyze the ingredients and expiration date as preservatives usually are the first sign of hazardous substances that could lead to diseases.

Moreover, going in for sports is one more opportunity to maintain my healthy condition. Through taking into consideration the amount of time it requires, I try to move as frequently as possible. For example, instead of using public transportation in order to get to home after exhaustive working day, I prefer walking on foot. During a walk, I can interact with people, observe the wonderful architecture around, I have never noticed before, listen to music and, what is more important, train my body.

Finally, I try to spend at least 7 or 8 hours per night sleeping. Dreaming helps to recover human immune system and energy as well as decrease the death rate. Therefore, if there is no urgent task, I try to sleep at least 7 hours in the night.

All things considered, healthy food accompanied by regular physical training and normal sleeping contribute the healthy condition. What is more important, the aforementioned approaches to healthy life are affordable to an average person regardless of her or his rhythm of life.

Zoriana SemehenĀ©
Zoriana   
Dec 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Modern children's game [4]

It seems to me that the first argument related to communication skills is far more comprehensible than the next one in the third paragraph. As far as I understand, you intended to describe the influence of modern games on social interaction.

I'd like also to emphasize some minor mistakes. E.g.:

engage lots of player

involve lots of players

to develop skills that need for children's learning, working and social lives

that are necessary for
In general, your essay is specific enough and structured logically.
Zoriana   
Dec 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Should land be developed or left in natural condition? [3]

I would recommend you to substitute some words in your essay with more relevant ones and fix some mistakes. E.g.:

... raise issues of balance ofbetween human interests and ...

size of landplot that can be granted by the local government

In general, I would say that your essay is very specific with numerous examples as it should be. Well done!
Zoriana   
Dec 6, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Ability to read and write - today, those basic skills make society more comfort for living. [4]

Is the ability to read and write more important today than in the past? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Through centuries the ability to read and write was the basic skill of any intelligent person though it was not necessary in different circumstances. Due to the technological breakthrough, aforementioned abilities have become a vital characteristic of not just clever man but free and independent personality as well. Therefore, from my point of view, nowadays, eagerness to read and write perfectly is more important than it was any time before. The reasons for this position are provided below.

First of all, ability to read and write indicates person's intellectual level. If one is able to read and analyze stories from newspapers and magazines, he or she stimulates his or her personal development. Today, when the whole world immersed in the information revolution, data is everywhere. Without reading and learning, it is difficult to discover daily news, orientate in the environment or even find highly paid job. As follows, ability to read and write is an integral feature of a successful person.

Secondly, in the past, tyrannical governments were not likely to facilitate human literacy because it would cause raise in human consciousness. Usually, "intelligent people" means "free people" who have articulated position and are aware of their rights. For example, in some tyrannical countries in the contemporary world it is much easier to intimidate people as they usually do not have an opportunity to attend schools or other educational establishments and do not know how to defend themselves.

All things considered, a person who learns to read and write improves his or her possibility to be engaged into the civil processes, be successful and competent. Today, those basic skills make society more comfort for living. Moreover, with people growing, society becomes more civilized contributing to human legal awareness and efficient education system.

Zoriana SemehenĀ©
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