Posts by jagdeep5171

jagdeep5171

Dec 25, 2014

Undergraduate / MIT ESAAY || WHICH DEPARTMENT APPEALS YOU MOST AND WHY || HELP- need to improve [5]

m sorry but i never developed a program but just saw them and try to learn from them

jagdeep5171

Dec 25, 2014

Undergraduate / MIT ESAAY || WHICH DEPARTMENT APPEALS YOU MOST AND WHY || HELP- need to improve [5]

I have prepared a sample but it exceeds word limit and lacks continuity. I really could use some help.

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 words or fewer)

I have always been fascinated by computers. My father himself owned a small computer shop where I would go and play with the parts. He would not let me touch new computers or ones which were put for selling. I would put my hands to whatever I could get, software or machines and try to experiment with them without guidance.

As I grew up this curiosity grew and I always wanted to major in Computer Science but could not get the chance in recent college years. I always do whatever I could to feed my curiosity by sitting with CS students and experimenting on my laptop.

Computers is my field of interest and it appeals me most

jagdeep5171

Dec 16, 2014

Undergraduate / Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it - MIT ESSAY; BUSY LIFE AND ACTIVITY [7]

HEY GUYS, I HAVE PREPARED ONE ESSAY BASED UPON YOUR SUGGESTIONS BUT I STILL THINK IT NEEDS MUCH EDITING AND I AM ALSO NOT SURE ABOUT THE LAST LINE. PLEASE SUPPORT

Agree it or not, our life is full of monotonicity. What gives me pleasure is to break this monotonicity and travel to different places. Travelling alone is my thing. I travel to different cities, through different towns and villages. India is a mosaic of cultures, races and creed. While travelling I can extend my knowledge of this diversity. Travelling is the time when I can relax, reflect and ponder. It helps me forget my daily stuff and give me time to introspect and grasp from my surroundings. On my travels I have seen the culture changing with every foot.

jagdeep5171

Dec 14, 2014

Writing Feedback / Students spending time studying, but what about physical activities? [5]

you want to support it or criticize it?? i mean what do u need argument for??

jagdeep5171

Dec 14, 2014

Undergraduate / Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it - MIT ESSAY; BUSY LIFE AND ACTIVITY [7]

thanks for your help

but i am really concerned about word limit... its just 100 words...

jagdeep5171

Dec 14, 2014

Undergraduate / Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it - MIT ESSAY; BUSY LIFE AND ACTIVITY [7]

I am a traveller, I love travelling to places and it really gives me a lot of pleasure. But I am really confused about how to put this in words. I mean I have the points I know I can put in my answer but still I am really confused about the words and way to put it on. Any help sorting it out would be highly appreciated. Any critics and suggestions would also be thanked. Thank you in Advance.

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

Travelling alone- this gives me escape from my own world
Travelling to different cities really gives me pleasure and happiness.
India has a diverse culture so while travelling I can experience the diversity
I love to interact with new people. See their culture, language, dressing.
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jagdeep5171

Dec 14, 2014

Writing Feedback / Will Artificial Intelligence Mark the End of Humanity? [2]

Well I dont think so that it would mark the end of Humanity instead it might mark the end of most of human efforts and labor. Like we can say the ANDROID we use in our smartphones is kindda AI itself and it has reduced our efforts unexpectedly.

jagdeep5171

Dec 14, 2014

Undergraduate / I was never interested in college because I had no aim in life. Common App Transfer Essay [5]

Instead, I went to a community college for the past two years since money was tight.

It must be "since i was tight on money"

Rest I think its okay.

jagdeep5171

Dec 11, 2014

Undergraduate / MIT Cultural Background Essay || INDIA || SIKH [5]

Modewap: I think its 99 words including that greeting part. Any other suggestions??
Does that greeting part looks awkward??

jagdeep5171

Dec 11, 2014

Undergraduate / MIT Cultural Background Essay || INDIA || SIKH [5]

I am going to apply for regular action this year and i am not sure what to write about in this particular column.

This is what I have decided to submit so far
NEED SUGGESTIONS IF I AM MISSING SOMETHING.

Hello! Namaste! SatShriAkal! AsalamWalekum!!!
As an Indian I am proud of its Rich and Diversified Culture. Ours culture is an amalgamation of several cultures, people and religions. My grandparents moved to India during Indo-Pak division in 1947 and has worked very hard to earn their livings. I belong to a middle class Sikh family in Rajasthan State and like most of the males in my family I am also a "Turbanator". We enjoy celebrating "Diwali- festival of Lights", "Holi- festival of Colors", "Baisakhi, Lohri, and Guruparb - Sikh festivals", " Eid-ul-Fitar", "Christmas "," Indian Independence Day and Republic Day".

I DONT KNOW HOW TO USE HEAVY WORDS AND I DON'T HAVE A GOOD LITERARY WORD POWER SO I HAVE JUST KEPT IT SIMPLE.