HopefulHoya2015
Dec 31, 2014
Undergraduate / A CREATIVE RESPONSE TO POMONA SUPP. - A MOCK SYLLABUS [3]
You do realize that you have till midnight tomorrow right?
You do realize that you have till midnight tomorrow right?
HopefulHoya2015
Dec 31, 2014
Undergraduate / History is alive - Areas of Study Brown essay [2]
Could you guys please help me with this essay? I have pretty much everything, but I can find a sentence to wrap it up. Also can you tell me if it's good, bad, brilliant, atrocious etc.
Prompt: Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated in our Member Section, earlier in this application? If you are "undecided" or not sure which Brown concentrations match your interests, consider describing more generally the academic topics or modes of thought that engage you currently. (150-word limit)
I love history because it is alive. When some people look at history all they can see are a set of mundane facts to be learned, memorized, and promptly forgotten. History fascinates me for the opposite reasons. When I look at history I don't see lifeless dates and monolithic texts. I see people, nations, and empires long past bursting with life just waiting to tell me their stories and their secrets. When I read about historical figures I can hear their voices speaking to me about their actions, their motivations, and their desires in voices that are just as clear now as they were then. I love history because it is my time machine. Through it I can travel to Ancient Greece or 15th century England and broaden my world view without ever leaving my bedroom.
Please Help!
Could you guys please help me with this essay? I have pretty much everything, but I can find a sentence to wrap it up. Also can you tell me if it's good, bad, brilliant, atrocious etc.
Prompt: Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated in our Member Section, earlier in this application? If you are "undecided" or not sure which Brown concentrations match your interests, consider describing more generally the academic topics or modes of thought that engage you currently. (150-word limit)
I love history because it is alive. When some people look at history all they can see are a set of mundane facts to be learned, memorized, and promptly forgotten. History fascinates me for the opposite reasons. When I look at history I don't see lifeless dates and monolithic texts. I see people, nations, and empires long past bursting with life just waiting to tell me their stories and their secrets. When I read about historical figures I can hear their voices speaking to me about their actions, their motivations, and their desires in voices that are just as clear now as they were then. I love history because it is my time machine. Through it I can travel to Ancient Greece or 15th century England and broaden my world view without ever leaving my bedroom.
Please Help!
HopefulHoya2015
Dec 31, 2014
Undergraduate / C for commitment (Lehigh University-if your name were an acronym) [5]
I think you need to talk more about you in this essay. This seems more about your father than about you. Maybe devote less words to your father and more to you??
I think you need to talk more about you in this essay. This seems more about your father than about you. Maybe devote less words to your father and more to you??
HopefulHoya2015
Dec 31, 2014
Undergraduate / I was different because I had a sister - Identity essay. [11]
You are right to be concerned about this essay. It shows little of your character and your personal self. It's more about you sister than it is about you and doesn't really tell me much about your background. I think you need to go over it again and try and infuse more about you and "your background" like the prompt asks.
You are right to be concerned about this essay. It shows little of your character and your personal self. It's more about you sister than it is about you and doesn't really tell me much about your background. I think you need to go over it again and try and infuse more about you and "your background" like the prompt asks.
HopefulHoya2015
Dec 29, 2014
Undergraduate / "Stress-relief baking" - It provides a cathartic release for all the stressful emotions [5]
Any other opinions? Any kind of helpful criticism is welcomed.
Any other opinions? Any kind of helpful criticism is welcomed.
HopefulHoya2015
Dec 28, 2014
Undergraduate / "Stress-relief baking" - It provides a cathartic release for all the stressful emotions [5]
Yeah, that's right I did mean "tapping" ^_^ I'm so glad you liked it. And totally, just send me the address :D
Yeah, that's right I did mean "tapping" ^_^ I'm so glad you liked it. And totally, just send me the address :D
HopefulHoya2015
Dec 28, 2014
Undergraduate / "Stress-relief baking" - It provides a cathartic release for all the stressful emotions [5]
Hi everyone! I need some constructive criticism on my UVA essay. I'm kind of ambivalent about it, however I am also a person who never likes what she writes no matter how good someone else might say it is. Anyway I just need a little help.
Prompt: "We are a community with quirks, both in language and in traditions. Describe one of your quirks and why it is part of you."
It's the night before my calculus final. I am standing in my kitchen- back hunched, feet taping out a nervous rhythm on the floor as my eyes dash over the pages of my textbook in an attempt to remember the formulas I'll need for the exam tomorrow. My hands keep time with the patter of my feet as they busily mix a bowl of what's shaping up to be a promising batch of chocolate chip cookies. People have many different ways of relieving their stress. Some scream, cry, or hit their pillows in frustration; I like to bake. Stress-relief baking, as I like to call it, is my way of relieving all of my worries. It provides a cathartic release for all the stressful emotions that might threaten to overwhelm me. Baking occupies my hands, but focuses my mind. It's strange, but the simple act of my hands kneading a ball of dough allows me to concentrate and keep my motivation high. Sometimes I even assign different baked good for different occasions. Snickerdoodles for finals, brownies for essays, or apple pie if I'm having a busy week. However baking isn't for just relieving any stress I might feel. I love to share my quirk with others because I've found it relieves not only my stress, but that of others as well. Giving someone a fresh baked cookie never fails to put a smile on their face. So don't be surprised if you see me handing out cookies around finals; I'm just relieving my stress- one baked good at a time.
Hi everyone! I need some constructive criticism on my UVA essay. I'm kind of ambivalent about it, however I am also a person who never likes what she writes no matter how good someone else might say it is. Anyway I just need a little help.
Prompt: "We are a community with quirks, both in language and in traditions. Describe one of your quirks and why it is part of you."
It's the night before my calculus final. I am standing in my kitchen- back hunched, feet taping out a nervous rhythm on the floor as my eyes dash over the pages of my textbook in an attempt to remember the formulas I'll need for the exam tomorrow. My hands keep time with the patter of my feet as they busily mix a bowl of what's shaping up to be a promising batch of chocolate chip cookies. People have many different ways of relieving their stress. Some scream, cry, or hit their pillows in frustration; I like to bake. Stress-relief baking, as I like to call it, is my way of relieving all of my worries. It provides a cathartic release for all the stressful emotions that might threaten to overwhelm me. Baking occupies my hands, but focuses my mind. It's strange, but the simple act of my hands kneading a ball of dough allows me to concentrate and keep my motivation high. Sometimes I even assign different baked good for different occasions. Snickerdoodles for finals, brownies for essays, or apple pie if I'm having a busy week. However baking isn't for just relieving any stress I might feel. I love to share my quirk with others because I've found it relieves not only my stress, but that of others as well. Giving someone a fresh baked cookie never fails to put a smile on their face. So don't be surprised if you see me handing out cookies around finals; I'm just relieving my stress- one baked good at a time.
