History is alive - Areas of Study Brown essay

Could you guys please help me with this essay? I have pretty much everything, but I can find a sentence to wrap it up. Also can you tell me if it's good, bad, brilliant, atrocious etc.

Prompt: Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated in our Member Section, earlier in this application? If you are "undecided" or not sure which Brown concentrations match your interests, consider describing more generally the academic topics or modes of thought that engage you currently. (150-word limit)

I love history because it is alive. When some people look at history all they can see are a set of mundane facts to be learned, memorized, and promptly forgotten. History fascinates me for the opposite reasons. When I look at history I don't see lifeless dates and monolithic texts. I see people, nations, and empires long past bursting with life just waiting to tell me their stories and their secrets. When I read about historical figures I can hear their voices speaking to me about their actions, their motivations, and their desires in voices that are just as clear now as they were then. I love history because it is my time machine. Through it I can travel to Ancient Greece or 15th century England and broaden my world view without ever leaving my bedroom.

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History is alive. To some history is just a set of mundane facts to be learned, memorized, and promptly forgotten. When I look at history I don't see lifeless dates and monolithic texts. I see people, nations, and empires long past bursting with life just waiting to tell me their stories and their secrets. When I read about Abraham Lincoln I can hear the timbre of his voice, feel the passion of his words, and see the age-old wisdom on his face. I love history because it is my time machine. (you already show your love for history in this essay, you shouldn't feel the need to obliquely state it, find another way to phrase how history is a time machine without stating "i love history because..") Through it I can travel to Ancient Greece or Renaissance-era Italy and broaden my world view without ever leaving my bedroom. Above all, history is my passion because there is always something different to learn, to discover, to analyze. I can always be the inquisitive scholar constantly hunting for more.