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Pedram

Apr 4, 2015

Writing Feedback / Nowadays internet courses are more and more popular - how it impact on the traditional education? [NEW]

Hi, everybody

I would be appreciated anyone helps me to correct and revise my essay.

These days Internet based courses have become a popular alternative to university based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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As is commonly understood wide use of internet in our life, this has been seen in Education as well. Nowadays, internet courses become a common replacement of university based courses. Many like to join online courses, due to they do not need to participate in class, however, others assert that study at university is essential. Both sides will be critiqued before a reasoned conclusion is found.

Some believes that online courses are good replacement for university and it is stated by using online courses they do not need to join the class so everyone can study. For instance, a mother who has to care her children and dose not has time to go to university or a worker who works all times to make a living therefor doesn't has time to continue his education. When looking these examples, there is no doubt that the reason for online courses is logical and thus by relying of internet will create an opportunity for everyone to study.

It is felt by many that online courses will not be a choice instead of university. It is claimed that during university course, we have student-student and also teacher-student interaction, which play significant role in education. Furthermore the atmosphere of class will motivate and encourage students to focus on their own courses. For example, homework and group activity make student more responsible about its course. This claim clearly proves the usefulness of university which cannot replace with online courses.

After hashing out the pros and cons of these two points of view, it is believed that online courses is not a suitable alternation for university and it can be considered as supplement courses, although in the years to come maybe internet could progress enough to perform such a university.

Pedram

Apr 4, 2015

Essays / Help me to find samples of essay for financial aid application [6]

you should write something that show you could study well and you have to spend your time to make a living for example:

I know that my classmates are all studying and enjoying their spring break, but I don't envy them; I'm excited to start my day interning with a local newspaper doing investigative journalism. I work a typical 8-5 day during my spring vacation and despite the early mornings, nothing has made me happier...

You know how better write
Good Luck

Pedram

Jan 26, 2015

Writing Feedback / Essay writing; Parents should send children to school or not to be good members of society . [5]

Hi, Sekar

Thank you so much for your suggestions that were so useful for my writing.

Can we state a lie survey in order to support our idea by saying number and percentage ?
"In 2003, US recorded that about 7,7 million American children is taught practically about fair competition through school's sport team"

I didn't get your means about " main recommendation of the issue ". I would be most grateful if you would write conclusion for this topic too.

Thank you for your help.

Pedram

Jan 23, 2015

Letters / Making a cover letter for summer internship in finance - someone with some experience? [25]

Hello 24mandrake,

I read your cover letter. I think, you should put your contact information in the above right hand of the latter and don't mention in sentences. And also "As a sophomore majoring in English" is not enough to show your interest, reason and eagerness to pursue your internship with Cash Group.

For showing your experience and link them with this application you can use of similar things. For example, your experience is about your major and also this application is related to your major.

" As indicated on the enclosed resume, ~~I have much to offer to Cash Group.~~ I have worked in a consulting group since graduating. This internship have helped me to develop resilience ability to work under pressure, such as with impending deadlines and for prominent clients. The attention for details and the importance of working to real goals. My major always has priority in my life, which interest me to work as a Elaboration of Economical and Political articles writer in a local newspaper for a long time.This position helps me to acquire new skills that lead me to write a book on money laundering and corporate fraud.

I know you can write better than me so its up to you ...

Good Luck!
you

Pedram

Jan 21, 2015

Writing Feedback / Essay writing; Parents should send children to school or not to be good members of society . [5]

Hi, every body,

It's first time that I am using this site and I would like to receive your correction and also your suggestions to improve my essay writing.

Thanks in advance.

Pedram
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Subject:
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

(At least 250 words)

Some researchers believe that parents play important rule of children socialization and others rely on their causes, mentioned school as a place where has power to lead children to be efficient in society. Each group cites their own reasons in order to convince others.

The group which claim that we should send our children to school to socialize cite their own reasons for convince others. They think being in school helps children to conflict with each other which allows them to experience a real relationship. In addition, they learn to work in group and follow orders of a leader which they won't acquire at home with their own parents who love them too much.

In the other hand some believe that parents have efficient effect on upbringing of children to be good member of society. In their opinion, due to the deep relationship between parents and children and also much time that they are together, parents can understand their own children personality which causes to help children effective in order to improve their skills. Another possible explanation is parent's compassion, which cares and controls children all time.

To summarize, both groups who claim that send children to school and those mention children should stay at home have convincing reasons but in my opinion school will be a better place to make children socialize. Furthermore they will have time to stay with their own parents after school time.