justivy03
Apr 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / As the media are growing, their influence are becoming more widely [2]
Hi,
Kindly find my help below;
As the media are(IS) growing, their influence are(IS) becoming (more- DELETE) wide(ly-DELETE). This is why many people argue that (people- EXCESSIVE USE OF THE WORD, REPLACE WITH "it") will be difficult to avoid the impact of (the - DELETE) media in our daily activities.
... I strongly believe that nowadays the media help people(S) life(LIVES) become more easily(EASY) because this provides many ...
... reduce face-to-face interaction of people in as much ( MIND CHARACTER SPACING) as they can communicate using ...
As it can be seen from the instance, the media (have been- DELETE, REPLACE WITH "has") replaced the function of ...
... media causes the number of crimes increase(s-DELETE) dramatically. There are about 20 cybercrime cases every day(EVERYDAY), and it indicates that (...) sending blackmail(, - DELETE) or stealing credit card's(CARDS) personal identity number.
... there are many advantages that the media provide in people(S) daily lives. First(ly - DELETE), the media help people keep ...
... to communicate such as Facebook, Twitter(, - DELETE) or Instagram. Second(ly - DELETE, SUGGEST USING, "Next"), the media assist people to ...
... and all of the lessons or tricks will (be - DELETE) appear(ed - DELETE). Also, the media can be use(d - ONGOING ACTION) to optimize the learning and teaching ...
Video tutorial for instance, it(IT'S) always (be-DELETE) used by teachers to teach ...
All in all(SUGGEST TO REPLACE THE WORD WITH,"In conclusion") despite the disadvantage (...) and make people(S) work finish easily.
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"till then, Cheers!!!
Hi,
Kindly find my help below;
As the media are(IS) growing, their influence are(IS) becoming (more- DELETE) wide(ly-DELETE). This is why many people argue that (people- EXCESSIVE USE OF THE WORD, REPLACE WITH "it") will be difficult to avoid the impact of (the - DELETE) media in our daily activities.
... I strongly believe that nowadays the media help people(S) life(LIVES) become more easily(EASY) because this provides many ...
... reduce face-to-face interaction of people in as much ( MIND CHARACTER SPACING) as they can communicate using ...
As it can be seen from the instance, the media (have been- DELETE, REPLACE WITH "has") replaced the function of ...
... media causes the number of crimes increase(s-DELETE) dramatically. There are about 20 cybercrime cases every day(EVERYDAY), and it indicates that (...) sending blackmail(, - DELETE) or stealing credit card's(CARDS) personal identity number.
... there are many advantages that the media provide in people(S) daily lives. First(ly - DELETE), the media help people keep ...
... to communicate such as Facebook, Twitter(, - DELETE) or Instagram. Second(ly - DELETE, SUGGEST USING, "Next"), the media assist people to ...
... and all of the lessons or tricks will (be - DELETE) appear(ed - DELETE). Also, the media can be use(d - ONGOING ACTION) to optimize the learning and teaching ...
Video tutorial for instance, it(IT'S) always (be-DELETE) used by teachers to teach ...
All in all(SUGGEST TO REPLACE THE WORD WITH,"In conclusion") despite the disadvantage (...) and make people(S) work finish easily.
*****************************************************************************************************************************************************
Ainun, proof read your answer before submitting, this really helps a lot, mind the punctuation marks too and a little help on vocabulary via our trusted friend at Miriam Webster will not hurt.
"till then, Cheers!!!