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Sep 24, 2015
Undergraduate / Makeup is my weak spot- Common App Essay [8]
I have listened to your advice very seriously and have come up with a new introduction. Of course, since my essay continued on the theme of the intro, I've had to make numerous changes throughout the essay and am still deciding how to phrase couple things.
I could feel my friend's glare emanating across the packed theater. I scurried into my seat, flinging popcorn all over the floor. Getting ready had taken longer than I had anticipated. I would blend into the audience like every other person, yet I took as much time getting ready as if I would at my wedding.
"You're late!" she hissed/grumbled. The movie began ten minutes ago, but all I could think about was my perfectly symmetrical eyeliner.
I discovered my passion for makeup in the seventh grade after watching my first tutorial on YouTube: Peacock Eye Makeup. Since then, I've loved playing with makeup. I grab every opportunity I can to experiment with different techniques/looks. I keep practicing until I perfect my skill. Over the years, I've mastered the art of contouring, strobing and the cat eye. It's no surprise I'm usually the most overdone/*in search of a better word person in the room.
"Last time you're late", I scolded myself. This was highly unlike me. I'm the girl who arrives early, never rushing to reach at the last minute. I'm the biology nerd who teaches herself the curriculum over the summer. And I'm not self-absorbed. I aspire to become a doctor to help others and will persevere through any challenges I face.
The last thing I want to be considered as is frivolous because I like to look pretty and love makeup. I enjoy being that girl who interns at a clinic, writes blogs and travels to refugee camps. I finish my work early and religiously follow my meticulous schedule. I consider myself a mature individual with a realistic outlook on life. In fact, I pride myself for having my priorities straight.
However, makeup is my weak spot. I love the confidence it inspires in me. It gives me the power to express myself artistically. Many believe makeup is for those insecure about their flaws, but I disagree. Makeup isn't about hiding, it's about highlighting. It's an art for both the subtlest and the most dramatic transformations. Most importantly, it's fun. I'm not going to lie: most days I'm in sweats and my dad's oversized t-shirts, but sometimes it feels good to glam up. It's incredible how a full face of makeup makes me feel like I could conquer the world/my day ten times better/makes me feel so powerful. *make stronger sentence.
I love the drivenness my nerdy side brings out of me. It compels me to excel in every aspect of my life. Although I strive for a career in medicine, I love that I have much to learn about and from the world of makeup. Makeup allows me to escape the demands of real life. It is my haven for solace in and away from home. Without it, my life would not be half as wonderful as it is today. My personality would be incomplete without both my nerdy and free-spirit side. They have united to make me the creative and ambitious person I am today. I know I will become a successful doctor but one rocking winged eyeliner and killer cheekbones.
I have listened to your advice very seriously and have come up with a new introduction. Of course, since my essay continued on the theme of the intro, I've had to make numerous changes throughout the essay and am still deciding how to phrase couple things.
I could feel my friend's glare emanating across the packed theater. I scurried into my seat, flinging popcorn all over the floor. Getting ready had taken longer than I had anticipated. I would blend into the audience like every other person, yet I took as much time getting ready as if I would at my wedding.
"You're late!" she hissed/grumbled. The movie began ten minutes ago, but all I could think about was my perfectly symmetrical eyeliner.
I discovered my passion for makeup in the seventh grade after watching my first tutorial on YouTube: Peacock Eye Makeup. Since then, I've loved playing with makeup. I grab every opportunity I can to experiment with different techniques/looks. I keep practicing until I perfect my skill. Over the years, I've mastered the art of contouring, strobing and the cat eye. It's no surprise I'm usually the most overdone/*in search of a better word person in the room.
"Last time you're late", I scolded myself. This was highly unlike me. I'm the girl who arrives early, never rushing to reach at the last minute. I'm the biology nerd who teaches herself the curriculum over the summer. And I'm not self-absorbed. I aspire to become a doctor to help others and will persevere through any challenges I face.
The last thing I want to be considered as is frivolous because I like to look pretty and love makeup. I enjoy being that girl who interns at a clinic, writes blogs and travels to refugee camps. I finish my work early and religiously follow my meticulous schedule. I consider myself a mature individual with a realistic outlook on life. In fact, I pride myself for having my priorities straight.
However, makeup is my weak spot. I love the confidence it inspires in me. It gives me the power to express myself artistically. Many believe makeup is for those insecure about their flaws, but I disagree. Makeup isn't about hiding, it's about highlighting. It's an art for both the subtlest and the most dramatic transformations. Most importantly, it's fun. I'm not going to lie: most days I'm in sweats and my dad's oversized t-shirts, but sometimes it feels good to glam up. It's incredible how a full face of makeup makes me feel like I could conquer the world/my day ten times better/makes me feel so powerful. *make stronger sentence.
I love the drivenness my nerdy side brings out of me. It compels me to excel in every aspect of my life. Although I strive for a career in medicine, I love that I have much to learn about and from the world of makeup. Makeup allows me to escape the demands of real life. It is my haven for solace in and away from home. Without it, my life would not be half as wonderful as it is today. My personality would be incomplete without both my nerdy and free-spirit side. They have united to make me the creative and ambitious person I am today. I know I will become a successful doctor but one rocking winged eyeliner and killer cheekbones.