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Name: Charlottefang
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Last Post: Dec 15, 2015
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Charlottefang   
Dec 15, 2015
Writing Feedback / Why people choose to go to a college or university more than the past time? [5]

Hi RosaKar,

Nowadays, having a high education is part of everyone's life in most societies. Many people go to college and start studying in different fields; the number of these individualsCOLLEGE STUDENTS is getting more and more every day. There are various reasons why going college has become popular, and I will be addressingEXPLAIN THIS PHENOMENON BY PRESENTING three important factors in this essay.

I think you didn't really mention why teachers had to change their ways of teaching in order to meet current need. What need? Why did then change? Maybe it's because the society has changed to be intellectual-driven instead of labour-driven.

First of all, going to college supports people'S future careers. Our daily lives become more specific and complicated every day, and we have to learn about how to survive in this intricate condition. For example, when I was a child, an education system was soRATHER simple.

... and explained the new lesson to us in the classroom,; but today every elementary teacher ...
Charlottefang   
Dec 14, 2015
Letters / Absorbing breadth of knowledge to fulfil my background - motivation letter for Holland Scholarship [10]

Hi @ vangiespen, thank you so much!

I rewrote a bit based on your suggestions:

Despite of tight financial situation, I have been quite fortunate to be able to enrich myself in terms of humanities, which has fueled me to further my educational goal in studying International Studies at Leiden University.

In order to help people appreciate other ways of aesthetics in the future, I have devoted my time to improve my artistic skills. In high school, due to my achievement on paintings, I was rewarded an annual scholarship, which funded my short trip to Edinburgh; during that month, I was inspired greatly by sketching, visiting museums and studying in libraries. Later in my college time, I was among the top 10%, at the entrance exam of National Taiwan University of Arts in fine arts department. At the first year, I was selected to exhibit my painting with many third-year students in our annual display.

Languages are as well important in terms of understanding the subtle meanings of literature, drama and other things relevant to cultures. My learning curve of English, for example, proved my potentialities in linguistics. In high school, at first I was not fond of English, yet as a voracious reader with a determination to absorb a wider knowledge, I gradually learnt to read English literature without translations. By the time I graduated, I improved from C to an A within one year.
In addition to focusing on my own studies, I also worked as an English & art tutor and art editor after graduating from high school as a way of contributing to my family's income.

After graduating...


Thanks again for your help!
Charlottefang   
Dec 14, 2015
Letters / Absorbing breadth of knowledge to fulfil my background - motivation letter for Holland Scholarship [10]

Hi, can someone help me with reviewing this letter?

Do you think I've provided enough information as to apply for an one-time scholarship?
Actually I am not sure whether it is okay to mention I was raised solely by my mother; but I've seen several people described themselves that way...

Should I mention my previous scholarship? Though I got it based mainly on my artistic skills, not for academic reasons.
Charlottefang   
Dec 11, 2015
Writing Feedback / The Function of Tax reflects in two aspects: in a country and individuals. [2]

...we need strong armyarmies/the military to protect us, and armyarmies and weapons cost a lot...

I think in paragraph 2, you've used too many semi-colons.

We need strong armies to protect us when we are subject to invasion, even though the armed forces together with weapons cost a fortune.
Aside from military expenditure, a country also needs to do A, B and C, even suffering from economy depression. All of these come from the tax.

Charlottefang   
Dec 11, 2015
Letters / Absorbing breadth of knowledge to fulfil my background - motivation letter for Holland Scholarship [10]

prospectivestudents.leiden.edu/scholarships/scholarship/holland-scholarship-programme.html#general-conditions

Please help me with reviewing my motivation letter for applying for Holland Scholarship at Leiden Uni.
Thank you!

Dear Sirs, Madams,

Growing up in a single family, instead of succumbing to tight financial situation, I have been quite fortunate to be able to enrich myself in terms of humanities, which has fuelled me to further my educational goal in studying International Studies at Leiden University.

With my mother's understanding and sacrifice over the years, I have devoted my time to improve my artistic as well as academic accomplishment. For instance, based on my painting experience begun at five years old, I was among top 10% at the entry exam of National Taiwan University of Arts in fine arts department. In terms of my potentialities in languages, my learning curve of English may be a perfect example. As I was being gradually eager to read more without the limit of translations, I started to study English with an exceedingly concentrated willpower. By the time I graduated from high school, I got an A from a C. In addition to focusing on my own studies, I also worked as an English & art tutor and art editor after graduating from high school as a way of contributing to my family's budget.

Recently I was selected to be a volunteer in the Centre for Chinese Studies, a respected national research institution in Taiwan. During this time I learned how scholars from all around the world see Chinese culture and had the opportunity to meet people from linguistic and literary backgrounds since this centre has sometimes cooperated with Taiwan's Ministry of Foreign Affairs.

After graduating from Leiden University, I am planning to work in a museum or, some projects related to the holding of exhibitions and writing articles about aesthetics in order to improve and help people to understand other cultures and aesthetics. After gaining some practical work experience, based on my interests in looking for nebulous meanings or origins of languages, I would like to enrich my academic background by applying for a Master's degree in linguistics; I believe that I would benefit greatly from the advanced philological training in many ways. For instance, I can, not only strengthen my translating skills, but also learn how languages are connected with cultures; these skills and profound knowledge that I am going to learn as a master's student will all eventually improve my work in helping people to appreciate varied beauty of other cultures.

If selected for this scholarship, I will continue to apply the same diligence to my collegiate studies as I have to this point, absorbing breadth of knowledge to fulfil my background. I hope that you will consider my application favourably, and help me to achieve my educational goal. I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,
Charlotte Fang
Charlottefang   
Nov 19, 2015
Essays / How to write an argumentative essay about global warming? Need a good topic. [7]

If your thesis needs you to indicate some controversial topics in terms of global warming, I suggest you to find another controversial issue partly because for me the debate over using nuclear power is a bit old.

If I were you, I would be very much interested in the connection between smartphone phenomenon and global warming; for example, narrowing down the reasons as to why people nowadays using their high-tech devices to support living green; and it is better for modern people to live back to the time without industrialised products?
Charlottefang   
Nov 17, 2015
Letters / 'immersed in fine arts' - Motivation letter for applying for BA International Studies to Leiden Uni. [5]

Hi Ssakshijain,

thanks for your correction!

As for this sentence:...of which I am often in awe to many European artists. I wanted to say something like: as long as I get a better understanding of European cultures, I could have the similar colour palette/taste/aesthetic with the European artists I admire.

Can I use logics instead of logistics if I wanted to say every language has its own logic of word orders etc? Or I should simply say linguistics?

Thanks again for your help!
Charlottefang   
Nov 17, 2015
Letters / 'immersed in fine arts' - Motivation letter for applying for BA International Studies to Leiden Uni. [5]

Dear Sirs/Madams,

After being immersed in fine arts more than a decade, I would like to study International Studies at Leiden University, for the 2016 autumn term.

As I was a student of National Taiwan University of arts, which counts a second place in the field of fine arts in Taiwan, I believe that the only way to enhance myself as well as my artworks is to study broadly from languages to literatures, politics and cultures since they all effect essentially to paintings. Although I have majored in western arts, I still find the colour-matching, compositions or metaphors vary from country to country. That is, without sufficient knowledge and living experiences of Europe, I can hardly use the similar colour of which I am often in awe to many European artists. Take my one month trip in Edinburgh where I was stunned by the Glasgow boys' works for example. By reading histories, knowing English and visiting Glasgow, I understood a little more as to why Joseph Crawhall's paintings could be so much harmonious. I would not have known this had I simply seen his paintings through pictures.

As soon as I realised how much easy I understood the subtle meaning in Chinese literature by using Mandarin rather than other languages, I started taking language courses and subsequently developed a passion for finding the various logics and ambiguous values in many different languages. Therefore, I have chosen to apply to Leiden University because it provides many language courses and relevant subjects, not to mention the professional teachers, well-equipped libraries, and humanity projects such as a VIDI project about manuscripts from which I learnt a lot. Moreover, the convenience of travelling to many other places is one of the boons of studying in Leiden University which I can meet people from various backgrounds, visit museums and diversify my work experiences.

I do not excel at all subjects; however, I am proud of my improvement and passions for arts and languages. For instance, due to my strong interests in drawing, I started attending art lessons at the age of five and have passed two national drawing exams with high grades. My interests in reading the classics as well as watching Chinese opera have fuelled me to be more creative. At 16, I arranged my first exhibition; I have learnt quite a lot from making invitation letters to dealing with the decoration and frames. The paintings I exhibited helped me earn a one thousand Euro scholarship yearly due to my excellent performance of painting. Finally, in high school, it was not until I wanted to read more stories without the limits of translation did my English score rise from C to A.

As an avid learner, I have also arranged myself some lessons-aside from language courses- during the home-schooling period, such as: visiting exhibitions, learning Pipa, a Chinese instrument, and watching classic movies. Also, after learning some languages, I have tried to translate several articles in terms of art supply materials in the hope to help Chinese users understand more about paintings.

During my spared time, I have helped a local teachers' union in terms of designing some posters and cards, taught English as well as drawing to adults and painted some pictures for book covers. All of which may not be seen as profitable, yet I have benefited greatly because I could share my passions to others via the media I love.

As for volunteering works, due to my close connection to libraries, I have been helping my high school library for decorating for nearly two years, and recently I have been selected to be a volunteer in the Centre for Chinese Studies, a respectful national research institution in Taiwan.

After I finish Leiden University, before applying for a Mater degree in humanity fields, I am planning to work in a museum or, some projects in terms of holding exhibitions, writing articles about aesthetics in order to improve and help people to understand other cultures and aesthetics which, after studying International Studies,

I hope that you will consider my application favourably, and help me in my goal to use my education and artistic backgrounds to benefit the institution where I first discovered my passion for languages and cultural activities.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Kind regards,
Charlotte Fang
Charlottefang   
Nov 17, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS-TASK2 : Whether the media should notice ordinary people than famous people ? [4]

1) You can emit repeating "such as actors, singers, or footballers", simply put as public figures/celebrities/famous people.

2) I didn't quite understand your POV: I would argue A, and disagree B. Would it be better that you write this sentence in a more pithy way?

3) If the media more provides/reportsmore stories about common people news

4) even though the popular people much more give the positive income for the media
>> even though the media has made a fortune from reporting celebrities' lives,...
>>As long as the reports about celebrities' lives encourage ordinary people to pursue their dreams, I think...
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