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Name: Mohammad Zohaib
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Last Post: May 17, 2016
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May 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Writing Task 2 : Problem and Solutions Of Motorways. (Need 6 bands) [5]

Task: Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Essay:
Nowadays every country is replacing its transport system with building more motorways. However, some people believe that it has negative aspects such as putting life on a risk and affects environment pollution as well.

It is quite clear that all kinds of traffics on motorways can be seen with having to much driving speed. Consequently, it occurs many dangerous accidents which can cause a lost of human life. For example, a recently conducted pole revealed the fact that approximately 60% accidents happen on motorways because of driving fast. Moreover, motorways usually Moreover, motorways usually build on a very beautiful areas and produce noise and air pollution's, which cause which cause pollute the whole beautiful areas. It also reduced the number of wildlife animals and damaged the growth of plants because of pollution created by heavy traffics like trucks and many other vehicles.

There are various solutions of improving motorways. Firstly, automobile companies should make environmentally friendly vehicles to reduce the pollution that normally vehicles produce. In order to save the environment and wildlife.Secondly, government should restrict the speed limit for every vehicle which runs on motorways in order to reduce the ration of accidents and secure human life. Moreover, gorvenment should also strictly charged and penalize those drivers who drive faster that the specified speed limit.

After viewing above all discussion it would lead me to conclude on the note that motorways are very essential for today's advance societies. But steps should be made by automobile companies and government to cope the motorwys problems and to protect the enironment as wella s human life.
zohaib   
Jan 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Traditional music is more important than other and it should be preserved as an asset. [5]

Topic: 57. There are many types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important and should it be preserved or is international music that is heard everywhere nowadays more useful to a society?

Essay:

Nowadays trend of listening music has increased enormous. Some people think that traditional music of any nation is very important and an identity of that nation where as, many people who believe that international music is more effective for any nation.

Today, there is a lot of varieties in the music and these varieties are continuously increasing day by day, for instance folk music is mostly found in Asian countries specially in the south Asian countries like Pakistan, India and Bangladesh, where as, the pop music and rap songs have initially started from Europe and America .

The most important question which occur is why we need music or what is the importance of music in our life?
One of the main reason for listening music is that it give us relaxation when we are in trouble, in depression or want some relaxation from any tough situation. Secondly, music make a person more calm and tension free, so after listening the song the person is in more control to get back to work with more energy and with more passion.

Traditional music of any nation has more importance for that nation for instance if we look in Pakistan or south Asian countries people play their own native songs in their functions, birthday parties and in wedding parties rather than playing English or ay other songs. Moreover, the national songs are also the identity of any nation, these music represent the culture of that nation, so music of any society should be promoted by that society and it should be kept at an asset.

On the other hand international music also have some importance in the society the main reason which i give to support the above argument is people came to know the music of other culture and enjoy the types of music of different societies.

After viewing above discussion it would lead me to conclude on the note that music is very important in life, moreover, cultural music has much importance than other international music and it should be preserved as an asset.

I have only one week , next saturday there is my IELTS test, please guide my can i get 6 bands on this essay? and if no what can I do to get 6 bands.

I have written almost 20 to 30 essays. Please guide me guize properly
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