Anaguna
Apr 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / Water is a valuable resource for human and government has to control the water usage [3]
Hello wiwik, here my suggestion for your essay in the third paragraph, hope you can improve your writing skill by seeing my sentences.
In the second reason, why government must control the water ...
"In the second reason, the government has to control the water usage in the worldwide since there are many factories utilizing its sources for the process of production things. For example, in the US, the highest average of using water is 6,000 liters in a day. The citizens consume much water every day and it can be a danger for lack of water supplies. "
Hello wiwik, here my suggestion for your essay in the third paragraph, hope you can improve your writing skill by seeing my sentences.
In the second reason, why government must control the water ...
"In the second reason, the government has to control the water usage in the worldwide since there are many factories utilizing its sources for the process of production things. For example, in the US, the highest average of using water is 6,000 liters in a day. The citizens consume much water every day and it can be a danger for lack of water supplies. "