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Name: Nana
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nana77   
May 5, 2016
Writing Feedback / 'substantial growth in both Petrol and Oil, and Coal'; Comparison of four different types of fuels [2]

This is TASK 1 essay from IELTS. (Words count are 165)

The graph shows the percentage of four different types of fuels in use between the years 1800 and 2000.
Summarize the information by describing the main features of the graph and making comparisons where appropriate.

This line chart illustrates both history and forecast of energy consumption in the USA between 1980 to 2030. Overall, Petrol and Oil, and Coal will be predicted to increase in 2030, while others might be stable.

Looking first at history parts, Petrol and Oil was the largest energy consumption which was about 35 quadrillion units in 1980, whereas Nuclear, Solar/ Wind and Hydropower were only about 3 quadrillion units. After that, Petrol and Oil, and Coal have been dramatically leapt for over the past two decades, which were approximately 42 and 26 quadrillion units respectively.

Turning to the predictions, from 2020 to 2030, there will be substantial growth in both Petrol and Oil, and Coal. As for Petrol and Oil, it will be reached at about 47 quadrillion units. On the other hand, Nuclear and Solar/ Wind will slightly go up in 2030 about 9 and 7 quadrillion units respectively. As regard Natural Gas and Hydropower, they are anticipated to slightly go down in 2030.



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nana77   
May 5, 2016
Writing Feedback / Reasons why adults decide to study and why such education should be shared [4]

Hi Maxim
Thank you for your helpful feedback for my essay which was TASK2 of IELTS.

I suppose your essay is really good structure, however I think "so" is not academic word. Therefore, it is better to use alternative words such as "thus" or "hence" perhaps.

Apart from that, other people gave some useful suggestions below, thus I just want to thank you and tell you one suggestion as I mentioned above.

I believe you can achieve your aspiration!
nana77   
May 5, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK2 essay: Should animals be treated equally as human because they have the rights? [2]

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


Some people hold that animals should be protected because they have the same rights as human beings, while others claim it is necessary to utilise with animals for humans as means for development of society. This paper examines both sides of argument and draws the conclusion that it is significant to ban harming animals and treat them equally as human beings.

Looking first at the argument that animals have to be protected and they own the rights which are the same value as humans. This has been exemplified by the fact that a guide dog is essential part of human society and this kind of animal plays a vital role for blind people, yet some people assert that most disabled people can be supported by the machines instead of animals.

Turning to the counter argument, it is frequently claimed that it is inevitable to treat animals as the experimental objects to examine or conduct research for human beings. This argument is largely based on the fact that the animal experiment has been implemented across the globe so that human society will develop, including medical and food industries. A case in point is the animal experiment is indispensable process to demonstrate the safety for humans, contributing the development for society. However, most experiments can be conducted with alternative methods such as using computer simulation or cultured human cells, according to Japan anti-vivisection association.

In conclusion, the animals can be exploited by certain extent as a contribution to human society. However, it is possible to conduct alternative means to develop society instead of using animals and the importance of protecting animal rights clearly do exists.
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