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Posts by Ashkan123
Name: Ashkan
Joined: Jul 24, 2016
Last Post: Oct 25, 2018
Threads: 12
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From: United States of America
School: western michigan

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Ashkan123   
Mar 1, 2018
Letters / Recommendation Letter by Mentor in University for A Scholarship Application [4]

This is my suggestion for your first paragraph but I am not sure if it is good(Something to think)

I am writing this in enthusiastic support of Hana whom she worked with me on multiple art projects during the time she was studying XXXXX at the University of XXXX. I've found Hana a creative person with excellent critical thinking capability.

good luck....
Ashkan123   
Mar 1, 2018
Letters / Job Shadowing request from different department [2]

Hi All

I need to write an email to request from the manager of another department for job shadowing for half a day. It would be great if you can help me out. I welcome any suggestion or correction, including email example. I know my email is not the best. But I appreciate if you can help me with your examples.

to gain experience in the department



Hi XXXXX

My name is (my name), and I am a new (my position) in the met lab. I've recently started my job in (company) and I would be grateful if I can shadow you or one of your team member for a day or a half a day to gain some experience in your department. Please advise me what would the best time. I realize that you are busy and that your time is valuable.

Thank you for help

Kind regards.
Ashkan123   
Mar 4, 2018
Writing Feedback / Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat? Do you agree or disagree [5]

Hi

I am not sure if I like the phrase " It is argued." I think "some people believe" or some people demand more punishment for .......Furthermore, I think ( I am not sure though) after " it is argued " you should cover some reason that supports your argument. For instance: it is argued that there should be some punishment for those parents who let their kids gain too many weights since they are responsible for what and how thier kid .......
Ashkan123   
Mar 6, 2018
Writing Feedback / New, modern buildings - is it a good investment? [5]

Hi

"there is a debet among"=> I think you mean "debate"

As holt said, you did not meet the minimum requirement.I think you can work on your introduction.you can explain what is the opinion of each side of this debate and what reason they bring for their argument. on paragraph 3 you can explain a little bit more.
Ashkan123   
Oct 25, 2018
Graduate / Knowledge is power. SOP For polymer science school [3]

My Statement of Purpose



From my earliest memory, I have been fascinated by science and technology. I can recall the excitement I felt at the beginning of each month when I bought the new edition of Science magazine when I was ten years old. I must admit, still, that it is to some extent an accident that I found myself in materials engineering school. A friend was studying metallurgical engineering and material science, and he kept explaining various topics he learned about. Little by little, I became intrigued by the field, and I am so glad that I chose to study it. I am excited, just as I was to get my hands on the shiny new issue of Science, to learn more about the materials world.

I chose math and physics for my major in high school, and I took an entrance exam and gained admission to study materials science and metallurgical engineering at a good university. My undergraduate program has given me comprehensive exposure to courses that I found both interesting and practical. The mechanical, physical, properties of material and thermodynamic were some of subjects I studied and, after graduation, I decided to delve into other aspects of material properties. I chose the Master of Mechanical Engineering program at the XXXXX, where I had the chance to learn more about the fracture of materials and material selection in design, among other specialties. However, I should mention that in the first semester is not showing my best effort. unfortunately, during that time, my father had a serious heart problem and that effect on my performance. During my master, I also completed my internship at XXXXX as a mechanical engineer. After graduation, I worked for XXXXX as a metallurgist for two years and, presently, I am working for the XXXXX in XXXXX in the same capacity. I have learned first-hand about failure analysis, understanding different mechanisms that component fails, and how to start an investigation and find the root cause of failure. During this journey, I learned to use different types of equipment such as a scanning electron microscope (SEM) and a tensile testing machine and, of course, how to interpret the results.

Knowledge is power. So far, I have learned a lot about metals, but as a materials engineer, I feel I don't have enough knowledge and background in polymer science. This is why I have chosen to study polymer and polymer science at the XXXX. At my company, the application of polymer materials is becoming more and more common every day. Thus, as a metallurgist and failure-analysis engineer, I need to understand the properties and applications of polymer materials.

I appreciate your consideration of my application, and I am confident that I would be a valuable addition to your program. I look forward to being a part of the XXXXX and assure you that I will make every effort necessary to further enhance its fine reputation.

Thank you!

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