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Name: zhouwei
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The government should use the money invested in arts to spent in public services [5]
A portion of our society believes that government should use the money invested in arts to spent in public services. It is agreed that arts are important to the expression of a culture, therefore can't be forgotten by the governments. Firstly, this essay will discuss the importance of the arts to the population and, secondly, it will discuss the necessity of art's investment.According to your first paragraph, I re-write it and focus on clear and simpleness. I think it is better in the first paragraph for debatable essays.
Version 1:
Some people believe that government should invest money to improve public services rather than spending on arts. I agree with this view.Version 2:
Some people believe that government should spend money on arts rather than investing to improve public services. I agree with this view.For your rest of part, I think you may try to read more others essays that could help to choose vocabulary more accurate and improve sentence more natural.
Letters /
The requesting letter in regard to some important papers which have been left at the hotel. [2]
You recently attended a meeting at a hotel, when you returned to home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel.
Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter.
- say where you think you left the papers.
- explain why they are so important.
- tell the manager what you want him/her to do.Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to you regarding some important papers of mine have been left at you hotel. There was a meeting that hosted by IBM three days ago, and I was the one of participants.
My room number was G507. I remember that I put my papers in the only drawer in my room, then I went to meet another client. I can't bring two client's contract into one meeting, because it is easy to mix them. After the final meeting, I had drunk during the celebration, so I forgot taking them back to my suitcase before leaving hotel to the International Airport at night.
These papers are every important to our company, and it is actually a contract. There are many detailed information about our project with IBM in the contract. Our team is waiting for the scheme to implement program today.
We really appreciate you could deliver them to us, our company address is 14, white street, Hongkong. We will pay you deliver charge until you tell us your bank card.
Thank you so much for your help.
Your faithfully,
Mr. ZhouI appreciate that someone could give me some corrections or suggestions about this English letter, it's written for taking IELTS purpose.
Thank you for your time.
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