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gdesastr

Sep 19, 2016

Writing Feedback / TED Summary: Pixar's Ingredient of Magic [2]

If I say, there are a rat which cooking some French foodstuff, some fish find other fish around ocean, a trash robot who falling in love in deep with a robot who explorer the galaxy, or some toy be like human with lot of drama and journey, do you think I have some insanity? I guess you say "no" if you know about Pixar. There are no impossibilities in Pixar's world, that's the standpoint of a women who brought this world comes true in a cinema perspective when she brings her thought in TED. She is Danielle Feinberg who an artist and graphic designer of Pixar. She told about what's makes Pixar have an ingredient of magic in every film and the viewer touching wholeheartedly are science, art, and artistic freedom integrated to make a cinema mood in detail. She told firmly Pixar doesn't recreate scientifically world, but they create believable story world in every audience's heart.

gdesastr

Sep 19, 2016

Writing Feedback / Europe is the pioneer in underground railways system. Comparison. [3]

Hallo Yonathan, I have suggestions for your essay, perhaps you can increase your skill with it:

here we go

your essay :
... and Moscow subways also ~~was~~were used as military headquarters.

you should use were if you say more than one object.

I hope you keep trying and learn more and more about grammar.

gdesastr

Sep 19, 2016

Writing Feedback / Some three cities with modern public transportation which have different function and structure [2]

Hallo Alamsyah, I have some suggestions for your essay.

your essay : ... different function and stuctureeach other .

note: please attention with your spelling, there is structure not stucture

note: if you want to say "each other" but there are more two object you should say "one and another ". each other only use when object, even subject only two.

your essay : ... which can carry 30,000 passengers, was started in 1863.

note: you should use were if you want to describe more one object, not was .

note: when you want to say a year, please use on .

your essay : Paris's Metro is smaller than subways, but ...

note: In my opinion, Paris's Metro is kind of subways, perhaps you want to say Tube (London's subway)

note: All of the rails means are keep ...

perhaps you carry on to make an essay to increasing your skill.

gdesastr

Sep 19, 2016

Writing Feedback / Sumary of Myriad Subways in Europe [2]

Public transportation was being big deal in myriad Europe cities, namely in London, Paris also Moscow. Subway is not uncommon transportation in there anymore, not only for public transportation but also for describe art and achievement of their nation, absolutely it makes tourist interested. In London, ever since 1863 subway is major public transportation during to traffic was crowded by pedestrians and horses. The government opt to build the railway on underground of the city which construction big deeper tunnel due to keep not destroy the building above land. Londoner called it is tube.

Let's move to Paris, the city of art, there are subways with art nouveau touch the mostly side of architecture. That's makes Paris typical subway we know as Paris Metro. There are touching with mosaics, sculptures and painting in side by side. By contrast with Paris, in Moscow, as we know, there is The Moscow Metro, Russian subway which makes military headquarter too, during World War II. The Moscow Metro design to adapt with cold weather with extremely temperature is often happened in there. Ultimately, the kinds of Europe subway had been helping reduce the greenhouse effect in today's world.