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Posts by MonkeyD_Saolo [Suspended]
Name: Mr X
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Last Post: Oct 10, 2016
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MonkeyD_Saolo   
Oct 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / In the past, most people would like to live in small house and have a big garden [5]

it is my honor to give several suggestion for u.
this is my suggestion.

... i want my life ( it should be I WANT TO LIVE ) near natural. Because, I see the advantages (it is more effective if you wrote I REALIZE THAT IT HAS ADVANTAGES ) when i live in village. The first, your life will BE more peaceful, ...

The second, your parents feel more happierHAPPY when you are ...
I mean, every familys (FAMILIES ) also wish that (...), their children will BE in close them.
MonkeyD_Saolo   
Oct 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / Cutting Edge Observation: Migration of Bird [2]

hi @WasishaSisha
i have little bit suggestion to make better your essay. is it ok right ?

This essential natural activity affect to evolved ( you have to write down V1 namely EVOLVE due to the fact that the end of "to" it must be V1) species and it can (you can reduce the word, it is ok to write just and serve ..... because you use conjunction and) serve the necessary form for ...

Nocturnal migrants are tend (tend is categorized class word VERB you should erase the aux "are") to flying (it must FLY because you use to, and the end of t "to" is V1) at night and rely on to stars
MonkeyD_Saolo   
Oct 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / The negative effect of illegal logging [3]

The unresponsible processing paper industry can cause negative impact of environment. However, this case is not viral in our society. The impact of this situation is able to be bad effect as well as pollution, extinction, and global warming. This circumstance is spreading into the big continent; Central Africa, Southeast Asia, South America to the North forest of Canada and Scandinivia. The all sector of habitat is going to disappear due to ilegal logging. Various creature life both terrestrial and aquatic are going to be extinct.

Trees are essential for animals and environment. They protect huge type of animals that live in surface rainforest like insects, worms, reptiles, amphibian, and so on. Trees also can hold in order to prevent heavy rainfall into the soil indirectly. the root of trees have crucial function for preventing the erosion. In majority, the most reason that cause of soil damaging is road building. The logging can also harm aquatic habitats.

In addition, The extinction of trees trigger to decline percentage of oxygen in the water. It is able to reduce the population of fish and life aquatic. The air pollution could be filtered by natural filter like trees. They absorb the carbon dioxide from the atmosphere and produce the oxygen. Felling down the trees disappeare the crucial role in the nature. Then, Removing of huge tons of trees in the nature can occur the disaster like flooding, wilderness fires, and climate change.

In sum up, natural wilderness should be preservation and to legacy for the next generation due to the fact that forest is the vital area to prevent disaster.
MonkeyD_Saolo   
Oct 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / TED Reviews: The simple Cure for Loneliness by Baya Voce [4]

Night Yonathan. is it if i give correction for you ?
this is my correction.

Baya said once that loneliness (you can paraphrase it Baya said, The loneliness ..... it is more effective sentence) is an emotional state that we have when we feel disconnected ( i can get the point, is it true ? if i change to be "when we feel alienated ", loneliness is a public health crisis (...) and it can be achieved (as grammar you should write down "noun" it should be ACHIVEMENT ) through ritual.
MonkeyD_Saolo   
Oct 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / Why Bilingual Language Education Have To Be Implemented Since Earliest [2]

Universal language that have to be honed since childhood is tremendously important for their future. Nowadays, there is a case in amid citizen that become viral over related to all kiddos should be implemented regarding international language since babyhood. To be frank, i totally believe that the childhood education should be added foreign language subject since youth.

It can not be inevitable, in this present era, international language that have to be owned by all of individual is the crucial thing due to the fact that it is able to help people to enlarge their knowledge and accessing all of materials that contain english language. Due to the critical reasons above, international language must be adopted since childhood because childhood period is able to receive all of contents easily compared to elder. the adult term tend to get understanding difficulty. They have a huge number of complicated problems such as earning money and holding out their life.

In addition, foreign language that is planted since kiddos term has various merits. Firstly, the bilingual kids is more confidence compared to the others who do not learn the international language. The expert kids in bilingual language will have knowledge widely they can access site, web, and books that use english language. Secondly, person who study international language since earliest will be more competitive for their future because many jobs that are provided in all of countries commonly need bilingual language's ability. Lastly, they are able to communicate easily with another person who live in different region and knowing international issues that are occured in world society.

In sum up, i absolutely believe that international language must be taught since dawning period. There are great deal of benefits when it is beginning since first period education.
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