Baya said once that loneliness is an emotional state that we have when we feel disconnected, loneliness is a public health crisis which affected one of five American peoples. In order to overcome the loneliness and fell connected with other people, someone has to feel seen, heard, and valued ourselves and it can be achieved through ritual. Ritual does not always about the religious practice but as something that we already do day-a-day.
Many peoples with same hobby or interest can build a ritual to fulfil a necessity to share with other people and ritual can expand our capacity for kindness and compassion. Baya stated that people do not have to change to build a connection, find something you are already doing with your friends and family and do thing over and over again
Hi, there :)
... have when we feel disconnected,.no comma, but period.
... affected one of five American people
In order to overcome the loneliness and to fell connected with other (...), and valued himself, and it can be ...
... the religious practice, but it is such routine every day.
as something that we already do day-a-day.
s with same hobby or interest can buildhold/perform a ritual
Note: you should pay more attention on singular plural and punctuation.
Night Yonathan. is it if i give correction for you ?
this is my correction.
Baya said once that loneliness (you can paraphrase it Baya said, The loneliness ..... it is more effective sentence) is an emotional state that we have when we feel disconnected ( i can get the point, is it true ? if i change to be "when we feel alienated ", loneliness is a public health crisis (...) and it can be achieved (as grammar you should write down "noun" it should be ACHIVEMENT ) through ritual.
Hello Yonathan :)
once that loneliness is (...) feel disconnected ,(full stop).L oneliness is a public health crisis which affected on one of five American peoples. people. (remember, people already plural, so you do not need to add 's')
... the loneliness and
fellfeeling connected with other (...), and valued ourselves his self and it can be ...
... the religious practice but also
as something that we ...
peoplespeople with same hobby or (...) with other people and(full stop) . ritual can expand ourpeople capacity for ...