Writing Feedback / Modern forms of communication have had a negative effect on their social lives. [2]

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Nowadays, people use the modern form of communication such as email and messaging. this has changed our social life, but not completely our life is getting worse. In contrary, it makes ours better.

In the past, people communicated by letter or phone. It was difficult to communicate like this usually, because they could only makes one or two phone calls a day. And even a month or a year if we communicate by letter. As a result, their social relationship were not gradually close.

In the present days, we can instantly send a message to all our friends by social network or some message applications. Our friends always receive the message, no matter where they are. As a consequence our relationships are getting better. For instance, I always communicate will my all friends by facebook messenger everyday. I will know well how their life are going, so we will be closer. And we spend more time on meeting unashamedly. In my experience, time for meeting of all people is increasing, especially young people. the proof is that there are many social public places rising such as coffee shop, tea room, bar,...

In conclusion, I strongly disagree this opinion and completely believe that modern form of communication is improving our social life and becomes better and better.

Writing Feedback / Computers are made with expecting purpose helping people's life more easier. And negatives? [3]

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Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem

Computers are made with expecting purpose helping people's life more easier. But nowadays, there are too much influences of computer on work. The proof is some jobs position which are completely replaced by computer should have been for human. This may cause something bad we have never thought.

In the present days, there are many jobs which are expected to be supported by computer but the truth is that computer replaced human. First of all, students can choose courses to learn on internet by a computer instead of a teacher before. Even studying programs on computer are applied in college or university. Automatic ticket-selling machines at cinemas or bus stations gradually replaced ticket sellers. In processed food factories, the technological chain do all specific tasks such as: cleaning, cutting, slicing... . Handwritten letter is replaced by electronic mails, so staffs in post office can lose their jobs. Moreover, jobs of management, science, service and accountant may be lost due to computer.

There are many problems can be encountered by people. Firstly, the appearance of computer impacts to increase the rate of unemployment. For example, many jobs are replaced by the computers, so they loss their jobs on account of development of technology. Beside, unemployment means rising crime, poor quality of life, ... This also means the life of people is getting worse, not better as we thought.

Finally, we cannot deny that in addition to advantages, computers did provide a lot of unexpected disadvantages. It's time for governments now to make relevant solutions to unemployment problems