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Name: Goldvina Ulfah
Joined: Oct 27, 2016
Last Post: Oct 27, 2016
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vinau   
Oct 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / Is pain catching? First clues that it might spread to others [2]

Hi sari,
I have some advice for you

The result illustrated that the healthy mice that experienced pain (...) and also pain can develop social cues.
... transferring pain in mice is delivered through secretedsecretion that is produced by the mice. This result is connected into human life that there is possibility toforthe healthy people who ...

Thank you
Hope it helps and keep writing :D
vinau   
Oct 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / TED SUMMARY: KEN ROBINSON - DO SCHOOLS KILL CREATIVITY [2]

Ken Robinson on his TED stage talk about education and creativity. Every education system on earth has the same composition of subjects. At the top there are mathematics, languages and at the bottom are the arts. Moreover, art and music are higher in schools than drama and dance. Dance lesson is also important, as important as math subject.

The composition of education is split on two ideas. First, the most useful subjects for work are on the top. So they were probably conducted away from things at school when they were a child and things they liked are on the bottom that they would never get a job by doing that thing. The second is shcolastic ability, which has really come to control people aspect of intelligence. If people think of it, the whole system of public education around the world is a never-ending process of university admission and the result is that many highly-talented, brilliant, creative people think they are not, because the thing they were good at at school was not valued.
vinau   
Oct 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / Being an employee makes people less creative since all of major activity is set by a company. [6]

Hi Nuraini,
I have some advice for you

- Some society argue,argued that it will much better if ...
- They will choose to workingwork in companies that relate withto their study, such as ...
- ... what company wantwants and what they have to do.
- Meanwhile, start upstart-up make their chance (...) than be an employee.
- ... the big company which havehasthrough the hardness of ...

Thank you
Hope it helps :D
vinau   
Oct 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / COMMUNICATION ONLINE - people are now able to keep in contact with others by using their gadgets [3]

Some people think that being able to communicate with others online is breaking down geographical barriers and enabling people, who would normally never have the chance to meet, to communicate.

What are the advantages of International communication online?
Are there any disadvantages to this?


In this modern era, the advancement of technology was more widespread and people now able to keep in contact with other people by using their gadget. In my opinion, the benefits from this simplicity are greater than the drawbacks we receive.

There are several reasons why communication online very widely used for some people in this era. Firstly, this facility can be used for people to stay in touch with others, eventhough they are in different countries. For example, students who study abroad and far away from their hometown can use this facility to keep contact with their family and friends. Secondly, it is very helpful for busy people who can't have more time to meet other people in person. There is no doubt that by using modern technology we can stay to make a contact with other people who live far away from us.

On the other hand, communication online also have a bad impact for human social relations. They may think that meet other people in a person is not important and they will ignore their social life. To illustriate, some people think that it is not necessary to hangout or having quality time with their family or friends. They prefer to sit at home and waste their time to make a conversation with people they will never see and ignore on establishing relationships in real life.

In conclusion, therefore, I believe that the benefits of communication online outweigh the drawbacks because international communications online made people closer and easy to interact. However, this facility completely drawning human into the virtual world and makes them forget to build a good socialization with others.
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