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Posts by intanrahayu11
Name: Ni Ketut Intan Rahayu
Joined: Oct 31, 2016
Last Post: Oct 31, 2016
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School: Telkom University

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intanrahayu11   
Oct 31, 2016
Scholarship / According to me, a good leader should inspire others to do more positive acts - Chevening Essay [4]

Hi Holt, thanks for your feedback
I have revised my previous essay based on your comments, please review if my essay is good enough or still has some points that are not suitable,

thank you for your support :)

As far as I am concerned, a good leader should have an ability to inspire others to do more positive acts, someone who communicates clearly, concisely, and often, by doing so motivates everyone to give her or his best all the time. They also have to spread many positive values to others as much as she/he can.

Teaching could be one of the ways to spread the positivity. Teachers can find a wealth of opportunities to extend their influence beyond their own classrooms to their teaching teams or schools. I have passion in Education. In my opinion, education is the most important part of human life. At university, I became lecture assistant of Speech Signal Processing class. By being a lecture assistant, I have an opportunity to learn how to encourage and influence people to learn more about the lesson. Moreover, I also have a responsibility to lead some research in my class.

I also became one of research assistant at Digital Signal Processing Laboratory. As research assistants, I and my friends periodically held and lead an academic training that have objective to discussed academic lesson both in theoretical and practical side. There is a great pleasure for me when I have chances to share my knowledge and give them positive impacts through my teaching activities.

I also work as a volunteer for street children in Depok, west Java. I teach them how to write, read, and teach basic math. As volunteers we also periodically held recreational events to give some refreshment for the children. According to the Indonesian Ministry of Social Affairs, 40,000 homeless children are living in Indonesia. They have no access to education facilities. Therefore, some social organizations provide educational services for street children.

I believe that by teaching, we could help others to explore their own talents & success and also influence them to make their positive contributions for their home countries.
intanrahayu11   
Oct 31, 2016
Scholarship / Networking, whether social or professional, is about building and maintaining relationships [2]

Strong networking skills - Chevening Essay

Networking, whether social or professional, is about building and maintaining relationships. Throughout my academic and professional career I have experienced the importance of having the right connections. Maintaining network give me a great opportunity to expand my knowledge and communication skills. Good relationships have also helped me while I was finishing my final project. During my final semester in University, a good networking with lecturers and university research assistants led me to develop my research more easily. I received many suggestions, reference and helpful ideas from my lecturers to make a system with impressive result.

Networking skills also proved to be an important value in my professional career as an IT Analyst. I was responsible to lead and maintain several projects. For a project manager, it is vital to build good relations with the stakeholders who are identified as being most crucial in the project process and in using the final results of the project. We have to build a good connection since we have to work as a team. A good communication and networking skill is needed to encourage each person in our team to do their best. While maintaining the projects, I can also build a good connection with external vendors by working as a team and held some sharing knowledge sessions so that it could help us to stay up to date with recent technologies.

Good connections with many technology stakeholders, lecturers and academic practitioners would be very beneficial for my further research. I have planned to enhance my Language translation programs to become more robust and reliable system which is not only can translate Balinese spoken words into English, but also can translate words from the others traditional language in Indonesia into English. I have also contacted one of education organization in Jakarta that would use my translation system as one of their English lesson media.

Surrounded by various experience throughout academic and professional career has gave me opportunity to enhance my networking skills. I highly committed to engage with the Chevening community and influence others towards reaching our goals in making great our country's future.
intanrahayu11   
Oct 31, 2016
Writing Feedback / Not many high educated Bulgarians are interested emmigration abroad [4]

... going to another country arewere from secondary school
primary and lower education arewere below 50 percent

you should use past tense since the graph explain the information from the past

... secondary education level arewas the highest percentage ...

there was a slow decrease --> it decreased slightly
intanrahayu11   
Oct 31, 2016
Writing Feedback / In the modern world, we compete each other to grab the level of success. We forget about our health [2]

Next cause --> you should use more coherence words such as In addition, moreover (maybe it would make your essay more academic)
They do not know how to make the good meal --> they don't have enough time to prepare their meals
Working hard is also one of the tools to get it --> maybe you can change the word 'tools' into ways or manners
did not take an exercise --> have lack of exercise

in my opinion, your essay would be great if you use more academic vocabularies
intanrahayu11   
Oct 31, 2016
Scholarship / According to me, a good leader should inspire others to do more positive acts - Chevening Essay [4]

According to me, a good leader should have an ability to inspire others to do more positive acts, someone who communicates clearly, concisely, and often, by doing so motivates everyone to give her or his best all the time. They also have to spread many positive values to others as much as she/he can.

Teaching could be one of the ways to spread the positivity. Teachers can find a wealth of opportunities to extend their influence beyond their own classrooms to their teaching teams or schools. I have passion in Education. In my opinion, education is the most important part of human life. At university, I became lecture assistant of Speech Signal Processing class. It is an honor to me to become lecture assistant because I can share my knowledge to my friends and also could encourage them to learn more. I also became one of research assistant at Digital Signal Processing Laboratory. As research assistants, I and my friends periodically held and lead an academic training that have objective to discussed academic lesson both in theoretical and practical side. There is a great pleasure for me when I have chances to share my knowledge and give them positive impacts through my teaching activities. I also work as a volunteer for street children in Depok, west Java. I teach them how to write, read, and teach basic math. As volunteers we also periodically held recreational events to give some refreshment for the children. According to the Indonesian Ministry of Social Affairs, 40,000 homeless children are living in Indonesia. They have no access to education facilities. Therefore, some social organizations provide educational services for street children.

In 2014, I created real time language translation system from Balinese spoken words into English as my final project in university. I created this system in order to help and motivate Balinese children to learn more about English. I also have planned to enhance my language translation system therefore it could not only translated from Balinese language but also could translate the others traditional language in Indonesia into English words.

In my opinion, education is a basic requirement for a good personality and great future. I believe that Indonesia needs our contributions even though it starts from a small act.
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