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|Personal Statement - Business Administration undergraduate programme at NUS
Undergraduatekate8524 - 1 day ago / kate8524 - 21 hrs ago
|The impact of data science on Oil and Gas Industry (a PTDF personal statement)
UndergraduateTarhywoe - Jan 19, 2022 / Tarhywoe - 1 day ago
|The time I broke my promise
2 - The essay will succeed in confusing the reviewer because the writer has decided to tell the story from the...
UndergraduateYeva22 - Jan 16, 2022 / Holt - Jan 16, 2022
|My creative and original thinking- Who you are-UBC essay
2 - You seem to have misread the topic focus of this statement. You are constantly referring to "I" when the...
UndergraduateRoot678 - Jan 15, 2022 / Holt - Jan 15, 2022
|Purdue can assist me in exploring the field of computer science in far greater detail
2 - Simply mentioning the professors names does not mean that the classes will support your interests. The focus changes from...
UndergraduateTheEssayGuy - Jan 14, 2022 / Holt - Jan 14, 2022
|STIPENDIUM HUNGARICUM ESSAY - BA OF ECONOMICS
2 - The reviewer already knows that you are interested in studying at a university in Hungary. The question you...
Undergraduatecavanigma - Jan 13, 2022 / Holt - Jan 14, 2022
|UCAS Personal Statement for Biomedical Engineering at a UK university
2 - I believe that you are inefficiently looking at the importance of Math and Chemistry in this case. Biomedical Engineering...
UndergraduateDominoBrixx25 - Jan 13, 2022 / Holt - Jan 14, 2022
|UBC Sauder School of Business - I had changed my lifestyle - Respond to an unfamiliar situation
UndergraduateHoonyaru - Jan 13, 2022 / Hoonyaru - Jan 13, 2022
|UBC Essay, What is important to you? - Self-improvement is one of the most important aspects
Undergraduatenayroug - Jan 12, 2022 / nayroug - Jan 13, 2022
|Diagnosed with ADHD - UBC Personal
2 - Replace the total response. The additional information is to be used for your additional academic information and how these...
Undergraduatesummerarcadia - Jan 12, 2022 / Holt - Jan 12, 2022
|UBC Pers. Profile - An important value that has been ingrained in my mindset is community engagement
2 - Community engagement is definitely one of the considerations for this prompt requirement. It is important that the writer engage...
Undergraduatesummerarcadia - Jan 12, 2022 / Holt - Jan 12, 2022
|Football and MVP - TELL US ABOUT WHO YOU ARE
2 - There are two things that the reviewer will be looking for when he reads the response to the questions...
Undergraduatetuf0406 - Jan 12, 2022 / Holt - Jan 12, 2022
|Developing through experiences- Meaningful activities-UBC essay
3 - @Daisy202 your essay is really good as i think you brought up your achievement in this activity and what...
UndergraduateDaisy202 - Jan 12, 2022 / Hoonyaru - Jan 14, 2022
|My creative side- Tell us who you are-UBC essay
2 - There is a lack of reference to a multi-faceted personality on the part of the applicant. The reviewer is...
UndergraduateSwagat - Jan 11, 2022 / Holt - Jan 12, 2022
|UBC TELL ME ABOUT YOURSELF ESSAY- "Passion over Comfort"
3 - I think your overall tone is pretty negative. You mention about being laid back and words such as flunk...
Undergraduatedebs_141 - Jan 10, 2022 / summerarcadia - Jan 12, 2022
|Wish to further develop my skills - Application essay for United World College
2 - Remove this paragraph as it is devoid of an actual response to the prompt. You need not provide...
Undergraduatevitachai - Jan 9, 2022 / Holt - Jan 10, 2022
|Understanding and introspection - UBC personal profile
4 - @elonmuskrat In order to improve ur personal profile, i think you can mention your personalities and achievement or sth...
Undergraduateelonmuskrat - Jan 9, 2022 / Hoonyaru - Jan 14, 2022
|Learning from people around me - UBC application
2 - While you are discussing an interesting story about how acne made you a better person, that is not the...
Undergraduatechengzheng - Jan 8, 2022 / Holt - Jan 9, 2022
|Self respect and life lesson - WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU?
2 - This introduction is unnecessary. Since you are limited in character/word count, and the reviewer needs a prompt response,...
Undergraduateaaravchopra2004 - Jan 8, 2022 / Holt - Jan 8, 2022
|Conservative upbringing - TELL US ABOUT WHO YOU ARE
2 - The response format is incorrect. This personal statement does not respond to the questions provided. Did you actually read...
Undergraduateaaravchopra2004 - Jan 8, 2022 / Holt - Jan 8, 2022
|UBC Personal Profile First Question Essay - Adventurous
Undergraduatelucydobs - Jan 7, 2022 / aaravchopra2004 - Jan 8, 2022
|UBC - tell us more about an activity - medical shadowing/internships
2 - Talk about your performance within the activity only. There is no need to discuss how you got into the...
Undergraduatepogthief - Jan 6, 2022 / Holt - Jan 7, 2022
|Pluralistic, polyphonic, unclassifiable mass - Wellesley College Supplemental
Undergraduateminhthao03 - Jan 6, 2022 / Holt - Jan 7, 2022
|Privilege to collaborate with the United States - The Global UGRAD Program
2 - Why do you keep presuming? I think this is your favorite word. It is such a favorite that you...
Undergraduatesixthofjune - Jan 5, 2022 / Holt - Jan 6, 2022
|Races - What do you do for fun (MIT)
UndergraduateINeedHelp2836 - Jan 4, 2022 / Holt - Jan 4, 2022
|MIT essay - community question - one way in which you contributed to your community
2 - This is a good start. It shows how you helped the community but, it is an impersonal method of...
UndergraduateHighSchoolKid456 - Jan 4, 2022 / Holt - Jan 4, 2022
|MIT essay - How did you manage a situation that didnt go as planned
UndergraduateHighSchoolKid123 - Jan 4, 2022 / Holt - Jan 4, 2022
|Application for UGRAD - What hobbies and interests do you enjoy / design and movies
2 - Focus on your current hobby of writing movie reviews. Mention that first before the childhood foundation. The less you...
Undergraduatehhspark - Jan 2, 2022 / Holt - Jan 3, 2022
|About my family and friends - TELL US ABOUT WHO YOU ARE
4 - I think it is not necessary how your personality is "negatively" perceived to others. Also, instead of telling about...
Undergraduateheyhelpme - Jan 1, 2022 / hhspark - Jan 2, 2022
|Extracurriculars and intense studies - Stanford Prompt (about something that is meaningful)
2 - The response provided by the mother to the 10 year old child is not believable. it is a response...
UndergraduateDaegu - Dec 31, 2021 / Holt - Jan 2, 2022
|Real stories - College application essay
Undergraduateryn - Dec 31, 2021 / Holt - Jan 15, 2022
|UGRAD - 'Who would be born must first destroy the world.' - LEADERSHIP APPROACH
5 - You still have not identified what leadership style you typically use in a group setting. There are several types...
Undergraduatehhspark - Dec 31, 2021 / Holt - Jan 4, 2022
|My Kind of "Normal" - Essay for Common App
2 - You have not written a proper response to the essay question. The common app question requires you to reflect...
UndergraduateAlranita23 - Dec 31, 2021 / Holt - Dec 31, 2021
|Common App Essay on Bullying
4 - I agree, remember you don't want to make the essay overwhelmingly negative. Cut the bullying to one paragraph and...
UndergraduateNyx99 - Dec 30, 2021 / Daegu - Dec 31, 2021
|What as a student at Boston University most excites you?
5 - It is great to mention a certain course or classes you would like to take. However, the reasons are...
UndergraduateRohan21 - Dec 29, 2021 / hhspark - Jan 2, 2022
|Design cultures - The Global UGRAD Program is for young leaders
2 - Think about this for a second. Can you remember a time when you showed early leadership skills and...
Undergraduatehhspark - Dec 28, 2021 / Holt - Dec 28, 2021
|Family talk - EXPLAIN HOW YOU RESPONDED TO A PROBLEM AND/OR AN UNFAMILIAR SITUATION.
UndergraduateEJ1809 - Dec 26, 2021 / EJ1809 - Dec 26, 2021
|Friends and activities - WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU? WHY?
3 - I think overall you wrote a good essay but you can improve on second paragraph. You have sort of...
Undergraduatehellcat75 - Dec 26, 2021 / ANJ - Dec 29, 2021
|A plane ticket to Richmond - Umiami Supplemental Prompt
2 - Thankfully, you did not use the Covid-19 lockdown to discuss the topic. That is the tired and most common...
Undergraduateaxelkirsch - Dec 26, 2021 / Holt - Dec 26, 2021
|Myself and I - UBC Personal Profile: What is important to you ? And why ?
2 - This response essay is all over the place. There is no order to the idea presentation, the sentence structures...
Undergraduatenonameplz - Dec 26, 2021 / Holt - Dec 26, 2021
|Introduction my family and myself
3 - Work on the improvements Holt suggested. However, I also suggest you rewrite this paragraph in a more concise manner...
UndergraduateAfshin - Dec 25, 2021 / animishg - Dec 26, 2021
|Waterloo's health science, software engineering and the business and computer science program - AIF
2 - These are unique responses and direct qualifiers for your double major. Why not make it more definitive...
Undergraduatechickenloo - Dec 24, 2021 / Holt - Dec 24, 2021
|Books and social issues - Essay about UWC (2022-2024) application
UndergraduatePrity - Dec 20, 2021 / Prity - Dec 21, 2021
|Pre-pandemic days - My UBC Supplementary Essay
3 - Apart from Holt's suggestions, I would recommend using some connecting words between the sentences to add rhythm like: "In...
Undergraduatejerrytian - Dec 20, 2021 / animishg - Dec 26, 2021
|Why engineering? My application to the University of Waterloo (Admission Information Form)
5 - I suggest to trim the first part in the introduction of your grandfather. It is nice to mention about...
Undergraduatequinnnnnnnnnnnn - Dec 19, 2021 / hhspark - Jan 4, 2022
|UBC Undergrad Personal Profile: (Engineering)
2 - This response statement does not provide any semblance of prompt responsiveness. There is no reference at all to the...
Undergraduateanimishg - Dec 18, 2021 / Holt - Dec 18, 2021
|THE OTHER ROAD I'LL TAKE - MY BACKUP PLAN IF I DO NOT GET A SCHOLARSHIP
Undergraduatehardilaz - Dec 18, 2021 / hardilaz - Dec 19, 2021
|Creativity takes courage. Photography and video Statement of Intent.
Undergraduater3njnbott - Dec 16, 2021 / r3njnbott - Dec 16, 2021
|WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU? WHY? (UBC but can be used in other university/scholarship applications)
2 - I believe that you have over philosophized your response to the point where it lost its logic and common...
UndergraduateDaegu - Dec 15, 2021 / Holt - Dec 15, 2021
|Share your reasons for choosing AIF Computer Science program at Waterloo. Why this school?
2 - It is obvious that you have done much research into the course listing for your chosen major. You can...
Undergraduateglacierstar56 - Dec 14, 2021 / Holt - Dec 15, 2021
|"The teaching process" - Personal Importance Essay - NTU Undergraduate
Undergraduatecanewriter - Dec 14, 2021 / canewriter - Dec 19, 2021
|The pandemic influence on your activities in community
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for the response! I really appreciate your advice. Do you think it would be...
UndergraduateZacknr03 - Dec 11, 2021 / Zacknr03 - Dec 12, 2021
|UBC Personal Profile. One of the activities that had been the most impactful to me, would be fitness
2 - You cannot use physical fitness as one of the activities in this essay. That is because the reference will...
Undergraduateakshat05 - Dec 10, 2021 / Holt - Dec 11, 2021
|Personal statement about what you learn from extracurricular activities
2 - Since you suffer from social anxiety, you can revise this essay to discuss how social anxiety led to your...
Undergraduatedasiddd - Dec 9, 2021 / Holt - Dec 9, 2021
|Fighting Ageism by Being Open and Being Bold - NTU Undergraduate Scholaship Essay
Undergraduatesalmonjunk - Dec 8, 2021 / Sonny Tran - Dec 8, 2021
|A concept I find so engaging that I lose all track of time. Who I turn to when I need help.
2 - Science is the all encompassing systematic study of an area of interest based on research and experimentation. It is...
UndergraduateAryan_DT - Dec 6, 2021 / Holt - Dec 6, 2021
|The Best Version of Me - NTU UNDERGRADUATE
4 - @Holt Oh thank you sir for your response. My apologies, for posting the thread without any prompt. The prompt...
UndergraduateKielChan - Dec 5, 2021 / KielChan - Dec 7, 2021
|Sharing my passion for food with others. UBC personal profile "What is important to you?"
3 - I love the food part. However, considering that this is part of a larger application that I am sure...
Undergraduatedavinnuhh - Dec 4, 2021 / SSS2022 - Dec 6, 2021
|Enhancing my skills - What is important to me - UBC application
2 - I understand that you are motivated by success because you stated that directly. The problem, is that you are...
Undergraduatetoastedbread7533 - Dec 3, 2021 / Holt - Dec 4, 2021
|Why are you applying to UW Madison and why are you interested in studying the major?
2 - This essay only focuses on the prompt requirement starting from paragraph 5-9. The complete first half of the presentation...
Undergraduategolspants - Dec 2, 2021 / Holt - Dec 3, 2021
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