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|Why Georgia Tech essay? - Research Opportunities
NEW - Hello EssayForum! The essay prompt for application is: Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in...
Undergraduatenvijai - 4 hours ago / — -
|The neighborhood I grew up in (grateful for the great influences and for my parents for being there)
2 - Ana, I feel like this essay focuses too much on you trying to please your parents, without really explaining...
Undergraduatecristina2018 - 1 day ago / Holt - 22 hours ago
|Unprivileged background. USEFP Global UGRAD - my personal statement
2 - Memon, this essay is a bit problematic because it does not really represent the totality of the reviewer's interest...
UndergraduateMEMONSAIF - 1 day ago / Holt - 22 hours ago
|STUDY PLAN for study permit BScience in Canada
UndergraduateAlice_19th - Jun 17, 2018 / Alice_19th - Jun 19, 2018
|Common app. I was given all of these blessings so that I could take advantage of them; trip to india
Undergraduatepshah24 - Jun 14, 2018 / pshah24 - Jun 15, 2018
|I have looked up myself on Google - what's my identity?
Undergraduatenerdygirl - Jun 10, 2018 / Holt - Jun 10, 2018
|What Makes Me Different? - My personal statement for American Honors
2 - Kieu, the information in this essay does not make you different. It makes you ordinary. Just like all the...
UndergraduateCharlotte1507 - May 30, 2018 / Holt - May 31, 2018
|What is the thing that you are most afraid of in your life? How do you deal with it?
2 - Chien, aside from the need for some grammar editing, your essay is unique in response and approach. Jealousy isn't...
UndergraduateChien Chi Chen - May 26, 2018 / Holt - May 27, 2018
|Study Plan Letter - following a bachelor degree in Agricultural and Environmental Sciences at McGill
4 - Thanks, @Holt for your evaluation of my letter so far. I will definily take into consideration your review and...
UndergraduateShrimp - May 24, 2018 / Shrimp - May 25, 2018
|Barnard College - Letter of Continued Interest (response to waitlist offer)
1 - Barnard College admission With both great excitement and disappointment to see my status update on my admission portal...
UndergraduateTooriaV - May 6, 2018 / — -
|Why do you want to be Drum Major and why do you deserve this opportunity?
3 - @Holt I've revised/ completely retyped the essay. I apologize for the unclear prompt. PROMPT: INCORPORATE THE BOLD QUESTIONS...
Undergraduatetuedearerbluejay - Apr 27, 2018 / tuedearerbluejay - May 3, 2018
|My love and Passion for art and design. SCAD statement of purpose (Animation)
1 - Prompt: The Statement of Purpose should be no more than 500 words in length and should give an overview...
UndergraduateJaden Brown - Apr 24, 2018 / — -
|Essay for Westpoint Humble Beginnings
2 - Sean, I learned a tremendous amount of information about your grandmother and your father in this essay, but I...
Undergraduatesrthornton - Apr 22, 2018 / Holt - Apr 23, 2018
|I need to convience VO that I will return back to my country. SOP
3 - I am not a graduate student, I am enrolling myself in an undergrad program in Actuarial Science. I currently...
Undergraduatesaira_aamir - Apr 21, 2018 / saira_aamir - Apr 22, 2018
|Your thoughts on my common app essay about my life
2 - Mohamed, this is not a character building story. You are trying to impress the reviewer but in the process,...
Undergraduateabominablebride - Apr 21, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Analysis Essay on Death with Dignity Laws
2 - Jeff, this is a very good discussion of the "Death with Dignity " laws. The problem is that since...
Undergraduatejeffhuan - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|Motivational letter to Bocconi University
Undergraduatephuonguyenvt - Mar 26, 2018 / — -
|Studying a new yet similar branch to my previous one - motivation letter
4 - Mohammed, since I advised you to keep the letter down to the more appropriate 4 paragraphs, it would be...
Undergraduateheshammm - Mar 23, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|Tell us why you are interested in attending Mount Holyoke College.
3 - Hameeda, the only applicable paragraph in this version of the essay is the last paragraph that you wrote. That...
Undergraduatehani22 - Mar 20, 2018 / Holt - Mar 21, 2018
|I hope to work as a accountant or as an IT security consultant - My Personal Statement
3 - Jasmine, your response is too short. You have 300 words to maximize your explanation. Utilize it. Expand your discussion....
Undergraduateheylaa - Mar 15, 2018 / Holt - Mar 17, 2018
|My childhood and overseas experiences - self introduction for exchange program
2 - Hi, I think for your conclusion you need to tie these experiences into how this new program will help...
Undergraduateji young lee - Mar 13, 2018 / TJLuschen - Mar 16, 2018
|I was drawn towards the University of Waterloo for 2 main reasons.
3 - @TJLuschen Thanks for your correction on some of my mistakes in the paragraph. I've done a renovation of said...
Undergraduateiccuwagn - Mar 11, 2018 / iccuwagn - Mar 17, 2018
|Acting as a true ambassador of my country. UGRAD Personal Statement
3 - @Holt Thank you for your comment I appreciate it. Unfortunately, I wasn't chosen as UGRAD participant and now I...
Undergraduategiga28giga - Mar 8, 2018 / giga28giga - Mar 19, 2018
|THIS IS ESSAY ABOUT ME, AND FOR MY ASSIGMENT
Undergraduatenabilana26 - Mar 7, 2018 / nabilana26 - Mar 8, 2018
|My Personal Statement for Globalization and Innovation Studies at Toyo University
1 - This is my application undergraduate essay for GINOs. Please give me advice on my word choice and ideas flow....
Undergraduatepotatotomato - Mar 6, 2018 / — -
|Drawing - my one constant love. SCAD statement of purpose (sequential art major)
2 - Gabi, this is a pretty good WIP. You may want to consider explaining why you took some courses twice...
Undergraduatestrop - Mar 5, 2018 / Holt - Mar 10, 2018
|'intellectual tenacity' - Transfer College Essay for UW-Madison
2 - Ian, for an essay with a title like "Intellectual Tenacity" , there was very little discussion of how you...
Undergraduateiankonradjohnson - Feb 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 1, 2018
|University of Miami transfer objectives essay - my reasons for choosing UM and the major psychology
2 - Selin, your essay fails you where you require it the most. That is, in the academic reason for your...
Undergraduateselintanriverdi - Feb 26, 2018 / Holt - Mar 1, 2018
|My road to computer science. Motivation Letter for Undergraduate Degree - Applied Computer Science
Undergraduateangelasky - Feb 25, 2018 / angelasky - Feb 28, 2018
|The meaning of life. Need Opinions on my personal statement for pace !
4 - The meaning of life: Since the beginning of times, humans are wondered about the meaning of their existence. Many...
Undergraduatejbright234 - Feb 23, 2018 / Unadelllano - Feb 24, 2018
|Hook em' Horns! Statement of Purpose - transfer into UT Austin essay
3 - Max, don't open the essay with a reference to a young age. Simply indicate that you grew up in...
Undergraduatemaxiemuss - Feb 21, 2018 / Holt - Feb 22, 2018
|Queen's Commerce: Most important lesson you learned from a mistake you have made? (300 words)
2 - Chenlei, the first sentence is a throw away. It is not necessary to create a prompt restatement in this...
Undergraduatemorninghana - Feb 15, 2018 / Holt - Feb 15, 2018
|Personal statement Application for Physiotherapy - an achievement or lesson lerned
2 - Vikhram, simply getting an invitation to join this society is not an academic achievement. An academic achievement is either...
Undergraduatevik0905 - Feb 13, 2018 / Holt - Feb 14, 2018
|"Magic tricks" inspiration - Stanford (intellectually engaging idea)
2 - @Demyann I would not consider this particular activity an intellectually engaging idea. This veers more into the area of...
UndergraduateDemyan - Feb 12, 2018 / Holt - Feb 13, 2018
|UT Austin Transfer Essay A (Apply Texas) - Help on statement of purpose (Theatre Major)
3 - Ben, I think your essay is coming along well. I think, as far as organization goes, you could...
Undergraduatebenglassy - Feb 9, 2018 / Moony2136 - Feb 9, 2018
|I am the last of 6 siblings who went to college. This is dream my transfer essay
3 - Be careful of trying too hard to make your essay a full feature-length film of your life. The best...
UndergraduateJzuniga - Feb 4, 2018 / Moony2136 - Feb 9, 2018
|Yale Young Global Scholars - Essay titled "The Cry For Justice"
UndergraduateBremners - Feb 4, 2018 / Bremners - Feb 5, 2018
|Waterloo AIF - Goals and interests in the Global Business and Digital Arts
3 - Joshua, in the first question, remove the reference to "attorney, though". Use a period after attorney and then begin...
Undergraduatemilk - Feb 3, 2018 / Holt - Feb 4, 2018
|Choose one of the communities to which you belong, describe that community and your place within it
3 - Like Holt said, your initial question of "why the hell am I here" wasn't actually answered by the rest...
Undergraduatefads - Jan 31, 2018 / milk - Feb 3, 2018
|Previous academic experiences and explanation for desire to transfer to Maryland
4 - Hello!! Like it's said above, there are many grammatical errors. So, I would suggest you go through it...
Undergraduateisaacabe - Jan 30, 2018 / DoctorWho - Jan 31, 2018
|A new flyover. Common App Essay - Undergrad Transfer
2 - Fahad, paragraph 4 which deals with your criteria for choosing a university is misplaced in this essay. After all,...
Undergraduatefadddy - Jan 30, 2018 / Holt - Jan 31, 2018
|Study Plan for Undergraduate Dance major : I Found My Dream
5 - @Holt I am sorry, there are some mistakes in compilation of sentences, here is the correct essay. The following...
UndergraduateKiianiinw - Jan 30, 2018 / Kiianiinw - Mar 20, 2018
|Undergraduate Application for Physiotherapy Personal Statement
4 - @Holt Here is an updated version. Please do let me know how this is. Any useless information? or...
Undergraduatevik0905 - Jan 25, 2018 / vik0905 - Feb 11, 2018
|Briefly describe a time that your efforts have fallen short or a goal was not accomplished
3 - I see where you're coming from. I've been trying to think of another topic and been really struggling with...
UndergraduateTdkohlert - Jan 24, 2018 / Tdkohlert - Jan 24, 2018
|Something you might not know about me: essay topic for college of Maryland
3 - thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. You must start a new topic for a new essay (useless comments...
Undergraduateapply18 - Jan 24, 2018 / apply18 - Jan 26, 2018
|Tell me about yourself (family, hobbies, dreams, strongest and weakest points)
5 - I do many things for entertainment such as playing games, reading books, listening to music,and so on. However, but...
UndergraduateGia Huy Cao - Jan 24, 2018 / Ulfaidrus_flip - Feb 16, 2018
|UIUC transfer essay - Computer Science - goals fulfilled in the intended program of study
2 - Fahad, start your essay from the current second paragraph. Since this is a word limited essay, you need to...
Undergraduatefshaikh - Jan 21, 2018 / Holt - Jan 21, 2018
|SUPPLEMENTAL APPLICATION ENTRANCE ESSAY ON POLARITY
UndergraduateSalena - Jan 19, 2018 / Holt - Jan 20, 2018
|My Alcoholic Father - College admissions Essay
Undergraduatemthao007 - Jan 18, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|Information form (AIF) - University of Waterloo - Reasons/interest/goals
2 - Jelany, when the statement is this limited in character count, the reviewer expects you to deliver the direct responses...
UndergraduateMoomin - Jan 17, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|business as a lucrative idea Umich essay- Unique qualities
4 - Kene, I was granted special permission to come back and give you advice for the correct prompt as you...
Undergraduatedaredevil - Jan 17, 2018 / Holt - Jan 18, 2018
|I was taught to accept life-changing situations with open arms - 'understanding of yourself' essay
Undergraduateaapear - Jan 16, 2018 / aapear - Jan 16, 2018
|State why you wish to leave your present college and attend Virginia Tech
2 - vincent, you are not presenting compelling reasons for your transfer to Virginia Tech. It sounds more like you are...
Undergraduatevvo22181 - Jan 15, 2018 / Holt - Jan 16, 2018
|In your personal statement include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why
Undergraduateadottde - Jan 15, 2018 / segun2700 - Jan 15, 2018
|UBC Personal Statement - What I have learnt about myself as a leader and a team member ............
2 - Jaanvi, before you can polish the grammar of this essay, you first need to make sure that your content...
Undergraduatechoco2503 - Jan 15, 2018 / Holt - Jan 15, 2018
|My ability to quietly influence others. UBC Personal Profile Question
3 - hai sagedragon, overall when I read your writing, it is closely related to your hobby not personal description...
Undergraduatesagedragon - Jan 15, 2018 / agustina - Jan 17, 2018
|UBC personal profile - I surprise people - answer for the 'Tell us about who you are question'
Undergraduatearsingh - Jan 15, 2018 / arsingh - Jan 15, 2018
|I'm a persistent and hardworking individual. UBC Undergraduate Applications / Personal Profile
2 - Kaili, you can use a collective statement to respond to this essay because each member of the specific community...
Undergraduatekaili013 - Jan 14, 2018 / Holt - Jan 15, 2018
|UBC Personal profile "Tell us about who you are" & "What is important you? and why?
3 - hai Premal, let's improve together.... here I find some gramatical errors let me show you 1. My goal...
UndergraduatePremal - Jan 14, 2018 / agustina - Jan 17, 2018
|Explains why you chose your program of study-What interests you the most about this major?-UIC essay
3 - Jaanvi, one of the major reasons that an applicant loses his slot as a potential student candidate is when...
Undergraduatechoco2503 - Jan 14, 2018 / Holt - Jan 14, 2018
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