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|(PERSONAL STATEMENT) Write a letter to your future self to read on your graduation day.
NEW - Hello and thank you in advance for reading my essay and helping me reach my goals. If you have...
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|From Germany to Florida - UBC Personal Profile: "Tell us about who you are..."
2 - @tararanganatha Hi! Welcome to the forum. I hope that this feedback somehow helps you in your writing endeavors. ...
Undergraduatetararanganatha - Dec 7, 2019 / Maria - 2 days ago
|UBC Personal profile question: Club - Important activities - Hackathon
2 - @marethyu12 Hello, welcome to the forum! Here's my feedback on your writing that I hope will somehow be of...
Undergraduatemarethyu12 - Dec 4, 2019 / Maria - Dec 6, 2019
|Law and Humans - UCAS University Law Personal Statement Essay
2 - @melissafng Hi! Welcome. I'm here to provide you with feedback on this write-up. I hope this helps somehow. ...
Undergraduatemelissafng - Dec 4, 2019 / Maria - Dec 6, 2019
|CommonApp Essay support: kind of attributes conveyed, revew and improvements
UndergraduateBastian - Dec 3, 2019 / XPROFF - Dec 5, 2019
|SSRF - motivation letter for applying a project
UndergraduateChenxi_D - Dec 3, 2019 / XPROFF - Dec 3, 2019
|Most Important activity: volunteering a Zither store/ UBC personal Profile
2 - @k009999 Welcome to the forum! I hope my feedback gives you somewhat of an idea of how to improve...
Undergraduatek009999 - Dec 1, 2019 / Maria - Dec 2, 2019
|Beyond the silence! / Personal essay / Common App : Discuss an accomplishment, event....
3 - I think your topic of choice is really phenomenal and the way you've weaved it into a story of...
Undergraduatezabdou - Dec 1, 2019 / Bastian - Dec 3, 2019
|UBC Personal Profile, List One or Two Substantial Activities.
3 - There are some minor proofreading errors such as missing articles ...to find a common ground on... and errors of...
Undergraduatemguo - Dec 1, 2019 / Bastian - Dec 3, 2019
|A word that describes me is resilient - UBC Personal Profile
3 - @plforielts Thank you for the feedback, I agree with your comments i'll rephrase the mentioned sentences to try and...
Undergraduatemguo - Dec 1, 2019 / mguo - Dec 1, 2019
|Hockey and losing weight - UBC Personal Profile: Tell us about who you are?...
3 - @Arsidhu Hello there. I hope you're doing well. This is my feedback on your writing that I hope somehow...
UndergraduateArsidhu - Nov 30, 2019 / Maria - Dec 2, 2019
|UBC essay about my diary as the most important thing to me
3 - My day is never over without telling her all its incidences. She's the protagonist of all my success stories;...
UndergraduateBassant7 - Nov 29, 2019 / Bassant7 - Nov 29, 2019
|Enriched through learning - UBC application question, what is important to you and why?
2 - @MacSir Hi there. Thanks for coming to the site! I hope that this feedback of mine gives you an...
UndergraduateMacSir - Nov 28, 2019 / Maria - Nov 28, 2019
|Struggling to Answer - UBC Personal Profile question
4 - I think your essay is really personal and discloses a side of you that admissions officers would appreciate. Right...
Undergraduatensliwa - Nov 27, 2019 / Bastian - Dec 3, 2019
|Importance of Baseball - UBC Application
Undergraduatejaden51 - Nov 27, 2019 / nsliwa - Nov 29, 2019
|UBC Personal Profile Sister's Comparison
2 - @CasualCasual Hi there. Thanks for coming to the forum! I hope my feedback helps you out somehow. While...
UndergraduateCasualCasual - Nov 26, 2019 / Maria - Nov 26, 2019
|Traumatized - Writing review and improvisations that can be done
2 - @smuthu21 Hey, welcome to the forum! I hope my feedback gives you an idea on how to improve your...
Undergraduatesmuthu21 - Nov 26, 2019 / Maria - Nov 26, 2019
|Personal Statement for Exchange to Caltech | To be graded by fellow students | Impressions of me?
2 - @Raikhyt Hi there. Thanks for coming to the site! I hope that my feedback gives you an idea on...
UndergraduateRaikhyt - Nov 25, 2019 / Maria - Nov 26, 2019
|Air Cadets, full of suprises and changes. - UBC Personal Profile Essay
3 - @student986 Hi there! Thanks for coming to the site for assistance. I hope my feedback gives you an idea...
Undergraduatestudent986 - Nov 25, 2019 / Maria - Nov 26, 2019
|Camp Squamish Mentor - UBC Personal Profile: Tell us more about an activity & what you learned.
2 - @Kpalacios02 Great response to the question, I would say try to split it into two or more separate paragraphs...
UndergraduateKpalacios02 - Nov 25, 2019 / mguo - Nov 25, 2019
|"How building toys actually made me a better person" - UBC Personal Profile
3 - @student986 Hi there. Thanks for coming to the site! I'm a contributor - and I hope my feedback gives...
Undergraduatestudent986 - Nov 25, 2019 / Maria - Nov 26, 2019
|Berea College - Bachelor of Business Application Essay for International Student
3 - @Maria thank you very much for your response. by mentioning about my Armenian friend, I wanted to use the...
Undergraduatebsuzunoglu - Nov 24, 2019 / bsuzunoglu - Nov 25, 2019
|Research - Most important activities - UBC essay
2 - @farhanav Hi there. Thanks for coming to the site again! Here's my feedback on your writing. While I...
Undergraduatefarhanav - Nov 23, 2019 / Maria - Nov 25, 2019
|Perseverance - UBC personal profile: What is important to you and why?
2 - I really like how you used anecdotal evidence to demonstrate how important perseverance is important. You mention that you...
Undergraduatefarhanav - Nov 23, 2019 / student986 - Nov 25, 2019
|Debating - Most Important Activities - UBC Personal Essay
2 - well organized. it would be better if you talk about a specific debate event than just list your responsibilities...
Undergraduatesleepyshamrocks - Nov 23, 2019 / Lanyi - Nov 24, 2019
|UBC Essay Prompt - The Best Friend
4 - In the second paragraph,I was largely oblivious to what ... may be changed to I had forgotten a lot...
Undergraduatestudent1710 - Nov 23, 2019 / puppy1111 - Nov 24, 2019
|The Swiss Army Knife - UBC Personal Essay
2 - I really like how you used the symbolism of the swiss army knife to describe yourself, its unique and...
Undergraduatesleepyshamrocks - Nov 23, 2019 / student986 - Nov 25, 2019
|UBC personal Essay - My reliability
Undergraduatefarhanav - Nov 23, 2019 / sleepyshamrocks - Nov 23, 2019
|UBC Personal Profile; provide something about yourself that you are most proud of. Model UN.
2 - @help_needed_pls Hi there! I was a member of MUN, both event organiser and delegate, too in my home city!...
Undergraduatehelp_needed_pls - Nov 23, 2019 / plforielts - Nov 23, 2019
|The tutor - Ubc personal profile essay
3 - Thank you for the reply. I have edited it. Different people have varying perspectives of a person. Most...
Undergraduatejoshuajacobj7 - Nov 22, 2019 / joshuajacobj7 - Nov 23, 2019
|My Model UN experience - solving global issues
3 - 348 words re-edit Last year, I joined my school's Model United Nations club. My acceptance was a huge...
Undergraduatereneemvm - Nov 20, 2019 / reneemvm - Nov 22, 2019
|How my athletics reflects my determination
3 - @Maria Would it be better if I reconstructed the last sentence and fixed some other sentences to make them...
Undergraduatereneemvm - Nov 18, 2019 / reneemvm - Nov 19, 2019
|Quality and Consistency - UBC PERSONAL PROFILE ESSAY
3 - @student19 Good essay. The suggestions I have for you are: and ended my academic career on... I...
Undergraduatestudent19 - Nov 16, 2019 / farhanav - Nov 23, 2019
|Valuable person - UBC Personal Profile - Tell us about who you are
4 - @ppham2020 @jennieyo Thank you for the feedback. I will try to stick to only a few traits and give...
Undergraduateagupta - Nov 16, 2019 / agupta - Nov 17, 2019
|UBC Personal Profile: Who are you? One who has stepped out of their shell to become a leader
4 - In the first line, I would remove the sentence that says, "despite the little recognition I get for my...
Undergraduateppham2020 - Nov 15, 2019 / reneemvm - Nov 20, 2019
|Working at a consulting company - UBC Personal Profile - Activity
3 - ... and present it them in my own way". ... my organizational skills". ... and compare it them with...
Undergraduateagupta - Nov 15, 2019 / reneemvm - Nov 19, 2019
|UBC Personal Profile - Cupcakes
2 - @ieahat Hi! Thanks for coming to the forum. I hope my feedback gives you insight on how to improve...
Undergraduateieahat - Nov 15, 2019 / Maria - Nov 16, 2019
|UBC Personal Profile - Tell us about who you are - "Not a Prodigy Runner"
3 - @kyliemwong I agree with @Maria, I think you should talk less about the whole journey of how you got...
Undergraduatekyliemwong - Nov 15, 2019 / agupta - Nov 17, 2019
|Difficult class - Colgate University's supp essay
2 - @alta Hi there as well! I'm going to give you feedback on your writing that'll hopefully help you in...
Undergraduatealta - Nov 15, 2019 / Maria - Nov 16, 2019
|UBC personal essay:Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends...
Undergraduatemangoyabani - Nov 14, 2019 / mangoyabani - Nov 16, 2019
|Problem-solving passion - U of Waterloo Data Science AIF Question
2 - @emilywang2002 Hi there. Thanks for being a part of the forum! I hope that this feedback will give you...
Undergraduateemilywang2002 - Nov 14, 2019 / Maria - Nov 16, 2019
|UBC PERSONAL PROFILE: a real-life Wonder Woman who couldn't sit still whenever it came to unfairness
6 - you should definitely add more about your specific qualities and what others would describe you more...
Undergraduatejennieyo - Nov 13, 2019 / student19 - Nov 17, 2019
|Personality essay who you are and what makes the person who you are
2 - @Dinaol1234 Hi there. Welcome to the forum! I hope that this feedback gives you clarity on what you need...
UndergraduateDinaol1234 - Nov 11, 2019 / Maria - Nov 13, 2019
|My nine years younger brother - UBC application
2 - @unigirl123 Hi there. Welcome here! I hope this feedback gives you an idea on how to improve your writing....
Undergraduateunigirl123 - Nov 9, 2019 / Maria - Nov 13, 2019
|Volleyball. Explain about an interest you have pursued outside your academic classes
2 - Your essay is so good and if you can change "team captain" to "team's captain" grammatically, I believe it...
UndergraduateFengLun - Nov 3, 2019 / Cuong Trinh - Nov 7, 2019
|Dumpling of My Life - FSU Essay
2 - @koowilliam01 Hi there. Welcome to the forum. Hopefully, my feedback will give you an idea on how to improve...
Undergraduatekoowilliam01 - Nov 1, 2019 / Maria - Nov 3, 2019
|NAME AND IDENTITY - COMMONAPP 650 words or less
4 - @nochaelle04 I actually think that it should be a larger portion of your essay- you could dive into...
Undergraduatenochaelle04 - Oct 28, 2019 / lycheepeach12 - Oct 29, 2019
|HOW THE SMARTPHONE CHANGED PEOPLE'S LIVES
3 - Good day, Your writeup is interesting. But can be expanded for better content. 1An essay is better when it...
Undergraduatephuongthao187 - Oct 26, 2019 / Tobechukwu - Oct 26, 2019
|Videos and games - Commonapp: Reflect on a time when you questioned or challenged a belief or idea
4 - @Maria When you say prioritize as well the details that are essential what exactly do you mean? Can you...
UndergraduateTuguldurgnrdn - Oct 24, 2019 / Tuguldurgnrdn - Nov 3, 2019
|Bike ride - A story from your life which could illustrate your character
2 - @thfdlrla Taking a first example by you learning to ride a bike, I think it's good move. Learning...
Undergraduatethfdlrla - Oct 23, 2019 / ndhnif - Oct 23, 2019
|Robot "02618" - Common App Essay (Setback/Failure) - Is it to cliche? Is it any good?
3 - Try to write like you talk. The descriptive writing you're going for is not working out that well for...
Undergraduateiswhars - Oct 22, 2019 / Tuguldurgnrdn - Oct 24, 2019
|Things that caught my interests in Purdue - in one hundred words or less
Undergraduateomostic21 - Oct 22, 2019 / omostic21 - Oct 26, 2019
|Stanford students have a sense of intellectual vitality. Intellectually engaging idea or experience.
3 - More of an deep-insight-tip here, Stanford is prestigious for their weirdness and quirkiness, so you should try to make...
UndergraduateJKANG - Oct 22, 2019 / Tuguldurgnrdn - Oct 24, 2019
|When my dog died - Most Significant challenge I faced - MIT Prompt
2 - @prmchpra7 Hello there! Good luck on your MIT application. I'm going to provide you with feedback on your writing....
Undergraduateprmchpra7 - Oct 22, 2019 / Maria - Oct 24, 2019
|My passion for aviation. Congressional Nominational Essay for Air force Academy
2 - @Bpriley1414 Welcome to the forum. I hope this feedback becomes beneficial for you! Please don't hesitate to approach us...
UndergraduateBpriley1414 - Oct 20, 2019 / Maria - Oct 23, 2019
|"My world and my Dreams" MIT prompt
3 - @Maria Thanks for the feedback! The essay has word limit of 250 words. I understand that I need...
Undergraduateprmchpra7 - Oct 19, 2019 / prmchpra7 - Oct 22, 2019
|Woman for Humanity - the person you dream of becoming and how do you believe Syracuse University
2 - @obluebeanso Hello. Thanks for coming to the forum. I'm going to give feedback on this essay of yours. Hopefully,...
Undergraduateobluebeanso - Oct 18, 2019 / Maria - Oct 19, 2019
|Multicultural affairs - Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?
Undergraduateobluebeanso - Oct 18, 2019 / obluebeanso - Oct 18, 2019
|To Work as a Software Engineer - SFU Dual Degree Prompts - Academic or career goals after university
2 - @ng864 Hi. Thanks for your continuous contributions to the forum. I hope that this feedback gives you insight on...
Undergraduateng864 - Oct 17, 2019 / Maria - Oct 18, 2019
|The Importance of Education - What is important to you and why? - UBC Personal Profile
3 - @ng864 Hi. Thanks for being in the forum once more. Please don't hesitate to come back if you have...
Undergraduateng864 - Oct 16, 2019 / Maria - Oct 19, 2019
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