|[IELTS Writing task 1] Diagram: Transformation of a university campus
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|Reasons why not settle down in another planet
2 - You are making unverified claims in your opening sentence that do not comply with the original prompt statement. There...
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|Writing task 2 - digital books will dominate traditional ones in the near future
2 - The original prompt for this essay requires an extent response. You have not discussed the essay as per the...
Writing Feedbackquangdeptraizzz - Dec 29, 2020Holt - Dec 30, 2020
|NUS Personal Statement, "elaborate your achievements and their relevance to your chosen course"
3 - Holt has already given you excellent advice, but I think you should also elaborate on specific examples of your...
Undergraduateazulamikaelson - Dec 29, 2020BearByte - Dec 29, 2020
|(GKS-G/KGSP-G) Personal Statement - Global Studies Major
ScholarshipLalunafr - Dec 29, 2020mikka - Jan 8, 2021
|"I want to kill myself" - Brown PLME Supplemental Essay #2
3 - Yeah, I agree. you need to reflect more on yourself than focusing on others. In addition, make your introduction...
UndergraduateChizam101 - Dec 28, 2020Politics 786 - Dec 30, 2020
|Give us an example of how the pandemic has changed your involvement in the commUBC Personal Profile
2 - The response told me more about the death of your grandmother than your involvement in a community or group...
Undergraduatekonain1 - Dec 28, 2020Holt - Dec 29, 2020
|The Happy Little Cow. I am from Dominican Republic, a poor country.
2 - The essay is touching, but lacking in focus. I am not sure what prompt you are responding to at...
UndergraduateIsellesueromatos - Dec 28, 2020Holt - Dec 29, 2020
|People's opinions differ as to whether to get a job or continue their education
2 - This essay would get an automatic failing score based solely on the limited word count. Writing 200 out of...
Writing Feedbackphunghoaithuong - Dec 28, 2020Holt - Dec 29, 2020
|I wanted good grades - PERSONAL STATEMENT KGSP
ScholarshipPapiya Dam - Dec 28, 2020azulamikaelson - Dec 29, 2020
|Online shopping is becoming more popular. How could this trend affect our environment and the kinds
3 - ClockWork has already pointed out the ambiguity of the answer you provided, but I think another flaw in this...
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|Antibiotic Resistance in Pediatric Patients
2 - The first paragraph should deliver a focused history of the use of antibiotics in children and the commonly known...
Research Papersdeemoss2043 - Dec 28, 2020Holt - Dec 28, 2020
|Caring - UBC: "Tell us about who your are and what are you proud of?"
3 - Your essay reflects your honest opinions, making it really compelling and unique. You also did a really great job...
Undergraduateastrous - Dec 28, 2020navss - Dec 28, 2020
|Colonizing Mars and the Death of Earth
2 - Do not open the presentation with a paraphrasing, direct quote, or reference to Elon Musk. You do not need...
Research PapersLaila_tatum - Dec 27, 2020Holt - Dec 28, 2020
|My success - who you are - University of British Columbia Personal profile essay
2 - Dear Meugen, I honestly feel the first paragraph is waste , when you could have talked about things you...
Undergraduatemeugen - Dec 27, 2020akalo - Dec 28, 2020
|Scholarship essay open topic for engineering - Puzzle Pieces
2 - This portion of any application is always meant to help you focus on a particular talent, ability, skill, or...
Scholarshipkaching00 - Dec 27, 2020Holt - Dec 28, 2020
|It is commonly said that youngsters obesity is becoming a dire problem for numerous world's nations
2 - ... discuss the common specific causes and consequences. of this condition as well as how to scientifically address it...
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|Spending money promoting a healthy lifestyle, or on the treatment of people who are already ill?
4 - Hello, @DoctorWho has commented carefully on the content of your essay and I completely agree with @DoctorWho. Still, I...
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|The practical values of Liberal Arts - WESLEYAN ADDITIONAL ESSAY
4 - Your response does not fit the prompt. The last paragraph should be the overall basis of your expanded response....
Undergraduatetoodii2102 - Dec 27, 2020Holt - Dec 28, 2020
|IELTS Task 2: Learning about the past - It is often said that there is no point in studying history
Writing FeedbackThanglong - Dec 27, 2020Holt - Dec 28, 2020
|Many teenagers nowadays enjoy communicating through social networks rather than talking face-to-face
4 - Dear @ TheCard, When Holt gave feedback on one of my essays, Holt said that additional information that the...
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|When people succeed, it is not only because of hard working but also luck.
6 - My first impression is that you have quite many spelling errors and use informal language. If you want to...
Writing FeedbackJyao - Dec 27, 2020vicz001 - Jan 8, 2021
|UBC - tell us about who you are: Coding/humor
2 - @geetang Don't start a paragraph with like you should start withI was inspired by movies... and make the...
Undergraduategeetang - Dec 26, 2020Ariana Parker - Dec 27, 2020
|Personal Statement for Msc in Marketing in Dublin
3 - @Holt Thank you for your suggestions. I tried to incorporate those in the new edit. Please have a...
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|Public career and job satisfaction - Writing Task 2
Writing Feedbackkuku_ump_edu_vn - Dec 26, 2020kuku_ump_edu_vn - Dec 28, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile Unfamiliar Situation - Baseball Team Manager
Undergraduatenavss - Dec 26, 2020navss - Dec 27, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 the number of books borrowed from four villages
3 - I think you should divide your report into 4 part: 1. Intro: one sentence 2. Overview: - Trend -...
Writing FeedbackKellyloo - Dec 26, 2020RosieJun - Jan 8, 2021
|Motivation Letter - Erasmus Mundus scholarship - Smart System Integration Solution (SSIs)
2 - You have delivered your academic motivation clearly in this presentation. However, you failed to explain why you have chosen...
Lettersfauzi10 - Dec 26, 2020Holt - Dec 28, 2020
|More and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time for a job or study
Writing Feedbacksenseofhumour - Dec 26, 2020Holt - Dec 30, 2020
|Soccer players - IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Bar chart
2 - The summary overview has 2 problems: - Lack of sports listing based on the image provided - Lack of...
Writing Feedbackthaopham170599 - Dec 26, 2020Holt - Dec 26, 2020