ADMISSION LETTER TO UNIVERSITY PART TIME PROGRAM

Logistics and Supply Chain Management Program

Dear Sir/Madam,

I'm writing this letter to deeply express my genuine interest in the undergraduate program in Logistics and Supply Chain Management.
I have continuously been pursuing my study in Vietnam and when I came to Singapore, I'm well aware of the importance of knowledge particularly as well as the development of the society generally. The reasons I'm so into this program are due to the duration of 3-4 years I expect to complete a degree which enables me ample time to have a throughout comprehension. The field that I'm trying to develop for my career path, which is exclusively offered by RMIT part-time Logistics.

I see myself as a hard-working student, always take initiative to study and to do volunteer works. During my previous courses, I was always the leader in my group for various presentations. Besides, helping my classmates complete their assignments, understanding the lessons is my pleasure. Juggling between work and study is the most challenging task I have accomplished, yet I feel perfectly happy and proud of it that I could utilize my time both at work and school.

Although I haven't obtained any English certificates, I believe in my language competence. Having studied foreign language at home every day ensures I fit well to this degree program. This is also proven by my grades that I have achieved over the years. I would appreciate if I'm given an opportunity to be tested for my English proficiency.

Lastly, thank you for your precious time to go through my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Tran Hong Ngoc

Tran, whatever you do, do not brag about your non-existent English language skills. I hate to say this but if they test you, you will fail. So remove the reference to that in the whole essay. If the reviewer is to base your language skills on this letter alone, he may just send you back to English grammar school. Do not do it. Remove that reference. You will see the reasons why you have to do that as I continue with my review of your letter.

Your first paragraph alone does not make any sense. It does not clearly indicate a purpose, objective and reason for your studies. It is confusing to read and causes a tremendous amount of English comprehension difficulties for the reader. You even use wrong English vocabulary in the paragraph. For example, and this is the worst part of that paragraph, you said:


There is a verb, there is an adjective, but there is no subject. Importance of knowledge in what? Also, the term is "I became aware of the importance..."


Duration of 3-4 years of what? Study? Internships? Developing work skills? What? You missed out on the subject again. Also you need thorough comprehension, not throughout. Those are 2 different terms. If you want to use somewhat complex English words, then make sure you at least know the meaning of the term so you can use it properly. Also, your present tense formatting when using verb. You should have said "taking the initiative..." and "doing volunteer..."

These are but some of the reasons why you should not dare the university to test your English language skills. Believe me, you will fail if they do that. The letter alone already tells them you are exaggerating your language skills so you should instead be telling them that you plan to work on your English language skills while you are a student there in order to help you cope with your lessons.

Dear Holt,

I feel a bit insulted, your words are too strong. I know I will use English wrongly thats why I posted here.
To be honest I never feel proud of my English skill. This is I follow people's ideas that we need to let them know we are confident so yeah.

For the test part, one of their requirements is IELTS 6 which I dont have. So yeah I hope them to give me a chance for the test, without the test I will fail, not that Im daring them as u said.

Anyway, Thanks a ton for your remarks. I fully appreciate.