I am going to apply for a new postdoctoral position in this year. And I still cannot handle this language very well. Thus, I really need you help to improve this letter, it really important to me as you can see.
Did I use too much "I" in this letter, and how can I avoid it?
Thank you for your kindly help! : P
Dear Prof. xxx,
This is xxx from xxx, and I am writing to inquire about the possibility of a postdoctoral position in your laboratory. I am very interested in your research subject in xxx, and believe that my research experiences and background could make me a strong candidate.
I defended my PhD thesis on thermoelectric nanomaterials in January 2012, and I am expected to finish a postdoctoral fellowship in xxx by the end of the year 2013. My current research focuses on thermoelectric transport properties of Bi2Te3/Sb2Te3 nanocomposites and the properties enhancement in the bulk thermoelectric materials such as p-type PbTe and Ag2Te through the band structure engineering approaches.
The unique electrical conductivity enhancement of PbTe based system at high temperature is also observed during our experiment. I have been especially intrigued by studies of this phenomenon, and I would like to have the opportunity to investigate it thoroughly in the future. Of course, I am also open to working on other project.
I have strong background in material preparation, physical property measurements and structure analysis especially for thermoelectric materials, and I am capable of reproducing the cutting-edge works in our lab which have been reported by other people. With my passion for science and these skills and experiences I've built, I am looking forward to making a positive contribution to your group.
Attached you can find my C.V, which further outlines my qualifications. I am more than willing to answer any of your questions regarding to my application and research. I am looking forward to your response.
Best regards,
xxx
Did I use too much "I" in this letter, and how can I avoid it?
Thank you for your kindly help! : P
Dear Prof. xxx,
This is xxx from xxx, and I am writing to inquire about the possibility of a postdoctoral position in your laboratory. I am very interested in your research subject in xxx, and believe that my research experiences and background could make me a strong candidate.
I defended my PhD thesis on thermoelectric nanomaterials in January 2012, and I am expected to finish a postdoctoral fellowship in xxx by the end of the year 2013. My current research focuses on thermoelectric transport properties of Bi2Te3/Sb2Te3 nanocomposites and the properties enhancement in the bulk thermoelectric materials such as p-type PbTe and Ag2Te through the band structure engineering approaches.
The unique electrical conductivity enhancement of PbTe based system at high temperature is also observed during our experiment. I have been especially intrigued by studies of this phenomenon, and I would like to have the opportunity to investigate it thoroughly in the future. Of course, I am also open to working on other project.
I have strong background in material preparation, physical property measurements and structure analysis especially for thermoelectric materials, and I am capable of reproducing the cutting-edge works in our lab which have been reported by other people. With my passion for science and these skills and experiences I've built, I am looking forward to making a positive contribution to your group.
Attached you can find my C.V, which further outlines my qualifications. I am more than willing to answer any of your questions regarding to my application and research. I am looking forward to your response.
Best regards,
xxx