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My house is bigger than before after the renovation. UNIPDU FTD- LETTERS TO ENI


JL.Manggis,
Mojowarno JOMBANG
20 October 2016

Assalamualaikum Wr.Wb My Friend Eni Dwi
Hello eni how are you? I believe yoa're okay. We long time no see so iam very miss you. By this letter to send you for to tell about my house now. First my house has big after repair, in my garden planted by me various kind fruit,gown, and vegetable. Part of terrace become wide and is chair for unwid that not boring. Space my living now ordered neat and given a TV that more comfortable for gather with family, but my room permanent equal only just wall that in paint and look more cleanly. Oh yeah you know? My kitchen give a kitchen set so i more fight for cooking. Because still many wishing to i tell you about my house, i hope you read and revenge letter this, if you have time i hope you visit to my house. Such letter me this, iam waiting for your reply and please tell me about place your live in there.

Wassalamualaikum Wr.Wb
Your friend
Fera Firina

I assume that this letter needs major revision, especially with the letter format, grammar, and punctuations. Therefore, I would like to rewrite and rephrase some of the sentences in this letter. I hope you can learn something by paying a close attention to this revision.

Jombang, 20 October 2016
To:
Eni Dwi
JL.Manggis,
Mojowarno JOMBANG

Assalamualaikum Wr.Wb

Dear My Friend Eni Dwi,

Hello Eni! How are you? I hope you are okay. It has been long time since the last we met each other. I do really miss you. In this letter, I am going to tell you about my new house. My house is bigger than before after the renovation. I can plant various kinds of fruit and vegetables in my garden. Part of my terrace become wider and I put a chair there to relax. The living room is now really neat and it has TV to make me comfortable watching with my entire family. The wall in my room has been permanently painted in order to look cleaner. You know what? I also have a kitchen set for cooking. Actually, I still have some many things that I want to tell you. I hope you can read this letter and reply it soon. If you have spare time, I really hope that you can visit my house. I am waiting for your response and please tell me about your place.

Wassalamualaikum Wr.Wb

Your Friend,
Fera Firina


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