Dear ****s,
In the past weeks we have tried to communicate to each other and work as a group.we have helped each other and discussed ideas. Since knowing each other, talking as more than coworkers will make our work and communications better, we have arranged a meeting -a google hang out.
we have all been talking about a google hang out and now, let's do it.
so, tomorrow (Friday) at 12 a.m. GMT we will be waiting to see you all. If the date and time is not OK for you, please email me. we'll try to pick a time that's best for most of us.
best,
Helia, I am not sure as to how to edit this invitation for you. Kindly supply the directions for this letter. I need to know:
1. Who is the letter addressed to?
2. What is the purpose of the letter?
3. How is Google Hang Out supposed to help your purpose?
4. What are the advantages of attending the Hang Out meeting?
5. Will there be problems for anyone who does not attend?
6. Who is the signatory on the letter?
well, why do you need those?
but, It's in a community. we are something like project managers and we are trying to make us feel more like a group. so the work would improve. google hang out makes us meet each other and commit and everything
I need to know that information because that is the kind of information that is normally found in an invitation letter. Whether electronic or paper, the requirements of an invitation letter are all the same. You are asking us to help you revise or edit your letter right? We cannot help you if you do not give us complete instructions and access to necessary information. I hope my explanation helps :-)
I understand. we're coursera's language coordinators, the meeting is so we can gather around out of the coursera's forums and talk more as friends and get to know each other. this will help us feel like a group so we can work along and care for other language's works too, so this will improve the coursera's translation community. (since this is a volunteer work)
Let me try to clean up this letter for you :-)
Dear friends,
Over the past few weeks we have been communicating with each other in the hopes of better exchanging our ideas using official channels of communication. Some of us feel however, that our relationship as co-workers will also be better helped if we have an out of the box place to hang out and bond with one another. We now have a Google Hangout spot where we can meet on Fridays at 12:00 for more discussion and bonding time. If the schedule will be problem for some of you, please send me an email so that we can coordinate a better time with the other members of the group.
Till then,
Feel free to use this version if you like it :-)
it's AWESOME! do you have any suggestions for me which would improve my writing and speaking skills?
Helia, the only advice that I can give you at this point is to practice. Practice writing in English and speaking in English. Immersing yourself in the English world on practically a 24/7 basis will be of great benefit to you. You can even try to practice writing in English by doing creative writing exercises wherein you make up stories in English. Then you can post it here for us to review and correct. Remember, practice without correction will be useless. So if you can keep practicing the written English by having us guide you, there may be a great improvement in your work in the span of a week or two. As for speaking, you need to find some English speakers or other English students to practice speaking with as often and as long as possible. You can only learn to properly speak the language if you eliminate the use of your native tongue and use English as your major mode of communication with others. It sounds extreme but it is something that actually works :-)
I like writing so I will start writing in english and posting here for correction. Thank you VERY much Louisa!