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Motivation letter for International Master's program in Neuroscience (NeuroBIM)

minhsym1341 1 / 1  
Nov 5, 2023   #1
Write a motivation letter explaining why you choose this field of study and this program in particular. Display how the educational path that you took logically fit with your desired field of study and what is your plan for the furture


Dear sir/madam,
I am writing to convey my enthusiasm for the International Master's program in Neuroscience (NeuroBIM) offered by the University of Bordeaux. With a strong academic foundation, demonstrated throughout my academic career, I am eager to pursue a career that will fulfill my desire to understand the inner workings of the brain and its relationship with human functions.

My academic journey began with a Bachelor's degree in Pharmaceutical Medical and Agricultural Biotechnology at the University of Science and Technology of Hanoi (USTH), where I was introduced to the world of biological research. I excelled in my studies, particularly in courses that formed the foundational knowledge for my future aspirations in molecular neurobiology.

At USTH, I studied the core concepts of molecular biology, protein engineering, and bioinformatics, gaining important knowledge about the vital techniques and processes used in modern cutting-edge research. Most importantly, I improved upon my basic understanding of the central nervous system, neurons, specifically their structural components and communication through synapses. This foundational knowledge serves to fuel my passion for understanding the biochemical mechanism behind the remarkable functions of the brain.

During my academic journey, I witnessed the detrimental effects of neurodegenerative disorders on the lives of my loved ones, particularly my grandfather's battle with Parkinson's disease. This experience heavily contributed to my academic pursuit, driving me to participate in meaningful research carried out in the neuroscience community.

To gain hands-on experience, I actively sought out opportunities for research. In my second year at USTH, I worked on a project aimed to optimize the production of B-carotene through genetic transformation and molecular techniques. This work resulted in a publication under my name and provided invaluable insights into various laboratory techniques and experimental design.

My academic pursuit led me to the University of Trento, where I chose to explore neuroscience-related courses. I was particularly intrigued by the course 'Cellular and Molecular Neurobiology.' Here, I was captivated by the intricate workings of neurons, and the roles of different neurotransmitters in a multitude of brain function, primarily GABA, glutamate, dopamine and acetylcholine. This transformative exchange period solidified my goal of conducting research on the interplay between molecular synaptic regulation and neurodegenerative disorders.

Determined to gain experience in this field of study, I conducted research on the mechanisms of Friedreich's ataxia using a Drosophila model. Through genetic crossings and advanced microscopy techniques, I explored the phenotypic effects of frataxin knockdown, and the findings of my research were showcased at the EMBO 2023 workshop on ferroptosis.

Currently, I am actively sharpening my practical skills in a molecular biology lab where I am working on the development a multiplex real-time PCR-based detection method for antimicrobial genes. During this time, I had the honor to present my research at the 2023 Rencontres du Vietnam scientific conference. This project has provided me with expertise in various molecular techniques and analytical tools, such as PCR-based methods, MALDI-TOF MS and western blotting, enhancing my capabilities as a scientist.

I am also pursuing a Master's degree in Biomedical Biotechnology at USTH to expand my theoretical knowledge further, with a focus on courses like molecular biology and bioinformatics. This additional expertise will undoubtedly strengthen my foundation in the field of neuroscience.

The International Master's program in Neuroscience at the University of Bordeaux aligns perfectly with my career goal. The core courses, in particular "molecular neurobiology" and "Current research in Cellular and Molecular Neurobiology," will equip me with the knowledge and skills necessary to excel in this field.

I am especially drawn to the work of Dr. Sandra Soukup at Neurocampus, whose research focuses on synaptic homeostasis and its implications in neurodegenerative diseases. My background in Drosophila handling, molecular techniques, and image analysis using ImageJ positions me to make valuable contributions to her research.

Furthermore, I am enthusiastic about the opportunities for collaboration and hands-on training offered by the Bordeaux School of Neuroscience through different workshop, especially the CAJAL training program. I look forward to engaging with up and coming scientists such as myself, exchanging ideas, and contributing to the scientific community.

In the long term, I hope to pursue a Ph.D. at the University of Bordeaux and dedicate my career to neurobiology research, particularly in the realm of neurodegenerative disorders. I am committed to conducting meaningful research that contributes positively to society.

In parallel with my academic life, I am also deeply passionate about working to help the community around me. I have actively participated in initiatives such as cooking and providing meals for patients at the National Institute of Hematology and Blood in Vietnam, and I was involved in a project aimed at cleaning up contaminated rivers in Hanoi.

I am convinced that the International Master's program in Neuroscience at the University of Bordeaux can act as a springboard to propel me toward my goals to make a meaningful impact in the field of neurobiology. Getting accepted into this program would be the motivational-booster I need to push myself in my educational journey.

Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to the opportunity to work, learn and collaborate as part of the University of Bordeaux.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,898 4797  
Nov 5, 2023   #2
With a strong academic foundation, demonstrated throughout my academic career

Remove this part. You may believe you have a strong academic career, but the reviewer may believe otherwise. You should never make such boastful assimptions in your letters. It challenges the reviewer to find fault with your credentials.

This work resulted in a publication under my name

Another boastful claim. When you say things like this, always back it up with evidence. Give the online publication information such as the journal name, volume and series number, production information, and ISBN number if available. Non inclusion of this information will negate your claim of being a published scientific author.

Try to develop a clearer career path in reference to your motivation. There is something missing in the presentation. There is a lack of balance between your goal and motivation. Perhaps because the paper centers mostly on your academic background and nothing more.
OP minhsym1341 1 / 1  
Nov 9, 2023   #3
Thank you for your feedback, I will revise the essay accordingly, but about my scientific publication, since I will have to provide the jury with my CV, where I do show this evident, is it necessary to put it in my motivation letter as well?

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