Motivation Letter to study " IT " master in Germany

Could you help me review it and make corrections.

Motivation to complete my studies in Germany

I received my Bachelor's degree in Information Technology from XXXXXXXXXX in 2015. After I graduated I worked in the sale and maintenance of computers. I then worked for the "XXXXXXXX" as a web Developer. I currently work on the "XXXXXXX" Team For technology and web services as a web Developer. Through my work became interested to enrollment with master program in Germany.

I Would like to complete my studies in Germany because it is the developed countries in technology, in addition, the quality of education in Germany and the strength of German universities certificate. Another reason for choosing German is that A German university degree is highly respected by employers around the world. Germany has always been known as a land of ideas and it has been very advanced in technology, also I believe would be an extraordinary chance to get to know its culture

Clausthal Technical University is one of the universities as excellence in information technology and computer science, besides, the use of modern methods of education, knowledge and scientists. TU Clausthal occupies a leading position in the international field between German universities. During 2016 graduated from the University of Clausthal largest number of students during the 241 years. Its geographical location far from the big cities, making them suitable for full-time study environment.

I decided to study in the master's program in Information Technology to develop my skills in programming and developing web pages, through my practice after graduation I thought of more expansion in the development of the Internet pages. My ambition to be a software development and design expert websites in addition to the expansion of knowledge in networking and communications.

I'm planning to open an office services code in my country after the acquisition of skill and knowledge through I joined in the master's program.

I would like to thank you in advance for considering my application.

I think your essay is quite clear. I see a small error that is "Clausthal". What dose this mean?

Karam, the motivation letter that you developed is not very strong. There is no clear "motivation" to study your masters in Germany. You need to relate the letter intention more towards your plans for your future that can be better supported by completing your studies in Germany. Specifically, you need to develop the reasons why you picked Clausthal in particular. How does the choice of university relate to your study plans? You mentioned that you plan to open an office services code in your country, is that the motivation for your interest to study in Germany? If that is so, you need to discuss these plans as a part of the essay. The information that your essay currently contains is boring, does not really offer a personal connection in terms of motivation, and sounds more like a generic essay based on commonly known information instead of researched information that is specific to your motivation reasons. Develop the weak points that I pointed out above and you should have a usable motivation letter by the end of your revision.

Thanks for your opinion

"Clausthal" This is the name of the university.
Clausthal Technical University

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Mary,Thanks for review my letter.
thank you very much , you give me helpful advice.