'My recommendation of Jack comes without reservation' - letter

This is what i got so far.

I need some feedback, i'm just horrible at these types of Things, thank you in advance.

It is my pleasure to write this letter in support of Jack smith for your program.
As a drawing/painting instructor at XYZ college, I have known Jack since he came to our school. Jack has taken only one class with me, but we have maintained contact through discussions in my office.

I have been extremely impressed with both Jack's technical ability and motivation.
In my 10 years of teaching experience I have known other students with talent equivalent to Jack. Many of them lacked his commitment and dedication in class. Jack has an extremely sound work ethic and is hard working when it comes to his art. I feel confident that he will continue to succeed in his studies in art. Jack is a dedicated student and thus far his grades in his studio classes have been exemplary.

Jack has worked hard to hone his foundational skill sets to execute his vision. His work has become more focused, while at the same time, more complex over the short year he has been with us. What he needs now is the kind of exposure which he will get at mickeys school of art BFA program.

Please give Jack's application serious consideration. My recommendation comes without reservation. He will be an asset to the program there, and it is an excellent fit for both parties. Do not hesitate to contact me directly should you wish further information.

Sincerely,

Hi there! :)
Overall, I really liked your letter. There are somethings I would change though such as don't repeat Jack too much, but sometimes when you do, you could throw in his last name in too.

As a drawing/painting instructor at XYZ college, I havehad known Jack since he came to our schoolthe first day he attended classes at XYZ college .

Good luck !!

I suggest connecting the following sentences with a transition....

In my 10 years of teaching experience I have known other students with talent equivalent to Jack. Many of them lacked his commitment and dedication in class

In my ten year of teaching I have known other students with talent equivalent to Jacks', however, many of them lacked his level of comitment and dedication in class.

Please remember to include your contact information in the final draft.

All the best!

Thank you you very much for the input.

some minor tweeks were made. If you can provide some feedback, that would be awesome. Again thank you in advance.

To Whom It May Concern:

It is my pleasure to have this opportunity to support jack Smith for your program.
As a drawing/painting instructor at school City College, I had known Jack the first day he attended classes at school City College. He has taken only one class with me, but we have maintained contact through discussions in my office.

I have been extremely impressed with both jack's enthusiasm and technical ability.
In my ten years of teaching I have known other students with talent equivalent to jack's, however, many of them lacked his level of commitment and dedication in class. Jack has an extremely sound work ethic and is hard working when it comes to his art. He is a dedicated student and thus far his grades in his studio classes have been exemplary. I feel confident that he will continue to succeed in his future studies.

Jack Smith has worked hard to hone his foundational skill sets to execute his vision.
In the beginning his work was not noticeable, however, as the semester progressed I was impressed by his practice because his work greatly demonstrated his ability to keenly observe surroundings and convey it onto a two-dimensional surface. His work has become more focused over the year he has been with us. What he needs now is the kind of exposure, which he will get at the Strathmore Art College program.

Please give Jack's application serious consideration. My recommendation comes without reservation. He will be an asset to the program there, and it is an excellent fit for both parties. Do not hesitate to contact me directly should you wish further information.

Sincerely,