My recommendation letter for a Miss entry to the postgraduate course

Hello everyone This is my recommend that I write by myself but I'm not sure about my grammar.Could you help me to check it :) Thank you very very much for your kind.:)

To Whom It May Concern

I am delighted to have the chance to recommend Miss XXX for entry to your postgraduate course. I was her immediate supervisor during the time she worked at XXXX.Co.Ltd and she reported directly to me when carrying out her tasks and projects. Due to her strong work ethic and professionalism, I feel confident in recommending her to your school.

Ms. XXX began working for XXXX.Co.Ltd in July of 2014 until end of August 2015. As the Management trainee of this company. Her main duties involved maximizing sale, staff development and customer service. Moreover she also takes responsible about personnel department, coordination with supplier and analyzing sales.

Throughout the work Ms.XXX can support me very well. She can help me to achieve sale target 6 month continue and she train a lot of potential staff for my store. I have seen her different from other. She told me about the reason that she want to work at XXXX because this company very hard working, heavy pressure and require a great deal of exertion. She would like to put herself to the hard work atmosphere for create her work mindset and work habit. I wonder about her thinking but I decided to accept her.I have seen her smart and diligent. She spends every minute to work. Every task that I gave her, it will done as quick as possible. If she can clear manager task early, she will go to help staff to work before timeout. So, it make her subordinate love her. She has a lot responsibility with her work and always energetic and the ability to work well with teams. Every meeting she always has many ideas to share and always has at least two ways to solve problem. I do impressive her.

Although Miss XXX has been a valuable member of the XXXX management team, but she has informed me that she intends to pursue a master's degree in Entrepreneur in your graduate school. Although I would be pleased to have her remain in our company, I feel that she is well-prepared to undertake this course of study, and I support her decision fully. Based on my personal observation of her professional work ethic and her engaging personality, I believe that she will be a valuable addition to your institution. I therefore recommend her for admission without recommendation. If you should require further information about Miss XXX, please feel free to contact me and I would be glad to provide it.

Hello! I'll gladly help with your grammar and word choice.


"Due to" is not quite right here. Here's how I would stay this:
Due toHaving witnessed her strong work ethic and sense of professionalism, I feel confident in recommending her to your school.


Since you're describing the entire time frame when Ms. XXX worked for you, you should leave out the word, "began." The sentence fragment that stats with "As" can be combined with the sentence to give a unified thought. "Management" should be lower case. I'll reword some other things to improve the style. I'll show you:

Ms. XXX began workingworked for XXXX.Co.Ltd infrom July of 2014 until the end of August 2015 . Asas the company's managementManagement trainee of this company .


"Maximizing" is not the best verb for all three of these tasks. Let me propose a different way to say what you want to say:

Her main duties involved maximizing salesales , fostering staff development, and improving customer service.


"Moreover" is not necessary since you have an "also." "Takes responsible," "coordination," and "supplier" are the wrong form of the words to use here. Let me demonstrate:

Moreover sheShe also takes responsible abouttook on the responsibility of working with the personnel department, coordination with suppliercoordinating with suppliers, and analyzing sales.


I think I understand what you're trying to say. Let me suggest you say it like this:
Throughout the work Ms.XXX contributed greatly to the well-being of my company during her time herecan support me very well .


She can help me tohelped the company achieve its six-month salessale target 6 month continue and she trainand traineda lot of potential staff for my store.

I hope that helps you some!