Write a letter to the students in your school.

join the After School Sports Club

Write a letter a letter to the students in your school, encouraging them to join the After School Sports Club. Start your letter with 'Dear Students'. Your letter should be about 150-200 words long.

Essay:-

Dear Students,

The After School Sports Club is holding a new registration ceremony. The club will be held in the new school building from 2:30 pm to 5:30 pm respectively.

The club consists of different sports all fun and interesting both for girls and boys. For boys, there is swimming, football, baseball, hockey, etc. For girls, there is dodgeball, volleyball, basketball, badminton, etc. There will be one to one battle games and boys vs girls combat battles.

You will enjoy being part of this club because it is all free and this is the best way to spend your free time. There is no stress because the After School Sports Club will take it all away so that you can enjoy every single minute. There will be no limitations, except for the time limit, which you already know.

If you are interested visit the student council's room to fill a form.
For more information; visit our club's office in the old school building, 2nd floor, Hallway-3, Room No-4.

Best Regards,
Hafsa Javed,
1st April, 2020.

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Use a hyphen when writing the name of the club: After-School Sports Club

Your grammar is incorrect:

The club meeting will be held...

The club consists of different sports, all fun...

Since you are referring to a series of sports activities, the plural reference point "are" instead of the singular "is" should be used. Do not use "etc." when writing a formal letter enticing people to join the club. That word means "and so on and so forth", used only in creative or draft writing.

There is no "respectively" in this sentence. You only gave one time meeting duration for the club meeting (2:30 to 5:30 pm) In this presentation, "respectively" indicates 2 different meeting times for the same club. You only provided one meeting time.

Use a connecting word:

... being A part of this club

You advised a student here to learn how to use commas but you failed to do that in this essay. Aside from citations, commas are used to place a pause before the chang of connected ideas in a sentence presentation.

... because it is all free, and this is ...

... will take it all away , so that you can ...

You cannot say there is no limitations but there is a time limit. Do not refer to that in the letter because it is clear that there is a time limitation on the activity based on the meeting time. You will confuse the reader.