"My essence, my being, drifting away" - NYU transfer supplement - poem

I have been putting off writing the poem for the NYU supplement for a while now, but I really need to get my transfer application in ASAP.

Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you.
This is what I have so far:

Gasping for air, but barely breathing
Slowly blending into the surroundings
My essence, my being, drifting away
Big city lights, big city dreams
Pull me back in

Writing poetry is definitely not something I am good at so any suggestions/help/anything would be greatly appreciated!

Well, I can tell this came from the place poetry comes from. Writing poetry is like deliberately blurring your vision so you can see in a more abstract way.

Now, the thing is, it might not be the best idea to make this a poem in which you bear your soul with raw honesty. That sort of poem is therapy for the poet. If this is for a college application, it would be a good idea to make it so that whatever this distress is that is causing your essence and being to drift away can be alleviated by pursuing your chosen major and taking control of life. Show off your intellect, and let the poem reflect your focus on your plan for college.

:-)