This is the first poem I've ever written influenced by lyrics of Judas Priest's "Angel" single. I understand, it is far from perfection, but I would like to know about impression it creates on readers. Thank you.
Sorrow
Despair imprisons my mind
My thought ramble in shadows
Fading trust, I know
Takes me to disaster
Where's the light of peace
To lead me through the sadness
Where is the moon of hope
To lit my soul in darkness.
Now answer. No response. But why?
Perhaps I should cease searching.
Time to end this useless cry
And start my own healing.
Shattered goals left behind
No regret for broken dreams
Strengthened faith washes away
Snatches of sorrow around me.
Sorrow
Despair imprisons my mind
My thought ramble in shadows
Fading trust, I know
Takes me to disaster
Where's the light of peace
To lead me through the sadness
Where is the moon of hope
To lit my soul in darkness.
Now answer. No response. But why?
Perhaps I should cease searching.
Time to end this useless cry
And start my own healing.
Shattered goals left behind
No regret for broken dreams
Strengthened faith washes away
Snatches of sorrow around me.