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Help with five senses poem (trust, sound, taste, smell, feel). Common sense.


ludowici tammy 1 / -  
Feb 22, 2008   #1
This is what I have can you help me out?

Trust
Trust is the color of blue.
It sounds like a frienship of true.
It taste like the salt from the sea.
It smells like a fresh morning breeze.
Trust makes me feel like there will always be someone there for me.
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Feb 22, 2008   #2
Greetings!

I think you have a good start! I like the first line especially. However, I think the next one needs some work (besides the spelling, which I corrected): "It sounds like a friendship of true." That doesn't really make any sense, and even though you are being metaphorical, there needs to be enough truth in the words to make your reader relate to what you are saying. Try this line again; perhaps it could sound like some type of music. Or the ringing of a bell. Does the poem have to contain rhyme? If so, perhaps "The sound of a dove's quiet coo."

I hope this helps!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com
ogmudbone - / 1  
Mar 26, 2012   #3
Coming up with a good Sense Poem?

Hi I am trying to come up with a good sense poem for my essay can anyone help?
ScholarOnLife23 - / 2  
Apr 3, 2012   #4
Common Sense

Common Sense is necessity
When I think of her, I see
Of all the senses that make me
She makes me sight reality

Common Sense cannot fail
No matter the time or veil
which blinds me, it hails
a goodness which cannot fail

Common Sense is Wisdom old
It came from the ancients
Socrates, Aristotle, and Plato
Perception or Reason in good sense

You weren't being specific enough. Give me a sample or an idea of what you are wanting me to write about or on. ( This way I will have a good focus.) If this is going in the essay, that is.


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