Motorcycle helmets should be mandatory for all riders - research thesis statement

I'm writing a research paper for my English 101 class and I'm having trouble deciding whether or not this is a good thesis.

Here is my actual thesis statement: Motorcycle helmets should be mandatory for all riders.

I want to know if putting it into a my intro. paragraph like this will be OK. Here's what I was considering: Motorcycles are probably the most dangerous form of transportation. It only makes sense that helmets should be required for all riders and passengers on motorcycles.

Or should it be more direct?

Please help! Thanks!

I think that "Motorcycle helmets should be mandatory for all riders" would be considered an introduction sentence. On the other hand, a thesis statement basically gives the reader a heads up on what you are going to talk about in your essay. But like I said earlier, "Motorcycle helmets should be mandatory for all riders" is just an introduction sentence...in my opinion. Does that make sense?

P.S: For some reason your name sounds familiar, do you have health occupations for 3rd period?

you just need to finish the sentence, so it would be "Motorcycle helmets should be mandatory for all riders because... (then say why). This lets the reader know what the analysis will reveal.

For example, "Because motorcycles are probably the most dangerous form of transportation, helmets should be mandatory for all riders."

Would you try to introduce a speaker who was about to walk onto the stage if you did not know who the speaker was going to be? I think the thesis statement is an introduction of the essays main idea, and you cannot know the main idea until you have written a few paragraphs about the articles you read.

Do not make a thesis statement and then try to find articles to support it. Read articles and write about interesting stuff you learn. Then, wait until a main idea takes form. When it does, write about it in the thesis statement.


This might be too simplistic. To make your essay unique, do this:

Motorcycle helmets should be mandatory for all riders, because ____________(fill in the blank with an observation that some people might never have considered. You'll find great observations in the articles you read.)

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