(AAS) I choose this institution because there is an expert with similar research object

Hello! I need your feedback and correction to the supporting statement that I made to explain the reason why I choose the institution in Australia Award System. Thank you in advance.

I choose the proposed course and institution because they align and correlate with my expertise and research theme which is natural product chemistry.

-University of Tasmania-

I learned that there is an expert of my previous research object in Institute of Agriculture of University of Tasmania, Dr. KB. Her published work on Acacia tree disease and wood extractive was the main reference of my bachelor thesis. Further, the material of my previous research is a new clone of the hybrid between the two species that Dr. B studied in her research, which I believe will be of interest for future study. I believe that my study in University of Tasmania can facilitate the more advance research of this hybrid which will benefit both Indonesia and Australia in term of improving the productivity of forest plantation of both countries.

One at a time.

Dear moderator, it was literally how I write the essay, by individualizing my answer to each institution that I proposed. Because in the other post, someone said that it is better to do so. If it was not the Contributor (Holt) who said that, you should not listen to them :

While it is clear that you chose the university due to the presence of the professor on the teaching staff, your essay failed to represent the reason why you chose the course. There are only theoretical explanations in relation to the research commonalities you have with the professor but, you failed to represent the career relationship between your course and profession.

Are you a professional student? Someone who continues to study just for the sake of receiving scholarship allowances? The reason I ask is because that is the image that this essay is portraying of you as a student to the reviewer. There is no career relationship, no motivation for your studies aside from wanting to meet this professor and compare notes regarding similar research themes. There is nothing to indicate that you are a career oriented professional who requires additional learning to advance specific or overall professional skills.

Dear Holt and the moderator, thank you very much for your feedbacks! I will try to rewrite my essay with your advises in mind. I hope that you will have a good day. Cheers!