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It is this area wherein lies my passion - 'How your proposed study relates to' question



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Dec 12, 2019   #1

HOW YOUR PROPOSED STUDY RELATES TO:


a) development issues at the global, national and local level?
b) development issues connected to your chosen CSC theme and the wider sector? (200 words)


The UN's State of Food Security and Nutrition in the World report of 2019 titled, 'World Hunger is still not going down and obesity is still growing' gives an estimated number of 820 million people who did not have enough food to eat globally in 2018, a figure 9 million higher than what was reported the previous year. According to the same report, there are about 256.1 million hungry people in Africa. In Nigeria alone, there were about 13 million people who suffered hunger as of 2016 according to the Food and Agriculture Organisation (FAO). The problem is, people seem not to be interested in agriculture because of 'more input less output'. The government on the other hand, isn't worried about the situation.

Hunger seems to be on the rise globally, and with the worrying situation described thereof, it then presupposes the need for more manpower, and biotechnology being the surest way to solving this problem. The development of cutting-edge scientific approach and technologies will help in tackling hunger, achieving food security and promoting sustainable agriculture in order to achieve Zero Hunger in Nigeria, in Africa and the world at large. It is this area wherein lies my passion.

Maria - / 1096  
Dec 13, 2019   #2
@StChibuzor
Hello. Here's my feedback on this essay.

For one, if this is truly what the entire essay is comprised of, you don't necessarily need to just follow what is being asked. What this means is, you should focus a lot more on how the information will be comprehended by the readers themselves. For instance, you didn't really need to expound things excessively as you did in the first paragraph. What you could have done, however, was to focus a lot more on just a simple summation of what they want from you (the development issue - just a glance). Afterward, just proceed to expounding what you study is and how it relates to this portion of your writing. d

The last sentence on the second paragraph appears to be rather lost as there was not a single part in the former parts of the writing wherein you even touched on the subject matter of your passion. Because of this reason, you would have been better off with trying to create a more comprehensive take into the writing than just blurting a one-liner at the very end to salvage the meaning.


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