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PROMPT:
Engineers turn ideas (technical, scientific, mathematical) into reality. Tell us about an engineering idea you have or your interest in engineering. Explain how Cornell Engineering can help you further explore this idea or interest.
Imagine a car that has every part it needs for it to drive. But here's the catch: instead of having a regular car engine to power your car, you will derive hydrogen ions from water to power your car. Technology is constantly evolving in the dynamic world today; however, there are some limitations to them. These limitations require people to come up with new solutions so that technology can be used as its maximum potential. As a result, I want to study engineering in order to eliminate these limitations. I want to take my interest in math and science and invest them in engineering to creating advanced and efficient cars.
Our cars need some way to stop emitting carbon dioxide or some way to drive farther without having to constantly stop at a gas station. Maybe I can just create a larger fuel engine and transmissions so that the car can hold more gas to use; however, that'll just call for larger and more expensive cars. I can derive hydrogen ions from water and transform it into electrical power to help propel cars. The oxygen could also be used to attach to other hydrogen ions left over, which would help continually supply the car with water to use Not only would this save lots of money for gas but also drastically lower the amount of carbon dioxide emitted from cars. You can also refill your car with water anywhere you are or go. Although this might seem like an imaginary or impossible idea to others, but as an engineer, impossible means nothing to me. I want to take my interest for engineering to new heights and invest my imagination and knowledge into new innovative ideas, but before I can do this, I believe that Cornell is the place to start.
Cornell will be the catalyst that will initiate my engineering goals and the provider that will offer me the excellent educational foundation and experience necessary to succeed. From the Engineering Sciences to the sequence of system courses, the rigorous and challenging curriculum that the school presents will force me to think at a higher academic level and allow me to explore the different frontiers of engineering. From internal combustion engines that can power aircrafts to the idea I presented above, I can gain the technical knowledge that will help me implement my innovative and unique ideas in designing ground-breaking mechanical engines that would help revolutionize the dynamic world. Furthermore, the small and well equipped faculty will offer me many advantages in gaining maximum exposure to exceptional programs. With unique study abroad programs in Rome and research projects, Cornell will develop my love for research and provide me with many opportunities to gain real hands on experience and direct interaction with these intensive engineering projects.
PROMPT:
Engineers turn ideas (technical, scientific, mathematical) into reality. Tell us about an engineering idea you have or your interest in engineering. Explain how Cornell Engineering can help you further explore this idea or interest.
Imagine a car that has every part it needs for it to drive. But here's the catch: instead of having a regular car engine to power your car, you will derive hydrogen ions from water to power your car. Technology is constantly evolving in the dynamic world today; however, there are some limitations to them. These limitations require people to come up with new solutions so that technology can be used as its maximum potential. As a result, I want to study engineering in order to eliminate these limitations. I want to take my interest in math and science and invest them in engineering to creating advanced and efficient cars.
Our cars need some way to stop emitting carbon dioxide or some way to drive farther without having to constantly stop at a gas station. Maybe I can just create a larger fuel engine and transmissions so that the car can hold more gas to use; however, that'll just call for larger and more expensive cars. I can derive hydrogen ions from water and transform it into electrical power to help propel cars. The oxygen could also be used to attach to other hydrogen ions left over, which would help continually supply the car with water to use Not only would this save lots of money for gas but also drastically lower the amount of carbon dioxide emitted from cars. You can also refill your car with water anywhere you are or go. Although this might seem like an imaginary or impossible idea to others, but as an engineer, impossible means nothing to me. I want to take my interest for engineering to new heights and invest my imagination and knowledge into new innovative ideas, but before I can do this, I believe that Cornell is the place to start.
Cornell will be the catalyst that will initiate my engineering goals and the provider that will offer me the excellent educational foundation and experience necessary to succeed. From the Engineering Sciences to the sequence of system courses, the rigorous and challenging curriculum that the school presents will force me to think at a higher academic level and allow me to explore the different frontiers of engineering. From internal combustion engines that can power aircrafts to the idea I presented above, I can gain the technical knowledge that will help me implement my innovative and unique ideas in designing ground-breaking mechanical engines that would help revolutionize the dynamic world. Furthermore, the small and well equipped faculty will offer me many advantages in gaining maximum exposure to exceptional programs. With unique study abroad programs in Rome and research projects, Cornell will develop my love for research and provide me with many opportunities to gain real hands on experience and direct interaction with these intensive engineering projects.