Prompt is "Discuss the subjects in which you excel or have excelled. To what factors do you attribute your success?"
Ah, music. I remember desperately wishing to join my school's band program so that I could play the saxophone in the 3rd grade. It was such a cool instrument to me at the time, it still is in fact. But the only saxophone available at the time was damaged, and I was crushed when I transferred to a school with no band program. Unconfident and unable to afford a saxophone, I went without learning to play it until I moved on to high school. I'd nearly forgotten about the passion I'd had all those years ago, but when I was informed about the band program the memory came surging back and I rushed to the band director to see if I could join. His name was Mr. Spencer, and he still remains a largely inluential part of my life. I nervously asked if there were any saxophone slots left open. To my delight, he said that I could join by the next day-and the rest is history. The last 4 years have been amazing. I've been able to express myself in ways I never thought I could before. Things such as sporting events are less foreign to me, and my confidence has increased substantially due to the praise and recognition I've gotten over the last few years. Exploring my talent has been great, and a large cause for my drive to play is the denial of my dream to do so for so long. It was so long before I could play the instrument I admired that it felt almost like a dream when I finally could; perhaps this humbled me and made me more driven to play well. Another factor may have been my previous lack of confidence in my ability. I wanted to prove to myself and others that I could succeed at something outside of my grades and become proficient. Lastly, Mr. Spencer and my fellow band members have been amazing at keeping me focused and humble. They've provided support, praise and competition that's caused me to continually seek out new knowledge and improve.
I know I can improve it, but how?