A brief autobiography (strengths and challenges, work experience, volunteering)

A brief autobiography, no longer than two pages, describing:
- Academic strengths and challenges
- Work experience
- Volunteer activities
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I didn't write about volunteer experience yet, working on it. Thanks in advance.
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Since the day I could talk and until now, people ask me: "Who do you want to be?". Initially, I wanted to be an ice cream seller because I would get some for free for my family and friends. Later I decided to become a veterinarian so I could help suffering animals. Then I decided to be an artist to make the world more beautiful. And now... Let's see what I have done so far.

My parents are heating engineers, so as my older sister and brother, cousins, aunts and uncles. I seem to be a revolutionary in a family. I respect the job they are doing but my heart tells me this is not what I am intended for. I do not want to be a follower on built path and walk on old footprints, I would rather create my own way to success. Before graduation from high school in 2003, I thought that I knew exactly who I want to be - an architect. With this strong belief, I applied to *** Technical University and was accepted.

During six years at university I have made ten course projects. Even thought not all my grades were excellent, I worked hard and learned a lot. Working in groups requires ability in finding compromises, strict deadlines made me organize working process better. Participation in Week of Student Science Research enriched my experience of public speaking and brought few awards. After finishing graduation project in 2009, which was Children's Hospice in ***, I was granted a bachelor's degree in architecture and design.

Few years ago I discovered that marketing is another field I am interested in. So in October 2007 I entered *** School of Business in *** and now I am a three and a half year student studying marketing. Meeting new people opened more horizons for me.

I don't have that much of working experience yet. As a student, I was a trainee in two local architectural firms. I also worked as a counselor, swimming, fishing and sailing instructor at summer camp in Pennsylvania for past 3 years. Right before working at camp I attended First Aid, CPR and Lifeguarding course.

Since recently I am a customer service representative of russian cell phone operator ***.

Participating in local *** club's project "Be a Santa" was my first volunteering experience. [blah blah blah volunteer experience]

I am still not sure who I will become. No matter the future direction my life takes, I know that an education, along with the support of my family and friends, is the only thing I can take with me without a suitcase. I define a fulfilled life as never planning too far ahead because plans do not always work out. Life is a continuous learning experience, whether it be about easily changing plans when one does not work out smoothly or working with new surroundings instead of pushing against them. A fulfilling life does not come from taking the path most traveled, but there is one thing that guides me through my life with every little or big decision I make - caring of other people. It is just the beginning.

I liked your approach. best of luck.

thank you. Anything I need to change? I'm sure there are grammar and punctuation mistakes. May be structure needs improvement?

Ok, volunteering:
Participating in local *** club’s project “Be a Santa” two years ago was my first volunteering experience. In November, 2009 we organized ***ct club in our city and already made few projects including volunteering at an animal shelter in *** ([city] region), a beauty contest for girls from shelter for children with problem families, concerts for children in orphanages of our region. We are planning more charity events and volunteering actions like parks and streets cleaning and blood donorship. In March I was elected as a vice-president of ***ct Club of [city] for a year 2010-2011.

Is this ok?
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Here’s a second part. Cannot find a way to put together these paragraphs…

A detailed statement of intent, no longer than three pages, including:
- your reasons for applying for scholarship.
- your proposed field of study and future career plans, including an explanation of how these plans will support the ***’s mission to further world understanding and peace and help advance the objectives outlined on page 1.

- your reasoning used to determine your preferred study countries and study institutions and how they support your goals for serving as an ambassador of goodwill.

- a community service project or activity you intend to carry out while abroad, possibly in conjunction with a *** club.

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Experience of foreign study is difficult to afford. Scholarship is a gift awarded to a suitable and worthy person. Not only does a scholarship provide with money, but it is prestigious and an honor to receive one. It proves to others that you are one of the best students, it gives recognition and the credit earned through hard work and dedication.

I found out about [explored?] scholarship programs approximately five years ago. I had no practical use in leadership programs then and I did not realize why that would be interesting. Now, after few years of practicing gained knowledge, I see how much scholarship could give me. It is a great opportunity to meet dedicated people I can share my ideas with. Seeing other people trying to obtain their goals inspires me.

United States is a birthplace for my major and has always been on top at all kind of marketing programs. American mentality is close to mine: I am up for everything new and innovation. Like Americans, I am very passionate about every little thing I need to do for goal achievement.

Moreover, this country is where *** Club originates. In collaboration with *** young leaders have opportunity to rivet attention to various community service projects.

As for academic part, during my previous studies I have developed a strong interest in marketing. However, I think there is so much more to learn. It would be an honor for me to learn from a team of professional and academic staff who will prepare me well for the challenging work in marketing practices. I look forward to gaining an insight in the marketing practice in a different cultural and climatic context and to sharing my experience in Russia and Europe.

This *** scholarship will further me in both my personal goals and my social responsibilities. As a future marketing specialist, it is essential to understand people and I believe that English language is an invaluable tool in this process. Conversing directly with others is the best way to conduct the necessary interviews and research in the field. As a global superpower, America today is in a unique position because its culture influences and disseminates through the rest of the world. The disadvantage, which is often overlooked, is that as a nation America is not as ready to accept or even be exposed to foreign ideas. In my professional career, I want to explore this reality. As a marketer and a *** fellow, I want to contribute to what I see as a discussion between different cultures that can only benefit all sides.

The *** Scholarship offers me the opportunity both to visit and learn from the United States of America, as well as opening the door to a new world of people, experiences and knowledge. I believe that I will benefit the ***’s goals by becoming an active leader, sharing my experiences both in America and abroad.

I am anxious about situation with concern for children in my country. There are 143000 orphans in Russia and hundreds of abandoned children in *** region. But not everybody knows that a lot of them living in… hospitals. After birth mother’s abandonment child must have a health examination and to be taken to orphanage. The reason it is not happening is overflow. Hospital nurses and not numerous volunteers are taking care of these children while waiting for vacant space. But hospital cannot build into budget money for diapers, powder, cream, crawlers, etc. And the problem is not just money – children can not be raised in hospitals! I am sure there is a way to find out the solution of the problem and I will try to facilitate in it. Every child deserves a childhood.

What do you think?

This conveys a creative, confident personality... impressive stuff.

A few yea rs ago, I discovered that marketing is another field I am interested in say something more colorful here.

So in October 2007 I entered *** School of Business in *** and now I am a three and a half year student studying marketing. Meeting new people opened more horizons for me.---- This paragraph needs another sentence or two to say something meaningful about why you became interested in marketing.

I don't have that much of working experience yet. This sentence is grammatically incorrect and sort of... too self-critical. Start this paragraph with a sentence that emphasizes what you HAVE done.

... representative of Russian cell phone operator ***.

The volunteering section looks good, but do not just list everything. Describe the various accomplishments as evidence to support the main theme of the introduction of yourself to these people. What is the main theme? (YOUR main theme)

As a future marketing specialist, it is essential to understand people, and I believe that the English language is an invaluable tool in this process.

:-)

his conveys a creative, confident personality... impressive stuff.

A few years ago, I discovered that marketing is another field I am interested in say something more colorful here.

So in October 2007 I entered *** School of Business in *** and now I am a three and a half year student studying marketing. Meeting new people opened more horizons for me.---- This paragraph needs another sentence or two to say something meaningful about why you became interested in marketing.

I don't have that much of working experience yet. This sentence is grammatically incorrect and sort of... too self-critical. Start this paragraph with a sentence that emphasizes what you HAVE done.

... representative of Russian cell phone operator ***.

The volunteering section looks good, but do not just list everything. Describe the various accomplishments as evidence to support the main theme of the introduction of yourself to these people. What is the main theme? (YOUR main theme)

As a future marketing specialist, it is essential to understand people, and I believe that the English language is an invaluable tool in this process.

:-)