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Challenges are the only way to judge the person's capability of leadership and influence.



Eng Mo 2 / 2  
Oct 22, 2017   #1
Hello, I am Mohamed, I need your help to evaluate that essay and to check is it relevant to the chevening parameter or not. Thank you

Chevening Scholarship application



I believe that leadership and influence are genetic characteristics for a person, thus they depend on the personality itself than the years of experience. No matter how long the person works as long he does not encounter challenging situations through his life. These challenges are the only way to judge the person's capability of leadership and influence.

The most obvious example of my leadership skills was during working as a "Site Engineer" in " ----------". We were assigned the construction of a new building in the(--------). I was part of a team of engineers and workers which was led by an experienced project manager. We were putting the final touches before pouring the concrete for the building when we received a shocking news that our project manager was taken to the hospital and that he needs an urgent surgery which would rule him out of work for almost a month. In turn, the company would be subject to major losses and delay penalties. The problem at that time was that there is no other civil engineers in the site except for me and I was just a fresh graduate with a limited experience. It was also difficult to get a new project manager who would have no time to get the knowledge required to manage the work. While everyone in the company was desperate to find an efficient solution, I was preparing myself to take the responsibility of that task. I outlined the steps required to accomplish this mission and my weakness points. I started contacting some engineers whom I have known during undergraduate internships. They guided me how to overcome these drawbacks. The main problem I had was judging the quality of concrete, they advised me to hire an experienced quality control worker. Luckily, I have known a suitable person during my internship in "---------", so I contacted him to check his readiness for the job and he accepted immediately. After finalizing my plan, I went to meet the CEO and explained my plan to him. He admired my effort but he was afraid that any mistake would cost the company more losses so he asked for some time to think. After 2 hours, he called me to prepare everything to continue the work on the next day as planned in the time schedule. I gathered the crew and introduced the new member to them, then I started explaining our work plan and at the end of our meeting I motivated them that if we were successful, they would be rewarded. On the next day, we started working as planned and the workers showed a remarkable commitment and we finished our mission successfully. The accomplished work was met with great approbation from the supervision consultants. The CEO was delighted with our efforts and rewarded all the crew with monetary incentives. He thanked me and offered me to be the project manager till the recovery of our manager and to have wider responsibilities after his return.

I believe the success in the previous situation was because of experiencing a similar situation in the university during preparing for our graduation ceremony and we decided to hire an events planner to organize that special day but we found that would cause a rise in the tickets price in an unaffordable way. I was the Events Director in a voluntary organization at that time so I suggested that my team would organize the ceremony voluntarily and that suggestion was approved by our class. Eventually we managed to organize a brilliant ceremony with the attendance of all our class.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
Oct 22, 2017   #2
This is a very effective leadership and influencing presentation. In fact, it is so effective, that it even carries a little bit of networking skills in the narrative. It would be better if you found a different way to frame the way that you gained the help of someone else to help with the project because I would very much like you to save that networking presentation for the networking essay. It will be of tremendous help and impact to your application. Perhaps you can gloss over it in this essay by saying that "I led the team towards success by finding the right person to assist us with the completion of the task." That way, you completely evade the networking that was involved so you can use it later on in the more appropriate essay presentation.

You will need to separate the aforementioned paragraph into at least 2 paragraphs that discusses each scenario separately. That way the narrative becomes easier for the reviewer to read through and remember. Right now, it is a bit hard to keep track of the message in the presentation because the whole story is bunched into one paragraph.

Your concluding paragraph totally removes the impression that was created by your statement before it. I would like you to consider removing that paragraph and writing a different one instead. One that explains how your leadership and influencing experience has allowed you the opportunity to develop your own definition of leadership. State the new definition, the close the essay.
OP Eng Mo 2 / 2  
Oct 28, 2017   #3
@Holt
Please I have an enquiry, I was told that chevening search for essays using search engines to ensure that you have not plagiarised your essays. Would the presence of my essay here on the forum make them think I copied from here and in turn they will eliminate my application ? I am sorry for disturbance but that is an important point for me
Hiwi_Life 10 / 31  
Oct 28, 2017   #4
@Eng Mo
As far as it is your work you don't have to worry about it and also you are asked to give your real name when you register in this forum in order to protect your work and to avoid plagarizm. So, even if they check it as far as they find it here as your original work it will not cause any problem.


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