Chevening Scholarship Essay - HUMAN RESOURCES MANAGEMENT

Dear all, need your help to review my essay for Chevening. Thank you for your help.. :)

1. LEADERSHIP AND INFLUENCE QUESTION

Chevening is looking for individuals who will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer. (minimum word count: 100 words, maximum: 500 words)

Management skills, such as leadership, communication and decision making are important. With those aspects, I could manage operations work smoothly. I have led and organized my team to achieve department goals by creating clarity of purpose, process and roles. It's made my decision more logical, informed and fair so my team committed and contributed effectively. My responsibilities are pack-out activities include outgoing and incoming personal effects for around 12,000 employees' both national and expatriate. With limited workers, only 7 persons; I have to plan and coordinate pack-out request on time. To influence workers, first thing that matter is I must manage myself to be a good example. Management begins with me; how hard they work, their level of personal commitment, their willingness to accept my influence, will depend in large part on the qualities they see in me. Productive influence arises from workers trust in me as leader. That trust has two components: belief in my competence (I know what to do and how to do it) and belief in my character (my motives are good and I want my people to do well). Communication is one of my greatest strength; therefore I could handle team and clients from many background, cultures and nation. Pack-out activities have a long and continuous process also involve many departments. I have to work cooperatively with other departments including Human Resources, Industrial Relation, Security, Containers, Cargo Transportation, Shipping, Export Import and delivery agents.

one essay at one time

@yonas

Please one essay at a time.

You Career Plan section is completely unsuitable. It should be a strategic plan how would you REALLY do rather than what is IDEALLY done by a educated man. You should change it immediately.

@henricuspria
Thanks for advice, will edit my thread immediately.. :)

@yonas
For the leadership essay, you should show your leadership and influential abilities by giving examples of a problem you solved at your workplace/for the team you manage.

For the studying in the UK essay, you should explain why you have settled on the 3 courses, with each course in its own paragraph.

@bmKimmy
Thank you Bilhah.. :)

Yonas, you have some usable elements of a leadership and influencing essay in this draft. It is just getting lost in translation. You need to focus your revision on a few things before you can make this work for yourself. The first thing you have to do is explain what leadership position you have in your office at the moment. That means, you need to tell the reviewer why you are a leader at this point in time. What evidence of leadership do you have among your peers? This is where you can discuss the responsibility of packing for these people with only 7 people on your team. What examples of leadership by example can you share with the reviewer? How did your team react to this? Would you say that this started your influential effect on them as well? Why is this pack out activity so important that they could lose heart or get tired of doing it? Where does your influence fit in this scenario? If you can clarify these unclear points, the essay might turn into a somewhat usable draft, still in need to review and final editing.

@Holt
Thank you for your review Mary Rose.. :)