Civil Engineer - networking and Influence skills - Chevening

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networking and Influence skills

I have gained networking and Influence skills by working as a Civil Engineer. Working as a civil engineer has required using communication skills to approach work issues and discussions with clients, managers, and laborers. It has developed through meetings, executing the work, and coordinating between different disciplines in the project. For instance, in a project I had worked on, I had to make a list of vendors and contractors and use interpersonal skills such as communication, negotiation, and pursing to reach a reasonable price that fulfills the project budget. Furthermore, managing the project's teamwork was not an easy job without using network and influence skills such as encouraging, motivating, and coaching.

The opportunity of being a Chevening scholar would allow me to expand this skill and consequently engaging in the >>>>>>> Chevening community to develop youth initiatives. Besides, I would use these skills in my career as an infrastructure engineer to lead the initiatives for innovative solutions to this sector.

You have not written a proper networking and influencing essay. You have to write 500 words for each of the 4 scholarship essay questions. Try to show the evolution of your networking and influencing skills development. You can use 250 words each to better illustrate how you developed your influencing skills, which led to your network creation, then explain how you used the two in a coordinated effort in the past. Your current presentation is not effective. It doesn't help the reviewer understand what sort of networking and influencing skills you have developed over time. Consider discussing how your networks have helped you become a notable influence within your company or community and discuss it. Personally, I would focus on the professional aspect of the development since Chevening is looking for scholars who will have the ability to help promote their network and influence past, present, and future scholars. You have to show that you have a network that will actually help promote the scholarship program. I do not see any of these in your essay. It would be best for you to simply develop a more professional sounding and properly targeted essay for this prompt.

@Holt
Dear Mary Rose,
Thank your for your precious feedback.
Even though, I think it very difficulty for me to complete such a task.
Is there any general guidance or hints about writing and presentation for the essays, for instance, how the introduction would be, Is S.T.A.R will fulfill the task? Does an example for working self-employed help? How to make the essay sounds more professional and targeted with the Chevening requirements?

I am looking forward to hearing from you,
Regards,