Vangiespen, here is the new thread. I hope this one goes a long a way in answering the prompt. I changed the font of the key words I used in prompt.
Prompt: Story- write on a topic that is Important you and reflects who you are.
*- Here is a new introductory paragraph, I intend writing "Education" as a topic that is important to me and reflects who I am (Someone that wants to make tangible change through education)
*- I left second paragraph because this is a scholarship and other essays didn't provide space to express my financial background and need for a financial support.
*- conclusive paragraph, I try to describe how education reflects who I am. Good? What do you feel?
I believe that education is a tool Africa needs to alter tangible change, economical and technological. From elementary school, I always thought education is just going to school, learning and graduating. But as I am getting matured, I came to realised that education transcends the classroom and graduation. I now know that education is a tool, a tool used by great men to alter change. So, if I happen to describe myself. I will simply say "education craver" I have been craving for education right from my childhood, even when I don't know its true definition. Recounting the boundless struggles, rigors and challenges that bound my dreams of acquiring education, I am always motivated to strive and do more.
Fourteen year ago when my father lost his job and my mother was unemployed. Things were so difficult that my siblings and I, had no hope of acquiring formal education, so we were homeschooled. But my mother, who didn't had the opportunity to went to school and don't wants her children to encounter same problems she encountered, she had to ventured into selling of plucked mangoes on the street and combing working as a domestic worker in wealthy people's home, to enrolled us into free public school where I completed my elementary and secondary education.
Having father who doesn't have a degree to search for job nor have materials properties to give to his children. But he thought of education as the best legacy he can give to us, to sustain us throughout our lives, with this urge he joined a group of market workers just to support our education and make ends meet. Fortunately, his perseverance paid off when someone introduced him to cab work, where he works as a cab driver and makes cash delivery daily.
Apart from how education has shaped my intelligence and competency. After graduation from high school, the vision of acquiring tertiary education looks blur but I recounted how my parents used to tell us that their lack of education limited their effort in live. I stood positive and started working as a sales person to put up savings for my own educational needs and helping my family with our immediate needs. Initially I planned to work for many years to put up funds for my education, figuring out perfect balance between work and academics by engaging in tutoring in my leisure time, thereby renewing my academic stands. But I now believe that God made me found the X scholarship as a way of compensating my perseverance.
All these rigors and orientations have shaped my overall sense of future direction, influence my hope for the future and it has made me realised how education is important to me, my community, my country and a Africa as a whole and how it will make me stands as the pinnacle of hope for my community, Nigeria and Africa as a whole, to alter significant changes technological, economical and empower me to liberate my community from influx poverty. Education, an important tool to me.
Prompt: Story- write on a topic that is Important you and reflects who you are.
*- Here is a new introductory paragraph, I intend writing "Education" as a topic that is important to me and reflects who I am (Someone that wants to make tangible change through education)
*- I left second paragraph because this is a scholarship and other essays didn't provide space to express my financial background and need for a financial support.
*- conclusive paragraph, I try to describe how education reflects who I am. Good? What do you feel?
I believe that education is a tool Africa needs to alter tangible change, economical and technological. From elementary school, I always thought education is just going to school, learning and graduating. But as I am getting matured, I came to realised that education transcends the classroom and graduation. I now know that education is a tool, a tool used by great men to alter change. So, if I happen to describe myself. I will simply say "education craver" I have been craving for education right from my childhood, even when I don't know its true definition. Recounting the boundless struggles, rigors and challenges that bound my dreams of acquiring education, I am always motivated to strive and do more.
Fourteen year ago when my father lost his job and my mother was unemployed. Things were so difficult that my siblings and I, had no hope of acquiring formal education, so we were homeschooled. But my mother, who didn't had the opportunity to went to school and don't wants her children to encounter same problems she encountered, she had to ventured into selling of plucked mangoes on the street and combing working as a domestic worker in wealthy people's home, to enrolled us into free public school where I completed my elementary and secondary education.
Having father who doesn't have a degree to search for job nor have materials properties to give to his children. But he thought of education as the best legacy he can give to us, to sustain us throughout our lives, with this urge he joined a group of market workers just to support our education and make ends meet. Fortunately, his perseverance paid off when someone introduced him to cab work, where he works as a cab driver and makes cash delivery daily.
Apart from how education has shaped my intelligence and competency. After graduation from high school, the vision of acquiring tertiary education looks blur but I recounted how my parents used to tell us that their lack of education limited their effort in live. I stood positive and started working as a sales person to put up savings for my own educational needs and helping my family with our immediate needs. Initially I planned to work for many years to put up funds for my education, figuring out perfect balance between work and academics by engaging in tutoring in my leisure time, thereby renewing my academic stands. But I now believe that God made me found the X scholarship as a way of compensating my perseverance.
All these rigors and orientations have shaped my overall sense of future direction, influence my hope for the future and it has made me realised how education is important to me, my community, my country and a Africa as a whole and how it will make me stands as the pinnacle of hope for my community, Nigeria and Africa as a whole, to alter significant changes technological, economical and empower me to liberate my community from influx poverty. Education, an important tool to me.