Engineering Project Management - skills and knowledge do you hope to gain from your study programme

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What skills and knowledge do you hope to gain from your proposed study programme?
I work as an Auditor at the Inspectorate General of the Ministry of Transportation. I have not fully mastered knowledge of governance and management. Therefore, I propose Master of Engineering Project Management at Auckland University of Technology and Master of Public Policy at University of Auckland, study program Master of Engineering Project Management at Auckland University of Technology there are courses in economic finance engineer and integrated project management, where these courses are important knowledge for my future career to support the progress of development in the transportation sector. Meanwhile, in the Master of Public Policy at University of Auckland there are courses related to governance which can develop my knowledge and skills as an auditor so that in the future I can realize good and clean governance in the Ministry of Transportation. I really hope to be able to gain knowledge from one of the study programs that I am proposing to support my knowledge and career. After I have learned all that knowledge I will create good governance to accelerate progress in the development of the transportation sector so as to create a government free of corruption.

Have you written this statement in response to the AAS? You neglected to mention what scholarship this is for. Based on your university choices though, I am going to assume that is what you are applying for. Based on what I have read, your response is off base. You are giving a general response with vague references. You have to go into this statement with specific responses per university. The idea is to show that you see the value of every masters course in relation to your professional needs in terms of development or increasing your skill set. The post study reference is not necessary in this case. Focus only on the skills and theory reasons for your university choices.

afaik, AAS only accept 2 different university with same major. I think you need to re read the information regarding this scholarship again. hence, I suggest you to state only one university choice in this essay and more focusing to tell on how applying for this study program will help you develop your career.

Please, your essay is full of ambiguity; be specific and give practical examples on how you will use the knowledge, skill and connections to enhance governance and highlight one could probably limit you from executing these tasks.