Environmental problems are serious in many countries. Protection at an international level only.

Topic: environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect environment is at an international level. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

measures of coping with the environmental problems

Answer:
Environment problems are one of the most important challenges almost every countries which are facing. Whether international cooperation is the only way to tackle this is a controversial issue. My view is that citizens can take part in environmental protection.

First, It is obvious that human activities have a great impact on environment throughout. Both environmental contamination and conservation are a long - term process, and the government cannot meet this challenge alone. For example, if someone turn off the light when no one in room, which is a good way to save energy. So, whoever created this problem should solve it. If citizens have tense of environmental protection, they will make a great contribution to environment.

Moreover, public's wills and behaviors are a critical influence to government's policy. For instance, if seriously pollutant soil decreased the productivity of agriculture, it would be food shortages. Another instance, if the companies that manufacture such as plastic products switch to environment-friendly products instead of using throw-away products, it would reduce pollution. Those instances relate to government's policy.

That not to say that international cooperation cannot positively contribution. These efforts would be fail if government did not cooperate with each other. The multinational cooperation gives effective solution or set international standard for environmental protection. However, they need public's appreciate and support to bring a better result.

In sum, individuals on the planet can make a small difference. Meanwhile, global cooperation must shoulder their responsibility to encourage low-carbon lifestyle. By doing so can we make sure that we can hand the beautiful planet for our next generous, and the next generous after. (302 words)

Min, there was a total misunderstanding of the prompt on your part. The instruction is for you to agree or disagree with the given statement. As such, your opening statement should have contained the words "I agree / disagree with the opinion provided based on the following reasons". This is not an opinion based essay so to say "My view is that..." is a mistake. Always present the prompt requirements in the manner that you are expected to discuss it in the essay. The term "My view" is something related to an opinion essay.

Then, there is the problem of your actual discussion which focused on the national government responsibilities rather than the international community involvement that the prompt based the statement upon. While you present a good discussion, the information you provided was not in the manner that the prompt instructed. So it became even more obvious that you failed to properly understand the requirements of the essay. As such, I do not believe that you can get a score higher than a 4. The main reason being that your discussion format is inappropriate for the prompt requirements.

@minhuyen18
Hi, I'm fairly new to essay writing myself so I can't help much on the structure and uncommon vocabs but there're some grammar mistakes that I think you should take notice :

1. Environment problems are one of the most important i think serious would be a better word choice challenges almost every countries which are facing.

... way to tackle this issue/problem/obstacle is a controversial issue (I don't understand what you tried to say here. If it was me, i would say : ... is still a heated debate in present days ) . My view is that citizens can take part in environmental protection. This is very vague and seems not quite related to the topic >>> how about this : I disagree that we should depend heavily on global companies' action. .

..., and the government cannot meetface this challenge alone.
... light when no one isin the room, which it is a good way ...
SoTherefore, whoever created this problem shouldcan solve it. If citizens have tense of doesn't sound right, but I'm not sure if it's wrong, but you should use another word environmental protection, ...

( "So" isn't wrong, it's just not very academic)

... the productivity of agriculture, itthere would be food shortages and I think you should use real conditional clause here. Another instance,example is thatif the companies that manufacture such as plastic products switch (...) instead of using throw-away productswhat are you talking about? We all try to recyle used goods!, it would reduce pollution. Those instances responsibilities (though it's not much betterrelate depend on government's policy.

That is not to say that international cooperations cannot makepositively contributions. These Which efforts are you referring to? efforts would be fail ...

The multinational cooperations gives effective solution or set an international standard ...
However, they need public's appreciate you can use appreciation but I think only support is enough and support to ...

@Holt
Uhm I have a question. I thought this was an opinion essay, no? Is it mandatory to state "agree/disagree" in the opening paragraph? If I write something like I strongly believe this is not the optimal solution, does it count as misunderstanding the prompt?

I have received a warning because I asked a question instead of giving advice in the comment section of someone else's thread. I just wanna ask, if I saw a comment giving advice, and I also need clairification, how will I ask the adviser? Can I message them privately?

Also, it is possible to reply to 2 or more people in 1 comment? I thought it wasn't and then when I tried to combined my advice and my question, I couldn't edit my 2nd one because new comments was uploaded.

I think it would be better if you guys have the option to edit previous comments even after new ones were written, since we can avoid adding more comments unnecessarily. And to seperate asking comment adressed to the adviser from comment adressed to the person posting the thread would help both of them in their writing. I mean, what if the author didn't think of something, but by reading the answers for other's question, they were like : "aahh, I see!"

New member here so please excuse my impolite thread. It's definitely not my intention. Just voicing what I think

Please remember that you are supposed to give constructive criticism and helpful advice to student in the original thread he started. You have violated the rules of the forum by asking a question instead of giving advice. You may be suspended for such actions. Consider that a warning so please do not do it again. I am going to give you a response here because it might help the original poster improve his writing style. I repeat, do not hijack another person's thread again. There will be repercussions for you as a member of the forum.

An opinion essay normally carries the instruction "Discuss both sides and give your opinion." If you do not see that specific instruction in the essay, then it is not an opinion essay. In order to accurately paraphrase the prompt, you must always remember to use the keywords that are supplied in the original statement. So if you are asked "To what extent do you agree or disagree?" You have to clearly say "I agree with this statement to a certain degree and will discuss the reasons below." or state the opposite with "I disagree with this statement because..." .

If you do not state it in the manner provided by the essay, the tendency will be for your discussion to change its discussion format and discussion topic. That is something that unconsciously happens because you opted to not paraphrase the prompt using the supplied keywords. You are scored on your ability to to understand the discussion you are being asked to make. That is called "English comprehension skill" which is part of the task accuracy scoring. If you make a mistake in stating the action you are being required to take, then yes, that will be considered a misunderstanding of the prompt.