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I feel sympathetic when I see the cancer patients; Career goal



IonKim 1 / -  
Dec 8, 2013   #1
Prompt: discuss your career goal (no words limit, but I prefer to be fewer than 300 words) This is my first draft, please feel free to give me any kind of critique.

After I started my high school life, I encountered different science classes such as biology, physics, and chemistry, in which chemistry is my favor. I felt so excited about the chemical reactions and atomic structure. I learned we cannot live without chemistry: shampoo, soda, drugs, toothpaste and all material in our houses are chemistry. Chemistry like penicillin saves people's lives and changes the world into the age of antibiotic. Chemistry can create a beautiful world. Thus, in the second year I was in the United States while my English is still so limited, I chose AP chemistry as my first AP class to learn more new knowledge of chemistry.

However, I also learned the downside of chemistry. I feel sympathetic when I see the cancer patients lose their hair and suffer nausea because of the co-effect of chemotherapy. I feel guilty when I read the emission of carbon dioxide causing global warming. I felt sorrowful when I hear the news that Melamine in milk causing kidney stone in infants. The negative effect of chemistry hurt my heart. Yet, I understand the way to solve chemistry problem is chemistry. Who is the problem solver? Chemical engineer. I want to become a chemical engineer who can improve and save people's live with chemistry. I look forward to innovating the current drugs with lower co-effect. I feel excited to explore new material can reduce damage on people.

I believe I can achieve my career goal with hard work and delication.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 9, 2013   #2
After I started my high school life, I encountered different science classes such as biology, physics, and chemistry, in which chemistry is my favor. I felt so excited about the chemical reactions and atomic structure.

Chemistry was always my favorite subject throughout my high school career. I was excited about the chemical reactions and atomic structure.

I learned we cannot live without chemistry: shampoo, soda, drugs, toothpaste and all material in our houses are chemistry. Chemistry like penicillin saves people's lives and changes the world into the age of antibiotic

I learned that everything around us is chemistry, be it household material like shampoo, soda and toothpaste or medicines like penicillin that saves people's lives.


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